Bottlebrush Blooming

bottlebrush blooming with fat honeybees humming- the postman sneezes

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Mark Peterson

Date: 6/11/2014 3:09:00 PM

This is good. It's hard for me to know how I'll feel about any given Haiku. Some make it; many don't. Yours does.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/30/2014 10:42:00 AM

Barbara all 3 lines are separate subjects [sentences] you need for 2 of the lines to be connected conceptually & grammatically - please work on that line 3 is fine. A total simplification would be line 1 subject line 2 action, line three surprise! Light & Love

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/30/2014 8:29:00 AM

I had a bottlebush once..I wished that mine had lived a much longer life.It must not have been one for this area where we get the cold in winter..Enjoyed reading your Haiku..Thanks for the visit ..Sara