Beryl Edmonds Poet Rhyme

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Written - 4th June 2026

Breathless Poetry Contest

Sponsored by: Constance La France

Breathless

 Breath can be taken away by what’s beautiful, or something detrimental too.
Quote by poet.
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I was becoming breathless
as if a noose squeezed my neck
I'd lost my way in the park
with daylight becoming dark.

Overcome with dread and fear
wishing I could disappear
Then I heard an awesome sound
trees talking to me out loud.

Telling me which way to go
the way that the wind does blow
I felt love, answered prayer
guiding me from out of there.
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Valsa George June 11, 2026 at 9:47 AM When we are lost and breathless, some help may come from above in some form and we feel relieved. Enjoyed your poem. Congratulations on your win. Beryl Edmonds June 11, 2026 at 2:23 PM Thank you Valsa, I’ve had help from strangers many times, it’s amazing how folk are willing to help when one is in distress… Beryl

Karen Jones June 11, 2026 at 2:47 AM Beryl this was interesting and spiritual! Enjoyed! Beryl Edmonds June 11, 2026 at 2:58 AM Thank you Karen, pleased you enjoyed the read… Beryl

Paula Goldsmith June 10, 2026 at 3:24 PM Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Breathless" write/story/Quote again. Have a blessed day with your wonderful win...................... Beryl Edmonds June 11, 2026 at 2:56 AM Thank you again Paula. Have yourself a wonderful day too… Beryl

sara Etgen-Baker June 10, 2026 at 3:13 PM certainly worthy words for your contest placement. Glad your prayers were answered. Sending hugs, Sara Beryl Edmonds June 11, 2026 at 2:55 AM Thank you Sara. The write is fiction, though I agree, prayers are answered whatever they be… Beryl

Constance La France June 9, 2026 at 3:12 PM Beryl, congratulations on your win in my Breathless contest with your wonderfully penned poem, I love your quote~ Beryl Edmonds June 9, 2026 at 3:21 PM Thank you Constance, it was a joy to write for your Breathless contest… Beryl

Victor Buhagiar June 8, 2026 at 1:35 AM Dear Beryl, the title lends a poet to some macabre ending, but you evaded that trap. Great poem and best of luck. Beryl Edmonds June 8, 2026 at 10:31 AM Thank you Victor, for commenting and the good luck wish… Beryl

Paula Goldsmith June 7, 2026 at 11:16 AM I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Breathless" write/story/Quote. "Good Luck" We both did this fun contest. I wish you would write more. Hope you are OK...  Have a blessed/great/fun week writing away........ Beryl Edmonds June 7, 2026 at 2:38 PM Thank you Paula, have read your Breathless poem and commented, it’s great… Beryl

Joanna Daniel June 6, 2026 at 6:34 AM Been there, great ending though, mine ended differently:) Beryl Edmonds June 7, 2026 at 2:40 PM Thank you Joanna… Beryl

Anne-Lise Andresen June 6, 2026 at 5:44 AM - A terrible feeling to get lost... great writing, Beryl :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs Beryl Edmonds June 6, 2026 at 3:52 PM Thank you Anne-Lise. Have a wonderful weekend too. Hugs returned, Beryl

Heidi Sands June 5, 2026 at 2:08 PM Very nice! Sweet guidance :) Beryl Edmonds June 5, 2026 at 2:11 PM Thank you Heidi… Beryl

JC Brul June 5, 2026 at 5:06 AM Such a wonderful piece!^___^ Beryl Edmonds June 5, 2026 at 11:01 AM Thank you JCB, most grateful… Beryl

Andrea Dietrich June 4, 2026 at 6:40 PM This has such a sweet ending. Believing in Christ and overcoming fear Beryl Edmonds June 5, 2026 at 1:15 AM Thank you Andrea, appreciated…Beryl

Sotto Poet June 4, 2026 at 12:08 PM Beryl, your poem about breathless is also stunningly crafted with great metaphors and decent wording. Beryl Edmonds June 4, 2026 at 2:43 PM Thank you very much Sotto, very grateful I am… Beryl

Victor Buhagiar June 4, 2026 at 9:40 AM A lively poem, with great rhyme and rhythm. Best for a high placement. Beryl Edmonds June 4, 2026 at 10:34 AM Thank you Victor, appreciated… Beryl