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a child acting tall no big deal it’s only gall hasn’t far to fall now beats his wife off the wall bullies don’t grow up at all

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I Am Anaya

Date: 8/25/2023 8:56:00 AM

Men never smacked me around unless I deserved it, I once had a tempura lover, was only lightly battered! Seriously I never understood how women stay with men who beat them, it destroys everyone involved. Many do stay, it's tourmented drudgery, and I shouldn't make light of it, but comic relief helps lift. Like you, David, I think it reinforces bad behavior to give kid's candy to shut them up. Spoiled rotten. Rewarding bad behavior, psychology 101. Pleased you chose your tanka monorhyme on this

I Am Anaya
Date: 8/25/2023 10:57:00 AM

It is not recommended to reward a dog with treats for barking. According to (ASPCA), if a dog is repeatedly rewarded for barking, it can learn to use barking to his benefit. Good thinking, David! ;) btw--there have been more deaths by mallings in the US from pit-bulls (poor things), because of a-butts who do not train them properly.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/25/2023 10:50:00 AM

You know me Anaya, I call it as I see it, even tempura batterings lol, yeah most if not all the bullies out there, started this behaviour in childhood, and it seemed to have morphed into the animal kingdom, I’ve seen people giving their dogs treats to try stop them growling and barking at passer-byers on the street, yeah like that works a treat too, brain dead’s, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/25/2023 12:15:00 AM

So true David, you're right, the parents have a lot to answer for often spoiling their kids to the point that they grow up thinking they can have and do what they want. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/25/2023 1:11:00 AM

Indeed Tom, I see so much of this bad behaviour being overlooked, even in my own extended family, and instead of checking the child they try give them sweets to stop it, why would anyone think that’s going to work, idiots! Then as the child grows up to be an overbearing bully they will still protect him and try blame his wife for not being understanding enough, Cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 8/24/2023 11:43:00 PM

Started in Childhood and not corrected, the abuse continued.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/25/2023 1:05:00 AM

Absolutely Lin, it’s a no brainier if, parents ignore their child’s bad behaviour and keep putting it down to, oh but it’s so cute (hee hee hee) instead of pointing it out to the child, I’m afraid their creating the monster themselves, cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/24/2023 12:19:00 PM

- A man who beats his wife is no man, David - ... two seconds too lat ... bad luck :( - hugs

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/24/2023 12:26:00 PM

That is indeed why I never used the word (man) in my tanka Anne-Lise, yeah literally 2 seconds two late, oh I don’t mind, at least I got it posted, cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/24/2023 11:52:00 AM

David, your writing is exquisite. It's endearing how you portrayed a child pretending to be taller than they actually are. It may seem insignificant, but it speaks volumes about their innocence. However, this innocence is short-lived, as they quickly succumb to the harsh reality of domestic violence, with the husband physically abusing his wife. It's disheartening to see that bullies never truly mature or change their ways.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/24/2023 12:05:00 PM

Thank you Lasaad, yes I was trying to point out that bullies never change their ways, sometimes their parents inadvertently create the monster by not nipping the problem in the bud when it starts, and go into a denial stage instead, a big analogy here, cheers David

David Kavanagh

Date: 8/24/2023 11:04:00 AM

Was written for Constance contest alas two seconds too late