Brain Surgery With a Pen

So I tried to laugh it off, told myself that it was fine
The blood stains on the ground help me feel alive
I look to you to end the nightmare with a happy dream
Before you made it, I fell to pieces, and I lost everything.
I don't know what hurts the most-
Knife in side or stone in throat,
All I know is that this room won't quit spinning.

I wake in blood
I wake in sweat
Is this my life?
Who's in my head?
I woke up bleeding
Tears from my eyes
I said I'm sorry
For using my life.

Wake me up blackness darkness.
Let me fester inside my mind.
Let this cancer grow to completion.
Put a choke-hold on the heart.
I can't lie that the knife went deep,
My pen cut deeper...

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 8/31/2014 1:57:00 AM
very special write, poet!~ ~
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Date: 12/19/2011 11:39:00 PM
Dalton, a late~ congratulations on your wonderful win. In my "you pick a poem contest" ;-) Thank you for the support,.hope you are enjoying your holidays~.p.d.
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Date: 12/19/2011 5:38:00 AM
Congratulations on your super win in P.D.'s "It's Up To You" contest Dalton. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/18/2011 3:40:00 AM
Oops!Sorry...'Dalton'
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Date: 12/18/2011 3:39:00 AM
Wonderful poem Brian.Congrats on your win.
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Date: 12/17/2011 2:10:00 PM
A lot of emotion in this one Dalton. Well done and congratulations
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Date: 9/8/2010 8:53:00 PM
Really awesome last line here!
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Date: 9/8/2010 11:34:00 AM
Could feel the pain and anguish. Well written.
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Date: 9/8/2010 6:44:00 AM
Very awesome but creative write, Dalton
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Date: 9/7/2010 9:27:00 PM
Hi Dalton hope this is for the dream contest, excellent poem. Harry
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