John Lawless Poet Free verse

Breakfast of Good-Bye

Breakfast of Good-bye


fine remnants softly linger
along the edges - reminiscence,
soft ruffling of a curtain
tickled by a warm summer breeze,
cold scent of passion’s pillow
pressed into the face of yesterday,
lost shoe recovered from act one
flamboyant curtain call,
damp towel draped across a chair
auburn strands entwined,
dripping heart shape
foggy shower door,
wine glass blessed
her gentle passing kiss,
music faintly loitering
amid fading dream,
note that begged forgiveness
for the moment stolen,
fine wine, soggy pasta
breakfast of good-bye.



7/10/2015

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Scott Thirtyseven July 24, 2016 at 8:03 AM Found this on the home page, what a pleasure.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 22, 2015 at 2:52 AM Awesome write n win John! Big congrats!

Lycia Harding July 22, 2015 at 1:53 AM That is so sad and so lovely. Congrats on your win, John. xoxo

Connie Marcum Wong July 20, 2015 at 1:51 PM Wow John! No contest...this truly belongs at the top! You would make a great novelest. I love the way you have set the scene which draws emotion from the reader. This is superb and going into my favorites! A great choice from Charlotte.7 John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 2:01 PM Thank you Connie for the high praise and high marks.

Kp Nunez July 20, 2015 at 8:50 AM This surely deserves the top win, John. For all the reasons Charlotte already mentioned. Congrats! Kim John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 2:00 PM Thanks Kim, always nice to hear from you.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 20, 2015 at 7:59 AM John, the title is eye catching and the yours lines wow me again!! the imagery is heavy pulling!! CONGRATULATIONS!~Olive Eloisa John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 1:59 PM sort of the Cinderella syndrome - after the ball is over..Thanks for stopping by to comment

Julia Ward July 20, 2015 at 6:50 AM Your poem displays a gradual, evocative build-up to the final sad scene... Congratulations for all the imagery, John! John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 1:57 PM Thanks Julia, the climax/anti climax phases of passion.

Paul Callus July 20, 2015 at 3:31 AM Love your suggestive imagery and style of writing, John! Indeed, a worthy top winner! #7 Congratulations! // paul John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 5:08 AM Alway nice to hear from you Paul, thanks for stopping by to read and comment and for the high mark

Viv Wigley July 19, 2015 at 8:17 PM This is an absolute belter of a poem, John, must have been a memorable night. A worthy win, and a fave. Score- eleventy-four out of seven. Regards, Viv John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 5:08 AM Easy Viv, scores like that could put poetry soup into the UPDATE MODE.

Skat A July 19, 2015 at 6:09 PM Hello, John, I love this.. glad to see it on the top... SKAT John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 5:07 AM Thanks SKAT glad you enjoyed it.

Carrie Richards July 19, 2015 at 6:05 PM So softly sensual, and takes us to this morning afterglow! Lovely win, and well deserved !! Congratulations, John! John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 5:06 AM Carrie, I love the word afterglow as used to describe this write. There is a "passion" residue in the morning around the room, the house and the glow of the lovers.

Eve Roper July 19, 2015 at 3:53 PM John, wonderfuL write congratulations on your win hugs Eve John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 5:05 AM thanks Eve, I had some fun writing this.

Charlotte Puddifoot July 19, 2015 at 2:41 PM this one impressed me from the first time I read it; it's contemporary, subtle and understated, and very evocative - congrats on your 1st place win in my contest! John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 5:04 AM Thank you Charlotte for the simplicity of an "open poetry" contest as it allowed the muse free reign of subject and presentation.

Jan Allison July 19, 2015 at 2:35 PM Dropping back with my congratulations John:-) Hugs Jan xx John Lawless July 20, 2015 at 5:01 AM always appreciated Jan

Jaycee Cervenka July 11, 2015 at 11:31 AM Great description to convey a heated night of passion, as evidenced by the signs of its aftermath. Hope this does well. John Lawless July 11, 2015 at 11:54 AM Thanks for stopping by to read and comment and don't tell Ian I snuck in a non-footle....

Jan Allison July 11, 2015 at 11:14 AM what amazing imagery John - good luck in the contest - i wasn't going to post my poem until tomorrow but it is filling so fast i will do it today:-) Hugs Jan xx John Lawless July 11, 2015 at 11:20 AM I know Jan, I was surprised at how quickly it was filling also. It seems the summer heat has the muse warmed up and ready to write.