Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Breaking Point

I should have stopped him the first time he hit me,
But I was new to love, and thought love didn’t leave.
Several years later, love became my excuse,
I was little-larry-lies-a-lot, denying abuse.

Life wasn’t the dream of our love letters.
I was a victim of hope, that he’d change for the better.
I couldn’t admit that I’d made a mistake,
So I let him kick me, till I felt my leg break.

After that, I had to admit the truth, 
Stop lying to myself, and find a new roof –
I’d always had the support of my friends,
But it took me crutches to stand up to him.


9/4/11

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Jack Horne September 13, 2011 at 10:43 AM My apologies for missing so many contest results - many congrats on all your wins : )

David Williams September 11, 2011 at 3:28 PM hey Susan congrats on your well deserved win..David

Wilma Neels September 11, 2011 at 9:09 AM Wow, this is one empowering write Susan, so many stay for fear of not making it but you got out.. I love how you say "...it took me crutches to stand up to him." profound statement.. Congratulations on your win, love Wilma

Caryl Ramsdale September 10, 2011 at 4:44 PM Love that last line!!! Congratulations on your placement in Michael's contest. Have another creative day filled with blessings my friend. CR

Carol Sunshine Brown September 10, 2011 at 8:01 AM Congratulations on your win in Michael's contest Susan. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire September 10, 2011 at 3:55 AM Once the cycle of abuse begins, it is hard to break, Susan. Still, I'm glad you found the courage to leave this man. Congratulations on your win in Michael's contest. Love, Carolyn

Joyce Johnson September 9, 2011 at 7:15 PM Great poem but I am sorry if it is based on your life. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 9, 2011 at 6:43 PM CONGRATS SUSAN ON THIS WONDERFUL WIN WITH A DEEPLY MOVING POEM ABOUT AN ALL TOO FREQUENT SUBJECT OF ABUSE .. EXCELLENT PRESENTATION MY FRIEND..GLAD U GOT OUT OF IT..BRAVO..LUV..

Michael J. Falotico September 9, 2011 at 4:54 PM Congrats Susan on this moving write...touched many Im sure.... luv Michael

Carol Sunshine Brown September 7, 2011 at 2:18 PM Thank you for sharing today Susan. Love, Carol

Doris Culverhouse September 7, 2011 at 8:51 AM rough thoughts....love the way you brought this out. we lie to ourselves so much about many things....that isn't happening to me. Queen of denial.

Nette Onclaud September 7, 2011 at 8:05 AM a fearless write.. daunting and liberating, susan... love this! :) huggs, nette

John Smith September 6, 2011 at 6:08 PM Hope that he would change didn't work; it rarely does. Your poem says it well.

Jack Horne September 6, 2011 at 5:53 PM Powerful and very touching, my friend. I do hope it's just fictional - but if not, good on you for leaving the creep