Broken Heart

"A dagger of pain, a tear of grief,"
by Constance La France"

Pain, like a dark secret, will descend
it cares not how we fit into life
a recurring nightmare with no end
stabbing senses with razor-sharp knife
It transforms joy into hills of strife

Myriad ways for grief to consume
Disbelief midst the thickness of gloom
a flood of tears, like waves being tossed
hours alone, darkness fills the room
The heart is covered with bitter frost

Grief overwhelms as sadness invades
it's as if life has closed window shades
sadness finds the core of our being
fragile hopefulness becomes decayed
we need sun's exhuberant healing

Letting light in, we begin to feel
blossoms, trees, sunsets are again real
Brightly, sunlight glows warm on our face
Opening eyes, a promise  reveals
the entire world for us to embrace.

May 15, 2023
for "Writing Challenge - A Quotes 
by Constance La France
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023


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Date: 5/21/2023 12:29:00 AM
Ann, thank you so much for sharing your poem with us in my Writing Challenge !
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Date: 5/16/2023 11:55:00 AM
Dear Anne, grief is not easy to forget. Great poem with splendid emotions.
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Ann Peck
Date: 5/16/2023 3:21:00 PM
You're so nice, Victor! Grief is a personal feeling. I think it may be harder to take when we're young because we're not expecting it. Thanks!
Date: 5/16/2023 11:32:00 AM
Imagine a heart hurt so badly that it feels it's covered in frost. Oh, pity such a heartbreak that leads us to only feel comfort in darkness. Revealed in your last verse is the hope a brighter tomorrow. Accolades to you, Ann.
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/17/2023 11:57:00 AM
No need for sorrow. Your lines come from your inner most feelings. There's absolutely nothing wrong with using 'bitter frost.' It exemplifies exactly what you meant and is just fine as it is. ;-)
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Ann Peck
Date: 5/17/2023 11:44:00 AM
I'm sorry, Lin, I misread your comment, probably because I have felt, in retrospect, that the frozen heart part was a bit too much. :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/16/2023 3:31:00 PM
Nooo Ann. Don’t change a thing.
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Ann Peck
Date: 5/16/2023 3:17:00 PM
I agree, Lin--the frosted heart is a bit much :) I may have misread what Constance wants. I think sorrow is difficult to write about. Thanks for commenting.
Date: 5/16/2023 11:17:00 AM
You write SO well on this theme, Ann. I think Constance will like this a lot.
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/17/2023 11:56:00 AM
Ann, you wrote 'bitter frost' and bitter frost it should stay. I wasn't suggesting you change a thing. Our emotions lead us and never be afraid to write them as they come to us.
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Ann Peck
Date: 5/16/2023 3:30:00 PM
Or, maybe I overdid it, as Lin seems to suggest. I really, really don't like to write about emotional subjects because I'm never sure what is wanted. Thanks, though. You make me feel better :)
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