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Boy At the Fair - Well, I Declare

I watched, fascinated, as the tall lone boy in line to ride the Scrambler stuffed handfuls of peanuts in his mouth. This was the same boy I had spied just an hour ago further down the way where thirteen seemingly ravenous, foolish people bent their heads to plates, and with hands behind their backs, plunged their faces into myriads of pies. He hadn't won the contest but had come rather close; the nuts he was eating now replaced the pies he'd fed his face. But telling stains of blueberry and meringue remained upon the long sleeved shirt. The line for our ride proceeded at a turtle's pace till finally we got into our seats. Secured inside, we waited to begin. Close by, I saw the boy unbutton the top of his already loose baggy jeans, a timely gesture I would say! Then folks around us howled as round and round we went. Perhaps some screams held terror. Mine held only delight. And when the ride was finished, we exited as quickly as we could though giddy from that sweet rush of adrenaline. I glanced a final time at that strange lad. He stooped and sputtered something to the ground: a few whole peanuts and a couple of blue tinged chunks. Disgust was worn on the faces of the onlookers around us, but only I was well aware of all the food he’d still managed to hold down! He wiped his mouth on one long sleeve and stared right back at them; well, I declare, he headed straightway toward a fragrant hot dog stand. .

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 9/24/2014 7:37:00 AM
Andrea This is entertaining and creative. You really captured how children are at these fun places. But they never learn and do it over and over. LOL Thank you for the fun and true comment on my Get The Facts poem.
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Date: 9/18/2014 8:32:00 AM
Great story. I think all kids over-eat at fairs, and then lose all they ate on the rides. It is almost a ritual.
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Date: 9/16/2014 3:31:00 PM
I like carnivals but have never seen a pie eating contest. In NY there is a hot dog eating contest in Brooklyn every year. As for payment for poetry you might want to apply for a grant. I wrote for Aim and Midwest Poetry Review for money - $3 and $5 respectively. I guess I will have to go back to work on Monday. I do make some extra money writing articles for collectible publications. Enjoyable work here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 9/15/2014 5:16:00 AM
Well, I wonder what weight he carries around now?..Great work about this topic and a timely write since all the fairs are starting up..Thanks for stopping by..I appreciate your comment on my work..I think you were the only one that got it..Ha!!Ha!! Sara
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Date: 9/11/2014 11:21:00 PM
Eeeewwwwwww! That is the way it goes at the fair, though. Good one!
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Date: 9/11/2014 4:40:00 PM
So lively perfect for a haibun ;) Light & Love
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Date: 9/11/2014 1:58:00 PM
A glutton for punishment? Nope, Just a plain damn glutton. Pardon while I get an Alka Seltzer. Fun stuff, Andrea. Love, daver
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Date: 9/11/2014 10:25:00 AM
my kind of kid, he'll have a stomach ache, before bedtime..my guess is he mixes all the sodas at the 7/11 into one cup..like my youngest used to do...good luck
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Date: 9/11/2014 5:52:00 AM
Love taking the kids to carnivals and fairs....always a fun people watching experience
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Date: 9/11/2014 5:26:00 AM
- A well told story, Andrea - enjoy to read - well done (as always) - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 9/11/2014 3:19:00 AM
my, an exciting story as i declare' incredibly done', andie... going now for a hotdog!.. huggs
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Date: 9/11/2014 12:51:00 AM
First of all WOW!! Can you ever write. Second way to work the hot dog. Finally if it is judged for the poem mostly and not for the most out of the box way out there notion. This one is the winner.
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Date: 9/11/2014 12:21:00 AM
This is a great I declare tail... poem... I enjoyed it. Love and prayers and God bless you and I left you a comment on Jan's poem with Regina in it :) Love ya, Gina
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