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written for the contest " body ails yet spirit soars" sponsored by unseeking seeker.

i was inspired by how last few days , rain triggered pain in my bones, which is something i experience often when it rains, yet still i find hope through nature, rain or shine... 

 

Freezing in the midst of hostile ice monsoon triggering aching woes beneath blood and bones, I search for a quilt woven in sanguine rune silken feathers of clementine and gold tones- body ails, yet spirit soars, sings to the moon, beyond clouds obscured in kohl sleets of hailstones whilst rhapsodies of nature serve light to calm- scattered scars in the air, like cosmic mint balm But as skies swing heavy, and coldness seeps in, hope breathes from sapphire dews of rain waltzing free, for when mists of nature envelopes my skin, I find traces of peace from roots of my tree amidst the piercing pain pulsating within- fields of eagle ferns, the tranquilizing key, sets a serene scene with silver sequined lines, sprinkling zests of zen from inner sun that shines. Sometimes mind gets blanketed in confusion, sinking behind steel walls sculpted in distress although shadowed stars swirl like an illusion, faith is the thread for thin needles to redress and restitch fragmented frames of vague vision. So let suppressed agony slowly digress in pearl pages of cathartic tomorrows- now my ink abandons yesterday's sorrows.

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Date: 11/21/2023 8:47:00 PM
Another poem that makes a "Wow" escape from me ! What I say in simple language, you say in highly figurative and metaphorical language. Your choice of words are exceptional. "So let suppressed agony slowly digress in pearl pages of cathartic tomorrows- now my ink abandons yesterday's sorrows.". What a fantastic close to the poem. Into my FAVE.
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Date: 11/13/2023 6:00:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your well-earned win, dear Ink. Blessings
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Date: 11/12/2023 12:10:00 PM
Aloha, Ink Empress. Needles and pins yond our soles/souls, ahh, and the forgiving that natures our redemption. Realizations emboldens the spirit o'er time--and yes to your use of lower caps, my friend. My sincerest compliment in your honorable placement of USs contest. Aloha, William
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Date: 11/8/2023 6:42:00 PM
Amazing work punctuated as only you can do, ink! I loved the ending healing tone as well.
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Date: 11/7/2023 3:56:00 PM
Dear Ink, Your writing is excellent, and it sticks out from the throng. Your ability to depict the sorrow of rainy days is exceptional. The abundance of wonderful alliterative utterances that enrich your work enchants me. Your writing prowess never fails to wow me. You weaved your poem perfectly in Ottava Rima, crafting a great challenge. It is apparent that your spirit soars within your writing, and it is due to your remarkable ability to depict such profound sentiments. BOL in the contest
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Date: 11/7/2023 2:59:00 PM
a brilliant and magnificent write, dearest Ink. Your imagery and words captured the pain you experience on cold, rainy days. Yet you shine on. I loved so many alliterative words and phrases, each one beautifully constructed. Your poetic skills continue to impress me with phrases like 'cathartic tomorrows...sorrows and 'zests of zen.' I feel like I'm experiencing your anguish but also your acceptance of it. Your words are as strong and beautiful as you are. Have a splendid day. Will fav
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Date: 11/7/2023 2:32:00 PM
You weaved your theme beautifully in this difficult to execute form, Ink. Splendid emotions you convey--indeed your spirit soars, my friend. Not easy to write such a long Ottava Rima. So let suppressed agony slowly digress in pearl pages of cathartic tomorrows- now my ink abandons yesterday's sorrows--inspiring, uplifting ending!
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Date: 11/7/2023 1:27:00 PM
You sure took that contest theme to the next level by using this rarely used form and so much amazing imgery. Way to go with this one.
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Date: 11/7/2023 12:28:00 PM
A wonderful write. Great ending. I always enjoy reading your writes. Good Luck... Looks like we both did this one. Have a wonderful day writing away..........
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Date: 11/7/2023 9:50:00 AM
Oh Empress of Ink, your beautiful lines invite the reader to journey with you almost as if to also heal from the bounty of nature! Exquisite poetry!
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Ink Empress
Date: 11/8/2023 12:24:00 AM
Thank you so very much mike, i appreciate your kind and thoughtful feedback truly always
Date: 11/7/2023 7:10:00 AM
Intriguing form of poetry, my friend. I loved your use of alliteration throughout this poem, your imagery is always exquisite. I like the way you worded the progression through the storms of life and the last verse was my favorite.
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Date: 11/7/2023 7:10:00 AM
Every line of that last verse was vivid as I read. My favorite sentence is, "Sometimes mind gets blanketed in confusion, sinking behind steel walls sculpted in distress although shadowed stars swirl like an illusion, faith is the thread for thin needles to redress and restitch fragmented frames of vague vision. Another FAV for my list.
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Ink Empress
Date: 11/7/2023 9:14:00 AM
Dear Bill, its always a pleasure hearing from you, your thoughtful comments are truly encouraging, grateful for you and saras constant support always thank you so much
Date: 11/7/2023 6:42:00 AM
Ink - this is a different form for you and I think it suits your style. I quite like it :) (that's British understatement btw)
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Ink Empress
Date: 11/7/2023 8:23:00 AM
Dear Sam this means so much to me as i am not always good with rhymes and to see that someone thinks i am good at it means alot: thank you so very much! Truly grateful for your kindness
Date: 11/7/2023 6:03:00 AM
beyond clouds obscured in kohl sleets of hailstones whilst rhapsodies of nature serve light to calm-scattered scars in the air,.. ooo I love that line papi… cosmic mint balm indeed!!! piercing pain pulsating .. sets a serene scene with silver sequined lines, zests of zen … ooo alliteration at its finest!! suppressed agony slowly digress in pearl pages of cathartic tomorrows mmm.. my ink abandons yesterday's sorrows… mmmmhmmm the way this piece flows soo effortlessly.. woven in sheer perfection.
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Date: 11/9/2023 9:47:00 AM
Aye papi… u my rock tooo !!! But ur madness is directed to the wrong location!!! I am not the one aeeee it’s the father aeeee!!! Hell to him!!!!
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Date: 11/7/2023 6:45:00 AM
Awwn papi u so sweet and kind u my rawk but um mad at u lol

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