Bowing Out

another star spent empty spot upon the stage when the spotlight fades -------------------------------- Author: Paul Callus ~ Apr'15 Contest: Get Your Senryu On Sponsor: Judy Konos Placed: 1st

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/6/2015 1:27:00 PM

When the bright star is finally spent and the black hole of loneliness appears it is not a good thing..I enjoyed reading your work ..I was delighted to see that you had left me a comment..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2015 4:31:00 PM

Hi Sara! I have been trying to comment and reply as a warm-up exercise in preparation to returning to Soup. A while ago I posted my first poem in nearly a month! Thank you for stopping by with lovely comments. You're always welcome to visit. :) // paul

Angie Thomas

Date: 5/3/2015 11:23:00 PM

Congratulations on the well deserved win Paul :) I think this one speaks for itself...

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2015 8:20:00 AM

Many thanks, Angie:) Glad you enjoyed. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/19/2015 9:56:00 AM

Congratulations Paul! This one sparkles!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2015 8:32:00 AM

Thank you Richard; love your sparkling comment! // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/18/2015 5:09:00 PM

hello Paul,, this is a nice way in getting your Senryu on :) Congrats on the win. LUV LINDA

Constance La France

Date: 4/17/2015 5:05:00 PM

Paul, a beautifully written Senyru, so deep and thought provoking, 7,

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2015 8:23:00 AM

Thank you, Constance; your senryu was also a pleasure to read. hugs // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/17/2015 10:20:00 AM

Belated Congratulations on this wonderful Senryu!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2015 8:31:00 AM

Thank you Armand. Excuse the late reply! // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/15/2015 1:22:00 PM

Amazing, Paul. As Shakespeare said, we "strut and fret our hour upon the stage" until we are heard no more. Congratulations on your success in Judy's contest. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2015 8:29:00 AM

Dear Carolyn, thank you for the congrats and the suitable quote from Shakespeare. Hope to be around more often. hugs // paul

Mohan Chutani

Date: 4/13/2015 10:02:00 AM

a graceful senryu, Paul. Congrats and thanks for your visit on my muse. Mohan

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/12/2015 5:23:00 PM

Great Senryu, Paul! Yes, this is such a fickle arena for sure. Congrats on your nice win! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2015 8:25:00 AM

Thank you Sandra; excuse the late reply...was away for a while. // paul

Matthew Anish

Date: 4/12/2015 3:51:00 PM

This is a fine senryu. I am 59 - Is that your age group? I remember growing up with Marvel comics. Also, the occasional Archie Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Paul Callus
Date: 5/6/2015 8:19:00 AM

Thank you for the visit, Matthew. I'm older than you by 8 years! // Sorry for the late reply, but have been away awhile from the site. All the best. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/11/2015 10:17:00 PM

glad to see this one again on the winners' list. Congrats to you!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/12/2015 12:38:00 PM

Thank you Andrea. Lots of good senryu were on offer in this contest! // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 4/11/2015 10:07:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/12/2015 12:34:00 PM

Thank you Jan. I always appreciate a re-visit:) hugs // paul

Judy Konos

Date: 4/11/2015 8:42:00 AM

There you go again! Simply great! Thanks for being in my contest....

Paul Callus
Date: 4/12/2015 12:31:00 PM

Many thanks, Judy. Being on your winners' list is appreciated. Hope you've had a lovely weekend. hugs // paul

Julia Ward

Date: 4/11/2015 7:17:00 AM

Have a wonderful time! Please look out for three Soupmails of today's date during tomorrow... they're not there yet... I'm going to a harp concert at the château hotel tonight. Hugs, Julia, xx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/12/2015 9:26:00 AM

As you will have noticed by now your mail has arrived and been answered. Hope the harp concert has been enjoyable. Hugs // paul

David Mohn

Date: 4/10/2015 11:28:00 PM

my favorite so far in this contest...love it Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 4/11/2015 4:27:00 AM

Thank you, David. I have read some excellent ones, yours amongst them. // paul

M. L. Kiser

Date: 4/10/2015 4:51:00 PM

You've summed this up nicely; good luck in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/11/2015 4:24:00 AM

Thank you, ML. Have a lovely day. // paul

Julia Ward

Date: 4/10/2015 4:08:00 PM

Oh, that's good! Best of luck in Judy's contest, Paul. Hugs, Julia, xx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/11/2015 4:26:00 AM

So glad that you found this to your liking, Julia. Hope you're having a lovely weekend. hugs // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/10/2015 1:21:00 AM

Wow that's so wonderful Paul! Sure winner, best wishes in contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/10/2015 12:51:00 PM

Thank you Upma! You are a kind judge:) All the best. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/9/2015 11:17:00 PM

A very interesting one and I can relate it to actual stars , as the ones in the sky.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/10/2015 12:38:00 PM

You are correct, Andrea. It works both ways! You catch on quick:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 4/9/2015 7:49:00 PM

Paul, I like the two way I can interpret this poem, first: a star who by aged grown old and dies so her light fades, and so her contribution in incomparable, 2nd: a star who at her peak stardom suddenly committed a fault and so her spotlight fades.. :)!//olive eloisa

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/11/2015 3:44:00 AM

oh yes I forgot that one.. :D!! lol..hahhaa!! which is the simplest :P!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/10/2015 8:51:00 AM

Hi Olive_eloi! Both your assumptions are right, although there is also a 3rd one which can refer to real heavenly stars...Hugs // paul