Charlie Smith Poet Free verse

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Brainstorm

From an insufferable, unceasing rain of disappointment,
I try to hide my scars under the cloak of a smile.
Alas, this master of disguise, fools but one.
My dreams are like a reverent prayer
that's lost its relevance to love.
Shrouded in ominous clouds of deception,
I am a refugee of doubt with no joy in reality.
I wade through poems that never rhyme,
from memories that never mend.
I cower from this rumbling squall of loneliness 
and shrink from the shards of misdirected words.
The mantle of hope escapes my ambitions, forever silencing my courage.
I am drowning in discontent.

Brainstorm Contest
Sponsored by John Hamilton
10/16/2018
1st. Place

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Warren Doll November 19, 2018 at 8:19 AM Hi Charlie, congratulations on your number 1 win. Well deserved for this magnificent poem. I especially liked the last two lines, Warm wishes~ Warren Charlie Smith November 25, 2018 at 11:03 AM Thank you Warren...

Arthur Vaso November 14, 2018 at 11:29 PM A poem that resonates with me, loved this one! Charlie Smith November 15, 2018 at 11:45 AM Thank you Arthur...

Sara Kendrick November 14, 2018 at 3:06 PM Congrats on your winning work. Way to go. A very sad last line. I hope that the situation has improved. Thanks for stopping by. Sara Charlie Smith November 15, 2018 at 11:44 AM Thank you Sara...

Andrea Dietrich November 5, 2018 at 6:30 PM I am seeing congrats here and that you took first place as well. BIG congrats. It was so well deserved. Charlie Smith November 15, 2018 at 11:44 AM Thank you Andrea...

Lin Lane November 1, 2018 at 12:47 PM Dear Charlie, I applaud your lines and your win with these words. My favorite lines are: "My dreams are like a reverent prayer that's lost its relevance to love." Charlie Smith November 1, 2018 at 12:56 PM thank you Lin...

Jay Moore October 29, 2018 at 2:57 AM Man you said! Deep, Great job Charlie Smith October 29, 2018 at 1:19 PM Thank you Jay...

CayCay Godwin October 27, 2018 at 8:06 PM You did crazy most profoundly, Charlie. I am honored to share first place with you, and I am pleased - smiling. Poetry hugs ... CayCay Charlie Smith October 28, 2018 at 10:19 AM The honor was all mine...

Warren Doll October 26, 2018 at 9:51 PM Charlie a very well deserved 1st place. This is brilliant and a fav for me~ Warren Charlie Smith October 26, 2018 at 9:53 PM Thanks Warren...

Kai Michael Neumann October 26, 2018 at 11:15 AM Sorry, my words got ahead of me...not without an inkling of hope flowing from your pen...Kind wishes, Kai Charlie Smith October 26, 2018 at 9:44 PM It's ok...

Kai Michael Neumann October 26, 2018 at 11:14 AM Wow. Amazing, insightful and heartfelt. And not with (so I hope) an inkling of ink, retrieved with the ink of your pen. Congratulations on your win, Kai Charlie Smith October 26, 2018 at 9:44 PM Thank you Kai...

Debjani Mitra October 25, 2018 at 11:32 PM This is so poignant .. I read it earlier also twice and had a brainstorm ..that this will win Charlie Smith October 26, 2018 at 9:34 AM Thank you Debjani...

Deb Radke October 25, 2018 at 6:59 PM Congratulations on your fine piece of writing taking first place in the contest. Very well deserved. Deb Charlie Smith October 26, 2018 at 9:33 AM Thank you Deb...

Anne-Lise Andresen October 25, 2018 at 1:44 PM - Back to congratulate, Charlie :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Charlie Smith October 26, 2018 at 9:33 AM Thank you Anne-Lise,,,

John Hamilton October 25, 2018 at 12:41 PM This is a spectacular write Charlie, I think my fave from you, congrats on a great shared win! Charlie Smith October 26, 2018 at 9:32 AM Thanks for sponsoring the contest and for your generous consideration...

Joanna Daniel October 22, 2018 at 6:21 AM A great poem for the contest, Charlie :) Charlie Smith October 22, 2018 at 11:42 AM Thank you Jo...

Andrea Dietrich October 20, 2018 at 11:36 PM You did this SO well, Charlie. I hope it's a winner for you. I simply could not get the muse to come to me for this one!! Charlie Smith October 22, 2018 at 11:42 AM Thank you Andrea...

Vladislav Raven October 20, 2018 at 2:08 PM Hi Charlie, once again you create a wonderful, poetic gem. I love each poetic line, the imagery sings in the mind. This is one i can read again and again. Good luck in the contest. Has to be a fave Charlie. Have a wonderful weekend. Your friend always....Mike. Charlie Smith October 22, 2018 at 11:42 AM Thank you Mike...

Paul Callus October 20, 2018 at 10:20 AM This is metaphorically beautiful, Charlie, and I love the poetical language and phrasing. Goes to my favs....Regards // paul Charlie Smith October 22, 2018 at 11:42 AM Thank you Paul...

Heidi Sands October 19, 2018 at 5:33 PM Your words have brought us into the mind of someone in this place and this is great for the contest :) Charlie Smith October 20, 2018 at 9:34 AM Thank you Heidi...

Mark Peterson October 19, 2018 at 5:30 PM Ah, I hear the turnstile click over once again, as yet another climbs into the arena, while outside the line of hopeful poets now dwindles by just one. And within, all eyes are on the dais and the collective group of thumbs. Welcome, Charlie, join hands—prepare to meet your fate. Charlie Smith October 20, 2018 at 9:34 AM I'm not sure this is a good thing Mark, but thank you for such a gracious thought...

Deb Radke October 19, 2018 at 12:02 PM This is very good. Not one word is superfluous. Best wishes. I'm glad I read your poem. Deb Charlie Smith October 20, 2018 at 9:35 AM Thank you Deb...

Silent One October 17, 2018 at 3:35 PM Many people will suffer or suffer from such things.. You described it very well and poetically... Charlie Smith October 17, 2018 at 3:41 PM Thank you SO...

Agnes Krampe October 17, 2018 at 3:27 PM Great portrayal of what goes on in a tormented mind. I hope you feel more at peace than this. Charlie Smith October 17, 2018 at 3:40 PM A fictional contest response to be sure Agnes, thank you for your concern...

Winged Warrior October 17, 2018 at 10:09 AM I know a shrink we could call...only 50 pesos...you go first...great write, Charlie...love & pesos...^WW^ Charlie Smith October 17, 2018 at 11:00 AM You didn't send the number??? Thanks WW...

Susan Ashley October 16, 2018 at 9:26 PM The loneliness and hopelessness of depression is expressed with melancholy emotion and metaphoric beauty, Charlie. The poignancy and exquisite ache of your verses touch me deeply. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan Charlie Smith October 17, 2018 at 10:14 AM Thank you Susan...

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