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Brewing Storms

A storm is brewing inside and out.
Can you hear distant thunder roll?
It mimics the buffeting of his clout,
clouds match the darkness of his soul.

Lightening strikes with its cruel bolts
As quickly as his hand pummels me.
The pain feels like a thousand volts.
From both angry storms I must flee!

Winds start gusting and blowing wild.
His screams match their howling force.
Brewing storms cannot be reconciled.
They leave devastation in their course.

I don't think I can take more vicious storms.
As cold rain washes over my battered face,
it mingles with warm teardrops of my alarm.
I must escape the furies of this raging place.


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 April 18th, 2016
 A Storm is Brewing
 by: Kelly Deschler

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Connie Marcum Wong May 17, 2016 at 4:03 PM I went to the same place you did with this contest Lin, only you did it better! Excellent! Congratulations on your win! #7 ; ) Lin Lane May 17, 2016 at 4:59 PM Dear Connie, I just saw that yours placed higher...lol thanks for making me feel good. Lin Lane May 17, 2016 at 4:07 PM Mine is not better than yours in my eyes, Connie. It's a judgement call by the sponsor. I admire you for always leaving very kind remarks.

Balveen Cheema May 17, 2016 at 5:37 AM Only a strong Lin can brave through such storms! Congrats on your beautiful win, Lin Lane May 17, 2016 at 4:06 PM From the need to survive we can gather strength. Thank you, Balveen.

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores May 15, 2016 at 10:49 PM Congratulations Lin on the placement of the contest Lin Lane May 17, 2016 at 4:05 PM Thank you.

Kelly Deschler May 15, 2016 at 10:16 PM A stirring piece with a powerful use of metaphors... ABAB rhyming is not easy to do, but this was done so well, Lin. Great work! Congrats on a win! Lin Lane May 17, 2016 at 4:05 PM Thank you.

Robert Lindley April 21, 2016 at 5:28 AM BACK AGAIN THIS MORN TO READ THIS EXCEPTIONAL VERSE. You truly have a great gift my friend....... Lin Lane April 22, 2016 at 1:44 PM Thank you so very much, Robert.

Joseph May April 18, 2016 at 10:33 PM This is a great write Lin...you mesh the two storms very well....A 7 Lin Lane April 19, 2016 at 8:14 AM Thank you so very much, Joseph.

Connie Marcum Wong April 18, 2016 at 4:52 PM Lin, you have described fear of both storm and man so chillingly. Excellent entry my friend! This will be high on the winner's list! I did a parallel of storm and man in my poem too. # 7 ;) Lin Lane April 18, 2016 at 5:37 PM Thanks so much, Connie. My fear of man was much stronger than my fear of the weather, but what I feared most was not having the emotional strength to leave that 'raging place.'

Robert Lindley April 18, 2016 at 3:38 PM Glad you escaped the great and dark storm as I did myself many decades ago. Exceptional verse , fantastic rhyme and clear message that flows like silk. Surely will place high in that contest.A7 Fav'íng this gem because it mirrors an experience I had long, long ago.. Lin Lane April 18, 2016 at 5:33 PM Thank you, Robert. Dark storms touch many of us to various degrees. I'm sorry you were drenched in yours, but what counts is that we both find shelter and survived. I love you compliments...thanks so much.

Charlie Smith April 18, 2016 at 12:50 PM Better head to the cellar, away from those howling screams...Well done Lin, I'm sure this is deserving of a high placement in the contest. Charlie Charlie Smith April 18, 2016 at 2:06 PM Stop by Mandina's for a bowl of Turtle soup and a !/2 loaf Oyster po-boy, tell um Charlie sent you... Lin Lane April 18, 2016 at 1:56 PM Hiya, Charlie. No cellars in New Orleans, but I've no need to fear the emotional storms any longer.

Beautiful Scars April 18, 2016 at 10:42 AM Lin, perfect for the contest! A lovely write..best wishes :)-luloo Lin Lane April 18, 2016 at 1:55 PM Thanks so much, Luloo. I appreciate your reading this one.

Jan Allison April 18, 2016 at 8:38 AM so dark and sad Lin - i have also written about a stormy relationship:-( hugs Jan xx Lin Lane April 18, 2016 at 8:48 AM It was a dark and sad period, but the sun now shines on me. ;) Thanks so much, Jan. I just left comments on your write ;)

Joanna Daniel April 18, 2016 at 8:23 AM Exactly how it would feel to be in a (double) storm. Love the last line "I must escape the furies of this raging place." Lin Lane April 18, 2016 at 8:31 AM ...and exactly how it did feel, Jo. I'm so glad I escaped. Thank you for reading and commenting on this one ;)