Briane

Briane

how long 
before
my heart realizes
you have gone
my mind seems in sad collusion
but you have gone
i wait with a question 
on the tip of my tongue
nothing echoes down the hall.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Fleming Avatar
September 13, 2017 at 1:46 PM
There is a definite presence associated with this poem...it conveys a desperate air of dawning finality; it is both depressed and yet slightly hopeful in a strange and inexplicable sort of way...most peculiar. I really do rather like it, Patricia. My warmest regards! :) john
Rees Avatar
September 13, 2017 at 10:14 AM
One of life's greatest blessings, eventually becoming such deep sadness. Your few words speak such volumes.
Cresswell Avatar
September 13, 2017 at 11:06 AM
Thank you Peter. We were married for 38 years most of our adult lives together. The sudden wrench of lose can be overwhelming.
Pigeon Tart Avatar
September 12, 2017 at 7:42 AM
Such a potent piece, Patricia, a perfect pen, it sticks to the reader, lingers. hugs xomo
Cresswell Avatar
September 12, 2017 at 9:09 AM
Thank you Maureen for such encouraging praise.
Sivey Avatar
September 11, 2017 at 7:05 PM
This is such a sad write! I feel the power in your words, that of mild desperation, a desire to have him back! I really enjoyed reading your amazing poem here this evening! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!
Cresswell Avatar
September 11, 2017 at 10:37 PM
You are correct Russell. Funny thing is grief never passes you just learn to live with it after a while.
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