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He was still breathing, but they did not hear his sighs. His heart was shivering, but they did not see it trembling. His body was on fire, but they did not feel the heat. His tongue spoke, but they did not know his words. Her perfume still lingered, but her image was now a distant silhouette - a figment of dark pigment, haunting his mind. Maybe infertile seeds, were the reason for her vulnerability. Maybe his adolescence, struggled to understand her delinquency. There was no explanation for the voices, as demons had disturbed her existence. Nobody understood.. Not even he. Who was confused to why she let them in. He always remembered vividly, he could not stop her blood from flowing, nor did his kiss of life save the day. Songs from that era, haunted him for decades. Too bitter to shed public tears, he constantly cried in his sleep. Till the day he forgot to cry, motionless, he felt nothing. If only he had listened to his conscience: Because right from the start, she was born to break his heart. Simple musing Silent One 5 March 2018

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Date: 3/30/2018 5:18:00 PM
Breaking up with one's love is heartbreaking. It is breaking with harmony.. It is falling in pure contrast.. "He was still breathing, but.. His heart was shivering, but. His body was on fire, but." It can also be devastating "till the day he forgot to cry" and the cruelest thing "he felt nothing".. In this very state of love the supremacy is to reason "if only he had listened to his conscience".. An amazing poem Silent One keep it up.
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Date: 3/8/2018 10:22:00 AM
A very dramatic poem...with deep sadness. It evokes an emotional response in me that I don't like...and yet, I love the poem. It's a perfect description of the emotional impact of lost love.
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Date: 3/6/2018 6:43:00 PM
WOW! Simply powerful, heartfelt and woeful, Silent One. Suicide creates haunting heartbreak for those left behind, as your poem so poetically and poignantly points out. Beautiful and sorrowful imagery grace your lines of heartache and pain.. Brilliantly expressed my friend!
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Date: 3/6/2018 3:09:00 PM
A strong portrayal of a person's loneliness and heartbreak, Silent One. Good one.
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:21:00 PM
Thank you Andrea..
Date: 3/6/2018 11:28:00 AM
Constantly cries in his sleep. The emotion drew me into his pain. this poems hurts in haunting way.
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:21:00 PM
You know what men are like.. thank you Barbara..
Date: 3/6/2018 10:54:00 AM
Been there...damn powerful writing. Cheers to you, SO!
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:22:00 PM
Thank you Drake...
Date: 3/6/2018 12:47:00 AM
Excellent write but heartbreaking sadness poem. Thanks for sharing it.
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:23:00 PM
Thank you Ravi..
Date: 3/5/2018 10:52:00 PM
Yes women like that 'they burn'. One should always listen to one's conscience I suppose, not even the kiss of life saved the day. Si you almost had me reaching for the tissues there, a mark of a great poet to take your readers on an emotional journey like this, tugging at their heart strings. You truly excel in your emotional writes. That Rumi quote...Magnifique....Maria
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:33:00 PM
Sometimes those with demons can't help how they behave, so those who love them remian heart broken, especially when suicide is involved.. Thank you Maria..
Date: 3/5/2018 7:13:00 PM
"nor did his kiss of life save the day" this is so loaded and deep.. I love it! This whole piece just aches from line to line and it's beautiful. Love, Juli-Michelle
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:34:00 PM
Thank you, that line was about saving somone who committed suicide..
Date: 3/5/2018 4:52:00 PM
Eyes, The Windows of the Soul. I understand the place where this comes from...however, I can also interpret it in my own way. This is very beautiful Silent.
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Silent One
Date: 3/6/2018 3:34:00 PM
Poetry is always open to interpetation.. Thanks Leanne..
Date: 3/5/2018 12:02:00 PM
Very fine articulations expressed in this cerebral gem, SO. Your pen shines brilliant as always. Love and smiles forever.
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:05:00 PM
Thank you Freddie..
Date: 3/5/2018 8:18:00 AM
Such heartbreaking sadness :'| First 8 lines ... WOW!!! Grabbed my heart and squeezed it. It amazes me how you craft these feelings with your words Silent One. "a figment of dark pigment, haunting his mind"!! Wow! Love the Rumi quote and the music as well! Another favorite :)
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:05:00 PM
Thank you Judy..
Date: 3/5/2018 8:06:00 AM
I like the concept and closing line...Clarity outstanding...
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:10:00 PM
Thank you Arturo..
Date: 3/5/2018 8:06:00 AM
So much sadness in the world, Silent One, your poem expresses it so well. Hold on to the good things while we have them. Happy Monday !!
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:06:00 PM
Thank you Mike..
Date: 3/5/2018 7:51:00 AM
A deep, well written poem that ends with a punch Silent One. Well done!
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 2:10:00 PM
Thank you Heidi..
Date: 3/5/2018 7:29:00 AM
That is a sad one. Eloquently laid tale of heart rendering woe. Great poem Silent. xomo
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 7:30:00 AM
Nice to see you Mo.. Thank you..
Date: 3/5/2018 7:19:00 AM
Sad but a beautiful write S.O. Tom
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 7:30:00 AM
Thank you Tom..
Date: 3/5/2018 7:15:00 AM
This story of heartbreak is quite gripping. You held me wondering how this ends..his sadness powered the poem..well written, Silent One.
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 7:31:00 AM
Thank you Vijay...
Date: 3/5/2018 6:25:00 AM
- A heartbreaking poem, S.O. - Beautifully written - Best wishes for a wonderful new week :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Silent One
Date: 3/5/2018 7:31:00 AM
Thank you.. Have a great week..

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