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inside white fences boys play at war with toy guns miles from their nice homes. . . villagers tremble before a rifle-bearing child’s glare Aug. 26, 2015

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Moom Rahaman

Date: 12/1/2015 3:52:00 AM

Very touchy...

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 9/16/2015 1:20:00 AM

And back again with big congrats on ur superb win!

John Lawless

Date: 9/15/2015 7:41:00 AM

A sad comment on our world and the manipulation of youth through fear and torture. Subtle use of the Tanka.

Ralph Sergi

Date: 9/15/2015 6:42:00 AM

Hi Andrea: congrats on your win. A sad but true event in many places.

Michael Tor

Date: 9/15/2015 5:56:00 AM

Congrats Andrea on your clever win.

Balveen Cheema

Date: 9/15/2015 4:19:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Andrea!These toys have ravaged mankind.

Skat A

Date: 9/14/2015 1:35:00 PM

nice win. SKAT

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/14/2015 11:58:00 AM

Powerfully said. Amazing isn't it, how a tanka can capture so much in few words! Congrats to you, Andrea!

Jan Allison

Date: 9/14/2015 10:55:00 AM

very powerfully penned Andrea many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 9/14/2015 5:39:00 AM

Andie, I really like the last four lines of this tanka.. meaningful!! However, the first line regarding the white fences.. ( me and James wished we know the writer of this because we want to know what you referring too)..... but the other lines take it all: the contrast between videogames and real one. CONGRATULATIONS and thank you for participating!!! =`) ~Olive Eloisa

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/14/2015 5:46:00 PM

thanks for the win. Maybe it is not in other countries. White fences rare a symbol over here for the "good life" and a secure environment. So I was contrasting those safe happy kids playing at war vs. the other poor kids!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 8/28/2015 8:02:00 PM

Wow Andrea so powerful, loved this! and to think, it took A Tank a to tell the tale!!

Paul Callus

Date: 8/28/2015 6:22:00 PM

You compare harmless games with ugly reality, and the contrast is stark and strong. No doubt...this is abuse of human rights. // paul

Jennifer Walker

Date: 8/28/2015 3:33:00 PM

Frightening isn't it. That what is a toy in one place is a weapon in another.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/28/2015 4:54:00 AM

Wonderful tanka Andrea! Wish you luck in contest!

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/27/2015 7:09:00 PM

Very powerful words you chose for your Tanka that expresses two different worlds, Andrea. So much said in so few words about this horrible abuse. I chose the same visual - different form and more words! All the best for the contest. Sandra

Jill Spagnola

Date: 8/27/2015 6:18:00 PM

Your visual and verse combine into a powerful horrendous statement!...jill

Tim Smith

Date: 8/27/2015 5:47:00 PM

Reality in war torn countries. To us it is unimaginable. Real life Call of Duty with dire consequences.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 8/27/2015 3:44:00 PM

you've made the point so well, andrea! well done!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/27/2015 2:44:00 PM

the play of contrast is so dramatic, andie... sad for our youth but wonderfully conveyed.. huggs

Judy Konos

Date: 8/27/2015 2:41:00 PM

You certainly brought out the pinpoint for this one....it's a wow wow Andrea...

James Inman

Date: 8/27/2015 1:55:00 PM

Poignant to the point and with flare, very nice Andrea.

Greg Hoffman

Date: 8/27/2015 1:21:00 PM

Very true,luck of the draw as to where you were born.Well done

Daver Austin

Date: 8/27/2015 1:11:00 PM

Boys love war games. I used to make guns out of old orange crates. How sick is it to let children murder. good work Love, daver

Matthew Anish

Date: 8/27/2015 12:31:00 PM

Yes - war games are a problem - they lead to real war. I do remember playing with toy soldiers as a kid. Stimulating write! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/27/2015 9:56:00 AM

Yes.......sad and startling contrast to the innocence of children playing war ....and the wars of reality!! Even I played with brother, pretending ......never giving thought to the violence going on in the world. If only all children couldn't savor their innocence, what a sweet world it could be.