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Born Sleeping - For Sharon's Contest

Ten perfect tiny fingers and toes
Only you were born sleeping
Uncontrollable tears flow from my eyes
Caressing your beautiful face
Heartbroken parents are grief stricken

Touch me with words contest
Sponsored by Sharon Gulley

06-26-17

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Poetically Numb

June 30, 2017 at 8:58 PM

This is so real... beautifully and respectfully written. Love it. Good luck, friend.

Jan Allison

July 1, 2017 at 2:04 AM

Thanks Alexis it must be so heartbreaking losing a child of any age:-( hugs jan x

Roy Pett

June 29, 2017 at 12:03 PM

This is wonderfull though so sad Jan, it certainly touched me, good luck in contest. :(

Jan Allison

July 1, 2017 at 2:04 AM

Thanks Roy it is a very sad poem:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

June 27, 2017 at 6:43 PM

this is very nicely done, Jan, a winning write ~*

Jan Allison

June 27, 2017 at 6:49 PM

Thanks Eve I enjoyed the challenge I have not written this form often:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley

June 27, 2017 at 2:48 PM

Deeply touching and sad my friend. A definite winner methinks. Good luck in the new contest.. You always write so marvelously.. Having had two such babies born many decades ago(my first son and three years later my first daughter), I felt this deeply...

Jan Allison

June 27, 2017 at 2:52 PM

Oh Robert I am so so so sorry you can relate to this on a personal level, I can't think of anything more painful that the death of a child at any age:-(As a total novice to poetry I have learned so so much since I joined soup in Feb 2014 and have written over 1400 poems in a relatively short time - I think I'm making up for lost time lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton

June 27, 2017 at 1:10 PM

Wow Jan, I was going to try this one, but obvious winner here! Sad but soo touching!!

Jan Allison

June 27, 2017 at 1:27 PM

Hey John I am sure you will come up with a beauty!:-) hugs Jan xx

Probir Gupta

June 27, 2017 at 6:16 AM

Tragic ... You make the readers feel ...

Jan Allison

June 27, 2017 at 6:27 AM

Thanks Probir it is a very emotive poem:-( hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

June 27, 2017 at 5:37 AM

This is not just touching this is an earthquake of words! Marvelous and moving to tears dear Jan! I am certain it will be on the top! Good luck! Hugs xx

Jan Allison

June 27, 2017 at 5:50 AM

aww thank you so much Demetrios, as you know I enjoy writing humourous poems but I think I surprise people when I come out with a more serious poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel

June 26, 2017 at 11:15 PM

This is a really touching poem, Jan, can't quell this grief:(

Jan Allison

June 27, 2017 at 3:22 AM

Thanks Jo it is a heartbreaking poem:-( hugs jan xx

Carole Duet

June 26, 2017 at 10:05 PM

Amazing...now my heart is bleeding though. Tears....

Jan Allison

June 27, 2017 at 3:21 AM

Thanks Carole it is a very sad scenario which tragically happened to someone I knew when I was training to do my nursery nursing:-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

June 26, 2017 at 9:34 PM

wow, very touching indeed , Jan. She will love it!!

Jan Allison

June 27, 2017 at 3:20 AM

Thanks Andrea I can write the occasional serious poem. Thanks for dropping by I know you are very busy:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

June 26, 2017 at 6:54 PM

You told me it would be sad and it is. Touching.

Jan Allison

June 26, 2017 at 6:57 PM

Thanks Lin it is a very sad poem I hope I have interpreted the 'touch' them accurately and Sharon likes my poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

June 26, 2017 at 6:47 PM

It is very sad, Jan. A very hard tug at the heart:(

Jan Allison

June 26, 2017 at 6:50 PM

Thanks Daniel it is a very sad topic:-( hugs Jan xx

White Wolf

June 26, 2017 at 6:03 PM

If this doesn't TOUCH the sponsor nothing will! Very sad write, Jan!

Jan Allison

June 26, 2017 at 6:12 PM

I hope she likes it White Wolf, its a very sad situation. I can't imagine the pain of losing a child of any age:-( hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

June 26, 2017 at 5:50 PM

So much pain and sadness in these few lines...A moving write Jan

Jan Allison

June 26, 2017 at 5:57 PM

Thanks Joseph - I hope I have got the acrostic right for Sharon I wonder if my interpretation of 'touch' is what she is looking for:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

June 26, 2017 at 2:39 PM

Every parents nightmare...so sad

Jan Allison

June 26, 2017 at 3:00 PM

It is Tim and so so heartbreaking when it happens:-( hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

June 26, 2017 at 1:39 PM

If this doesn't touch the sponsor in some way, I'm not sure what will. Damn this was sad and heartbreaking. Best wishes in the contest

Jan Allison

June 26, 2017 at 6:11 PM

Thanks Chris it is based on the experience of a friend when I was 16 and she had a mental breakdown as a result of losing her baby, it's something that will always be with me:-( hugs Jan xx