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Brevity- the Wake

The last of the cortege had shuffled quietly away
leaving him alone to face the first of countless days
bending, threw one more handful of soil into the pit
a final act of closure after that it would be it
at the kitchen table head on hands with empty stare
half eaten cheese sandwiches not going anywhere
a life so rich in memories once so clear now just a blur
phone rang as he gazed down and saw the number
it was her




submitted to –'Brevity – The Short Of It ' contest
sponsor – Casarah Nance
Viv Wigley 8th July 2015

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Lindsay Laurie Date: 7/16/2015 10:48:00 PM Hello Viv... these times can play with the mind and boy o'boy you put in a chill at the end - Lindsay Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/17/2015 12:42:00 AM Cheers, Lindsay, nothing like a bit of spooky every now and then. Regards, Viv

Poet Destroyer A Date: 7/15/2015 1:43:00 AM Viv, Congrats on your win. Always & Forever ~LINDA~ Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/17/2015 12:40:00 AM Thanks, Linda, Viv x

Skat A Date: 7/14/2015 12:09:00 AM Viv, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/14/2015 12:35:00 AM Thanks, Skat, Viv x

Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2015 12:36:00 PM Dropping back with my congrats Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/13/2015 1:25:00 PM Thanks Viv I am so happy Cas liked the twist:-) hugs Jan xx Viv Wigley Date: 7/13/2015 1:09:00 PM Thanks, Jan, I knew yours would soar, easy peasey. Viv x

Casarah Nance Date: 7/13/2015 8:48:00 AM What a great story. I enjoyed it and the twist, thank you for entering, and very well done! Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/13/2015 1:08:00 PM Thanks, Casarah, a good contest topic, reaping a good harvest. Viv x

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 7/11/2015 4:05:00 PM - A unique poem, Viv - Geez ending ! - Good luck in the contest - I wish you a peaceful and blessed weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/11/2015 11:22:00 PM Takk, Anne Lise, you have a great one, too. Viv x

Tim Ryerson Date: 7/11/2015 2:57:00 PM Mind blower! What a twist at the end Viv...Me thinks you got a winner here... Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/11/2015 11:17:00 PM Thanks, Tim. Can't beat a bit of spooky every now and then. Regards, Viv

Kim Van Breda Date: 7/9/2015 3:28:00 AM Cool...nice twist at the end. Lots of metaphoric implications going on behind the lines too xx~xx Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/9/2015 6:41:00 AM Thanks, Kim, it appears to have been well recieved thus far. Viv x

Robert Lindley Date: 7/8/2015 9:53:00 PM Great write and superb ending my friend. A7 Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/8/2015 10:01:00 PM Thanks Robert, hoping you're all hale and hearty. Regards, Viv

Kp Nunez Date: 7/8/2015 2:44:00 PM Oh...goosebumps! Reads like a prologue to a Stephen King novel, eh? This is good, Viv! Gl with the contest...oh, my smartphone is ringinggggggg Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/8/2015 8:43:00 PM Thanks, Kim. Chill. wooooooo............ Viv x

Constance La France Date: 7/8/2015 8:13:00 AM Viv this is outstanding, 7 so haunting and what a twist at the end , a sure winner in the contest and thanks for visiting my poem, drunken Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/8/2015 12:19:00 PM Thanks, BW, thought I'd have a double-edged sword for my title, wake being what many call the reception after a funeral, and wake as in to rouse from sleep. Viv x

Jan Allison Date: 7/8/2015 2:06:00 AM the spooky ending sure packs a punch - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/8/2015 2:34:00 AM Thanks, Jan. Hang on, I'd better get that phone.......AAAARRRGGGHHH!

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/8/2015 2:02:00 AM Wow! This is really impressive Viv. It was so moving it gave me chills. 7 I hope to see it at the top. Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/8/2015 2:32:00 AM Thanks, Connie. I wasn't overly familiar with the Brevity style, but it has much potential. Viv x

Julia Ward Date: 7/8/2015 1:35:00 AM I didn't expect THAT! Oh, shiver bumps at your poem's end! All the best for the contest... Julia, xx Login to Reply Viv Wigley Date: 7/8/2015 2:31:00 AM Thanks, Julia (cue theme tune from the 'Twilight zone') doo doo doo doo..... Viv x