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Boys With Toys

inside white fences

boys play at war with toy guns

miles from their nice homes. . .

villagers tremble before

a rifle-bearing child’s glare


Aug. 26, 2015

Copyright © Andrea Dietrich | Year Posted 2015

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Moom Rahaman Date: 12/1/2015 3:52:00 AM Very touchy... Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 9/16/2015 1:20:00 AM And back again with big congrats on ur superb win! Login to Reply

John Lawless Date: 9/15/2015 7:41:00 AM A sad comment on our world and the manipulation of youth through fear and torture. Subtle use of the Tanka. Login to Reply

Ralph Sergi Date: 9/15/2015 6:42:00 AM Hi Andrea: congrats on your win. A sad but true event in many places. Login to Reply

Michael Tor Date: 9/15/2015 5:56:00 AM Congrats Andrea on your clever win. Login to Reply

Balveen Cheema Date: 9/15/2015 4:19:00 AM Congrats on your win, Andrea!These toys have ravaged mankind. Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 9/14/2015 1:35:00 PM nice win. SKAT Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 9/14/2015 11:58:00 AM Powerfully said. Amazing isn't it, how a tanka can capture so much in few words! Congrats to you, Andrea! Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 9/14/2015 10:55:00 AM very powerfully penned Andrea many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/14/2015 5:39:00 AM Andie, I really like the last four lines of this tanka.. meaningful!! However, the first line regarding the white fences.. ( me and James wished we know the writer of this because we want to know what you referring too)..... but the other lines take it all: the contrast between videogames and real one. CONGRATULATIONS and thank you for participating!!! =`) ~Olive Eloisa Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/14/2015 5:46:00 PM thanks for the win. Maybe it is not in other countries. White fences rare a symbol over here for the "good life" and a secure environment. So I was contrasting those safe happy kids playing at war vs. the other poor kids!

Arthur Vaso Date: 8/28/2015 8:02:00 PM Wow Andrea so powerful, loved this! and to think, it took A Tank a to tell the tale!! Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 8/28/2015 6:22:00 PM You compare harmless games with ugly reality, and the contrast is stark and strong. No doubt...this is abuse of human rights. // paul Login to Reply

Jennifer Walker Date: 8/28/2015 3:33:00 PM Frightening isn't it. That what is a toy in one place is a weapon in another. Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 8/28/2015 4:54:00 AM Wonderful tanka Andrea! Wish you luck in contest! Login to Reply

Sandra Haight Date: 8/27/2015 7:09:00 PM Very powerful words you chose for your Tanka that expresses two different worlds, Andrea. So much said in so few words about this horrible abuse. I chose the same visual - different form and more words! All the best for the contest. Sandra Login to Reply

Jill Spagnola Date: 8/27/2015 6:18:00 PM Your visual and verse combine into a powerful horrendous statement!...jill Login to Reply

Tim Smith Date: 8/27/2015 5:47:00 PM Reality in war torn countries. To us it is unimaginable. Real life Call of Duty with dire consequences. Login to Reply

Ilene Bauer Date: 8/27/2015 3:44:00 PM you've made the point so well, andrea! well done! Login to Reply

Nette Onclaud Date: 8/27/2015 2:44:00 PM the play of contrast is so dramatic, andie... sad for our youth but wonderfully conveyed.. huggs Login to Reply

Judy Konos Date: 8/27/2015 2:41:00 PM You certainly brought out the pinpoint for this one....it's a wow wow Andrea... Login to Reply

James Inman Date: 8/27/2015 1:55:00 PM Poignant to the point and with flare, very nice Andrea. Login to Reply

Greg Hoffman Date: 8/27/2015 1:21:00 PM Very true,luck of the draw as to where you were born.Well done Login to Reply

Daver Austin Date: 8/27/2015 1:11:00 PM Boys love war games. I used to make guns out of old orange crates. How sick is it to let children murder. good work Love, daver Login to Reply

Matthew Anish Date: 8/27/2015 12:31:00 PM Yes - war games are a problem - they lead to real war. I do remember playing with toy soldiers as a kid. Stimulating write! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 8/27/2015 9:56:00 AM Yes.......sad and startling contrast to the innocence of children playing war ....and the wars of reality!! Even I played with brother, pretending ......never giving thought to the violence going on in the world. If only all children couldn't savor their innocence, what a sweet world it could be. Login to Reply

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