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Breaking Us Apart

Wafts of a relentless rain remain change in chilled air stifles the night heavy hearts hopelessly rearranged me looking at you you looking at me but neither of us see winds drifting in and out pulling us apart Sunshine spilt out all her dreams into a bucket of mystery one we reached for but only filled with pride and misery lonely clouds drift away along side of you looking back at me but not able to see breaking us apart

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Pashang Salehi

Date: 2/6/2017 12:50:00 PM

...and I thought that you are talking about Donald Trump? LOL.... This is a great write... I 'm sorry..

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/27/2017 5:25:00 AM

Breakups take a real toll on the emotions, you can't eat or sleep, you are just miserable. You express the sadness well. Tim. : ) 7

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 1/27/2017 5:08:00 AM

I'm glad those days are over---thanks for reminding me Tim lol a very well composed piece-- a 7 I would say......

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 1/27/2017 3:34:00 AM

Love the contrast in your poem Tim.. the feeling is there in few lines.. the contrast supported how "apart" the breaking is.. :) enjoyed it.. Smiles, Olive ELoisa :)

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 1/27/2017 3:21:00 AM

Poetry always beautifies life no matter what. Enjoyed your writing my friend ,Tim.

Darren White

Date: 1/27/2017 1:18:00 AM

I think you captured this so very well... I know I'm too young to fully grasp all that happened. But I am certainly not to young to understand, and to love how you put it into words.