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Dark, deep, warm-black arms of an endless night wrap me ... head thrown back in abdication, arms spread wide in surrender, falling backward, back, back, onto a hard dogwood blackness. Nails of my own stark weakness fasten my hands to a weighty Tree of terrifying introspection ... poison saturates my blood, courses with its curses through the very vessel my soul inhabits, dictates to me by the minutes the movements of my muscles, states of my vapid organs, thus, responses and emotions, true, Like the visceral, mighty hand of some morbidly jealous god, squeezing the true and the good from every last cell of my being, the strength and health built by a lifetime of good habit and task, torn asunder by a guileful beast, a duplicitous, faceless monster That I invited in from wintertide like some pitiful, starving fawn. Oh, it IS pitiful in its treachery, and it starves, oh yes, it starves, with a hunger for souls and lives and accomplishments and truth, and it eats them ALL with a lust unending, and a ravenous fury, Laughing at you with a Cheshire grin, your own warm, crimson blood on its shining, chiseled teeth. And while you tremble in horror at its stark visage, while you stare transfixed into lifeless black eyes, the face changes, the abomination transforms into a beauty so pure And compelling, that your only thought and desire and compulsion is to drink it in with a kiss as deep as the Universe itself .. to pour yourself into it with every passion and emotion you can scrape from the ice-flaked walls of your conscience, to merge with it, join it in All abandon and care and affliction, and give yourself whole to the dim, shadowy vehemence complete, while the deafening roar of your own screams and scratchings, plays a somber requiem, final, a sickly sweet song ... Of obliteration. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Brainstorm" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 10/26/2018 11:08:00 AM
That is a masterpiece. I hope after obliteration starts the rebuild...Congratulations on your well deserved win, Kai
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Date: 10/25/2018 6:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your first place win with this outstanding piece of writing. It is so very well deserved. Deb
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Date: 10/25/2018 1:36:00 PM
- A wonderful writing, with strong anxiety and deep depression ... each verse gives each word a great deal of weight, Gregory - Congratulations with well deserved 1st place in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/25/2018 12:49:00 PM
Well done Gregory, congratulations on a terrific piece...
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Date: 10/25/2018 12:37:00 PM
So Greg what can I say...another stunning write, congrats on a fine shared number 1!
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Date: 1/12/2018 8:07:00 AM
Life has a way of making one oblivion ready! Of course, you said it much more poetically and dramatically, a mood my pen and I have been in more than once, but never by choice (that I recall.) Great write, truly. I marinated in each line. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/19/2018 11:45:00 PM
I adore this comment ... "marinated in each line"!
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Date: 1/12/2018 6:36:00 PM
Ooh I love that comment/imagery, CayCay - "marinated in each line" ... wow, that's exquisite, and am so flattered by such description! Thank you so much for these wonderful words, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/11/2018 5:05:00 PM
wow, this is powerfully written, Greg, This "faceless monster" is a heartless beast. I'm in awe of your writing.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/11/2018 10:20:00 PM
Thank you very much, Becca, that's so kind of you ... I'm glad you liked this one, my friend! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 1/10/2018 9:29:00 PM
Although in ‘Free Form’ (for many an excuse for random phrasing), you have created poetry that does have form that appeals and enhances the descriptive power of your words- impressive.
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Date: 1/10/2018 10:17:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Geoffrey, and I am humbled by your very sincere comments ... blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 1/9/2018 7:56:00 AM
so poignant Greg, loved this poem very much, good luck it will place high I'm sure ;) -luloo
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Date: 1/10/2018 7:30:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Luloo - thank you so much, My Friend! :-) <3
Date: 1/9/2018 5:38:00 AM
Addictions is a very difficult thing and something very personal, I felt the real emotions through your words.. A dark and deep poem highlighting the issues... Excellent write Greg..
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Date: 1/10/2018 7:29:00 PM
Thank you so much, S1 ... it is a lifetime battle, and one that has much misunderstanding surrounding it, and little compassion. I hope I can help to remedy that in some way - I believe that's why I'm still here, walking this marvelous life! :-)
Date: 1/8/2018 8:44:00 PM
Superbly done, Gregory. GL with this strong winner.
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Gregory R Barden
Date: 1/10/2018 7:27:00 PM
Thank you very much, Line - best to you, friend! :-) <3