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Brewing Storms

A storm is brewing inside and out.
Can you hear distant thunder roll?
It mimics the buffeting of his clout,
clouds match the darkness of his soul.

Lightening strikes with its cruel bolts
As quickly as his hand pummels me.
The pain feels like a thousand volts.
From both angry storms I must flee!

Winds start gusting and blowing wild.
His screams match their howling force.
Brewing storms cannot be reconciled.
They leave devastation in their course.

I don't think I can take more vicious storms.
As cold rain washes over my battered face,
it mingles with warm teardrops of my alarm.
I must escape the furies of this raging place.


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 April 18th, 2016
 A Storm is Brewing
 by: Kelly Deschler

Copyright © Lin Lane | Year Posted 2016

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Connie Marcum Wong Date: 5/17/2016 4:03:00 PM I went to the same place you did with this contest Lin, only you did it better! Excellent! Congratulations on your win! #7 ; ) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/17/2016 4:59:00 PM Dear Connie, I just saw that yours placed higher...lol thanks for making me feel good. Lin Lane Date: 5/17/2016 4:07:00 PM Mine is not better than yours in my eyes, Connie. It's a judgement call by the sponsor. I admire you for always leaving very kind remarks.

Balveen Cheema Date: 5/17/2016 5:37:00 AM Only a strong Lin can brave through such storms! Congrats on your beautiful win, Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/17/2016 4:06:00 PM From the need to survive we can gather strength. Thank you, Balveen.

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores Date: 5/15/2016 10:49:00 PM Congratulations Lin on the placement of the contest Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/17/2016 4:05:00 PM Thank you.

Kelly Deschler Date: 5/15/2016 10:16:00 PM A stirring piece with a powerful use of metaphors... ABAB rhyming is not easy to do, but this was done so well, Lin. Great work! Congrats on a win! Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/17/2016 4:05:00 PM Thank you.

Robert Lindley Date: 4/21/2016 5:28:00 AM BACK AGAIN THIS MORN TO READ THIS EXCEPTIONAL VERSE. You truly have a great gift my friend....... Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 4/22/2016 1:44:00 PM Thank you so very much, Robert.

Joseph May Date: 4/18/2016 10:33:00 PM This is a great write Lin...you mesh the two storms very well....A 7 Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 4/19/2016 8:14:00 AM Thank you so very much, Joseph.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 4/18/2016 4:52:00 PM Lin, you have described fear of both storm and man so chillingly. Excellent entry my friend! This will be high on the winner's list! I did a parallel of storm and man in my poem too. # 7 ;) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 4/18/2016 5:37:00 PM Thanks so much, Connie. My fear of man was much stronger than my fear of the weather, but what I feared most was not having the emotional strength to leave that 'raging place.'

Robert Lindley Date: 4/18/2016 3:38:00 PM Glad you escaped the great and dark storm as I did myself many decades ago. Exceptional verse , fantastic rhyme and clear message that flows like silk. Surely will place high in that contest.A7 Fav'íng this gem because it mirrors an experience I had long, long ago.. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 4/18/2016 5:33:00 PM Thank you, Robert. Dark storms touch many of us to various degrees. I'm sorry you were drenched in yours, but what counts is that we both find shelter and survived. I love you compliments...thanks so much.

Charlie Smith Date: 4/18/2016 12:50:00 PM Better head to the cellar, away from those howling screams...Well done Lin, I'm sure this is deserving of a high placement in the contest. Charlie Login to Reply Charlie Smith Date: 4/18/2016 2:06:00 PM Stop by Mandina's for a bowl of Turtle soup and a !/2 loaf Oyster po-boy, tell um Charlie sent you... Lin Lane Date: 4/18/2016 1:56:00 PM Hiya, Charlie. No cellars in New Orleans, but I've no need to fear the emotional storms any longer.

Beautiful Scars Date: 4/18/2016 10:42:00 AM Lin, perfect for the contest! A lovely write..best wishes :)-luloo Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 4/18/2016 1:55:00 PM Thanks so much, Luloo. I appreciate your reading this one.

Jan Allison Date: 4/18/2016 8:38:00 AM so dark and sad Lin - i have also written about a stormy relationship:-( hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 4/18/2016 8:48:00 AM It was a dark and sad period, but the sun now shines on me. ;) Thanks so much, Jan. I just left comments on your write ;)

Joanna Daniel Date: 4/18/2016 8:23:00 AM Exactly how it would feel to be in a (double) storm. Love the last line "I must escape the furies of this raging place." Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 4/18/2016 8:31:00 AM ...and exactly how it did feel, Jo. I'm so glad I escaped. Thank you for reading and commenting on this one ;)