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June- 29- 2026

Broken Promises Poetry Contest

Sponsor- Silent One

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Broken Promises

(My old poem modified to suit the contest)

She heard the sound of pigeons overhead
Looking up she saw them whirling and gyrating
Forming ever emerging patterns in the sky
They soared on and on until they became
Fading black dots in the blue.

Such sights would have sent her to raptures
Sometime back......
But now when she sees them
She can only think of the years speeding by
And the promises broken
And her whole life- a fading black dot!

Why did he turn his back on her?
Why did he break his promise?
In her loneliness, demons of doubts 
Come to plague her and drown her
Into a pool of deep sorrow and tears.

She is infected with a virus of melancholy
She walks with lacerations in her soul
Pain consumes her without flame
Forever she wages a battle inside
To drive out the demons of dejection
But she feels as if a sharp knife
Is cutting right through her heart
And she winces at every chop
Though she tries hard to cover her bruises
They bleed red and make themselves known.

Once with his presence, the darkness 
Inside her was charged with light
He was her sky, her firmament
The ascent of her soul in the morning
And the bough of her homing at night. 
But dreams have sorely betrayed her.

Now like a stranger she waits at his doorstep,
Wondering if he would let her in.

Pain has sucked her out
In a leaking vessel, she collects her tears
To water the parched terrain
Of her drought- stricken domain
Now she lives in perpetual darkness
Fighting with black shadows
Day in and day out!
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Poet Avatar
July 8, 2026 at 1:00 PM
Back with hearty congratulations on your contest's well-deserved win, my dear friend, Valsa
Goldsmith Avatar
July 8, 2026 at 12:16 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading. Your "Broken Promises" is a powerful write. Have a blessed day with your win..........
Guptar Avatar
July 8, 2026 at 9:34 AM
Congratulations Valsa on your high win in this contest with a narrative on broken breath that holds the interest from beginning to end. The beauty of pigeons in flight, soaring in the sky and disappearing away stands as .cute contrast to the pangs of broken promises that follows....Wish you a blessed day
One Avatar
July 7, 2026 at 1:56 PM
I could feel the pain in your words.. how peoples promises change over time... something many will have to deal with.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
George Avatar
July 7, 2026 at 8:25 PM
Thank you so much dear Silent One for holding this contest and giving me a high placement.
Dietrich Avatar
June 29, 2026 at 11:17 AM
A very good entry for the theme. My entry also on this kind of creep but your poem is much more detailed and descriptive
Poet Avatar
June 29, 2026 at 10:25 AM
Beautiful poetry, Valsa. Dealing with betrayal is never simple; it remains in the delicate tissues of an inner being for a long time. Nothing is ever really forgotten.
Rodrigues Avatar
June 29, 2026 at 9:49 AM
Seems someone has developed the path of hope or despair…going along one path finds depression and loneliness.
Kapoor Avatar
June 29, 2026 at 8:12 AM
The impressions of sadness with grief is visible in allmost every line of your poem dear poet Valsa? My good wishes for your poem? Ravindra K Kapoor
DiMino Avatar
June 29, 2026 at 7:31 AM
Betrayal is never easy to deal with...lingers long in the sensitive tissues of a heart. One never entirely forgets.
Kendrick Avatar
June 29, 2026 at 5:20 AM
A deep emotional work you have penned in this one, Valsa. I am not sure exactly what the theme is for this contest, but this one reads like it could be a good contender because of its depth to emotion. Thank you for sharing it with us. Sara K.
Daniel Avatar
June 29, 2026 at 2:58 AM
A very sad poem, Valsa, all the best:)
Buhagiar Avatar
June 29, 2026 at 1:25 AM
a virus of melancholy: I must have that infection. I have tried to post a love poem to stop the infection.
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