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Breathe Close To Me

Breathe close to me, let not your head droop nor your face grimace in fierce grief, for when I must leave, all will not leave with me, I promise.... The memories we made together will sit safe inside your mind's nest. I'll leave the photos too: I can't take them with me, so you'll have the proof we were young once, both pretty and foolish, drawn together like two bees put in a jar, buzzing round each other until their disparate sound becomes a kind of music. The photos and memories can take you back to all the places we loved in Italy and France and that windblown prehistoric Southern beach where our hearts first linked in tandem as flesh merged and the monk-like sun set slowly, silently, o'er that endless and holy ocean.... Yet they lie, those photos, static remembrances of our youth and middle years, for no canvas or brain can ever seize our love, the living thing it is, unseen but tangible as a hand, vulnerable yet enduring past anger, illness and even death... because time cannot diminish this Being born between us....

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Date: 3/28/2021 7:22:00 PM
A beautiful, touching poem, L.J.! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M
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L. J. Carber
Date: 3/29/2021 2:04:00 PM
Thanks Kim!
Date: 1/5/2021 6:52:00 PM
This is a wonderful free verse L.J I always enjoy your writing, congrats on a nice win!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 1/6/2021 11:28:00 AM
Thank you, John, much appreciated-- and may you have a good 2021!
Date: 5/25/2020 3:39:00 AM
Wonderful. Congratulations on your win in my contest, Kai
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/25/2020 11:05:00 AM
Thank you, Kai, for the honor--
Date: 5/24/2020 6:50:00 AM
This is a fav for me...you had me at ..will sit inside your minds nest. Congratulations on your premium win~
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/25/2020 11:07:00 AM
Thanks Jeanne-- and yes, I'm always happy when I can get a metaphor that works well--it ain't easy!
Date: 5/24/2020 6:31:00 AM
This is an amazing write! Beautiful memories that remain. Congratulations on your win :)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/25/2020 11:07:00 AM
Thank you, Aditi--I'm blushing!
Date: 12/24/2019 9:28:00 AM
Wow LJ this was amazing! Congrats on your top win!;)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 12/24/2019 1:52:00 PM
Thank you twice over, Brenda!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/24/2019 9:28:00 AM
I guess congrats once more!;)
Date: 8/20/2019 12:32:00 PM
OMG this is incredibly beautiful L.J.! Congratulations on your most deserving honor of First Placement! I am faving this beauty! : ) xxoo
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L. J. Carber
Date: 8/21/2019 8:20:00 AM
Thanks Connie--I'm glad you liked it--much appreciated!
Date: 8/20/2019 11:23:00 AM
Sad yet beautiful! Congrats on your win!;)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 8/21/2019 8:21:00 AM
Thank you Brenda
Date: 8/20/2019 10:22:00 AM
such depth, loved every word- that last stanza- wow...Thank you for your participation and congrats on your placement. I was honored to read your poem :)-luloo
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L. J. Carber
Date: 8/20/2019 10:49:00 AM
Thank you, Lu Loo- I'm especially honored as this is a love poem for my wife of 40 years.
Date: 7/4/2018 11:30:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this sad, poem of goodbye when goodbye will not ever be. Well done!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 7/5/2018 9:01:00 AM
Thank you, Susan, much appreciated!
Date: 7/4/2018 10:07:00 PM
Lovely. Congrats on your win, L.J.
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L. J. Carber
Date: 7/5/2018 9:01:00 AM
Thanks Line!
Date: 9/19/2017 6:20:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Eve ~`*
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L. J. Carber
Date: 9/20/2017 8:45:00 AM
Thank you, Eve, I appreciate it.
Date: 9/19/2017 12:02:00 PM
congrats LJC
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L. J. Carber
Date: 9/19/2017 12:39:00 PM
Thanks, Jack-- much appreciated!
Date: 9/19/2017 11:08:00 AM
LJ .CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this wonderful poem!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 9/19/2017 12:40:00 PM
Thank you, Broken Wings--it is much appreciated.
Date: 2/25/2017 4:05:00 PM
Very nice Len, thanks for entering this gem, congrats on a fine placement!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 2/25/2017 9:32:00 PM
Thank you, John, I am honored.
Date: 2/25/2017 12:23:00 AM
Thoughtfully and creatively penned ... congrats, my friend! :)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 2/25/2017 9:32:00 PM
Thanks, Greg, I appreciate the kind words.
Date: 7/25/2016 4:57:00 PM
Len C, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**
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L. J. Carber
Date: 7/26/2016 9:25:00 AM
Thank you, Skat-- I appreciate it.

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