Brooding Nimbus


Darkness loomed over the place, 
Damp air hung like a shroud, 
Crows cawed in the distance, 
If ever you felt gloom, it was here, 
You could almost reach out and touch it, 
A cold mist cloaked everything, 
Not a hint of colour to be seen, 
The cobbled streets were deserted, 
except for the shadowy fog, 
Tendrils of vapours climbed around each house, 
Ready to gobble you up, 
                     if you dared to step out, 
Humidity clung with vehement fierceness, 
Black clouds darkled the evening sky, 
Waiting to unload heavy showers, 
Brooding nimbus 
                            longing to cry... 
The atmosphere was like a living breathing being, 
Someone hiding in the moist shadows, 
Sighing in stygian despondency, 
Waiting to show its anger, 
The calm before the storm...
Lightning cracked, 
                            thunder rocked 
                                                   the stillness, 
Big, fat raindrops fell in steady downpour, 
This was gonna be
                             a mighty thunderstorm... 

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Kauffman Avatar
August 1, 2023 at 12:39 PM
Jo, this poem drips with amazing, innovative, fresh images - "tendrils of vapors climbed," "sighing in stygian despondency," "humidity" clinging. This poem has dynamic foreshadowing with marvelous word usage, building tension and release. Congratulations on your win! Blessings of calm skies!
Poteet Avatar
July 22, 2023 at 3:59 PM
Delightful, Joanna. I hung on every word and phrase, waiting for the next thought. Nicely written with power and interest. Congratulations on your well-deserved win.
Brul Avatar
July 22, 2023 at 7:13 AM
Wonderful woven with profound imagery! Congratulations.
Ibeh Avatar
July 22, 2023 at 6:11 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest with this outstanding poem, Jo:-) I loved it! Wondrous imagery throughout!
Alex Avatar
July 22, 2023 at 5:58 AM
Very powerfully picturesque scene. Beautifully written. Congratulations!
Buhagiar Avatar
July 2, 2023 at 7:40 AM
I love dark poems. Sighing in stygian despondency, What a stunning line, but there are more of them. Dark emotions make this poem fascinating and stunning, dear Joanna.
Pandit Avatar
July 2, 2023 at 5:06 AM
You painted the onset of a nasty storm with perfection. The imagery brings forth expertly, the darkness above for the reader.
Mcintosh Avatar
July 2, 2023 at 4:29 AM
Brilliantly done. I just love this! Amazing writing and thought provoking... vivid and vibrating with insight. Beautiful words and poetry. God bless you with a win. Love, Gina
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