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Breathe

Fast, fast as it comes It arrives, never leaves Looping, no end or beginning in sight Frozen in place yet moving Deep breaths

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Date: 2/10/2024 7:27:00 PM
Dear Olivia, you captured the essence of anxiety with haunting simplicity. The repetition of "fast, fast" intensifies the feeling of franticness, while "never leaves" adds a sense of inescapable pressure. The paradoxical "Frozen in place yet moving" perfectly embodies the internal struggle of feeling paralyzed yet somehow caught in a current. Your poem resonates deeply with anyone who has ever wrestled with anxiety, its brevity amplifying its emotional impact. Loved it! - Blessings, Daniel
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