Laura Breidenthal Poet Rhyme

Blue

A wandering spirit glides upon the glistening sea
As the cool air crashes against you and me
The sun is hidden from view by the clouds 
The seagulls crying and flying around

A pleasant sadness filters my soul
It is calm and serene, gloomy...controlled
I lay on the sand, thinking of you
If I was a color, then I'd surely be blue

Blue

The hue of sorrow, calm, and love
I see it everywhere, below and above
I see no darkness—I see no hate
In this dreary and dreamy state

And your eyes...they are me
Shining and staring vacantly
I live in your vision, this mystical shade
And still—against the ocean spray
You fade.

Your blue eyes close
Motionless...emotionless—I turn black
It is now Me that I lack

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Susan Ashley March 22, 2018 at 5:21 PM Your beautiful melancholy is a feast for the senses, Laura. Your use of 'blue' imagery in your poem is superb. Such introspective sadness fills your tender and poignant poetic lines.. and your ending is so intriguing 'Your blue eyes close, Motionless... emotionless - I turn black, It is now Me that I lack' - amazing lines.. it's like you've peacefully lost or given up your essence to your sorrow.. Such a sensitive and emotional write. Love it! Warmest wishes. ~Susan Susan Ashley March 22, 2018 at 6:48 PM Yes Laura, I am happy and grateful as well.. <3 Laura Breidenthal March 22, 2018 at 5:38 PM Beautiful interpretation, Susan. I love what you have to say and appreciate your time here on my older poems. I am happy and grateful we can read each other's work. Thanks once again. <3~Laura

Timothy Hicks June 10, 2016 at 10:42 PM There is so much to ponder here, Laura ... the way you crafted this was dreamlike and mystical, I wanted to experience the sort of peace and tranquility that was depicted here. Another wonderful early poem that goes to show that sadness can be beautiful ... Laura Breidenthal June 10, 2016 at 11:56 PM Hey Timothy, thanks again for taking time to read some of my older writes. This one in particular is quite sad, but definitely had that sense of tranquility sadness often brings, when nature is involved. When I wrote this, I was in love with sadness....kind of like that bit in Evanescence's song Lithium: " I want to stay in love with my sorrow. Oh but god I want to let it go." <3~Laura

Justin Bordner February 6, 2016 at 7:45 PM In the blue knowledge of love your heart sees that there is no color in yourself without having someone to trust and cherish Laura. Perhaps the wandering spirit is yours, restless, ready to enter a heart that has the bold colors of passion that your soul must have to feel alive. This is how I feel. This extraordinary poem of sorrow rest heavy in my heart, I really understand it, as if it says, we must know when to say goodbye, to be strong enough to find that partner meant for us...J.A.B. Laura Breidenthal February 8, 2016 at 1:40 AM Wow, thank you for your amazing, sweet and empathetic review on Blue, Justin. This poem means so much to me, as it was one of the very first I wrote. It was how I was, the feelings sometimes return in full deep colors. Definitely a wandering spirit, and I love yours. I am blessed to have your vibrant colors painted on me. Thank you again. ~Laura Justin Bordner February 6, 2016 at 7:51 PM To allow our instincts, and Providence to guide us through the black sorrow of knowing that we can no longer live, and learn, and create with this former partner. The way you bring the sea into the beauty of your brave sorrow is totally breathtaking woman. This poem is very powerful to me, the imagery, the depth is staggering...J.A.B. A FAV!!

Paul Callus September 12, 2015 at 9:03 AM Hi Laura! Just having a peep at one of your earliest posted poems, and I'm most impressed. You transmit blue through water and air...and sight! I love blue, and often I float in its welcoming arms. Love your ending, too. ~ Regards. // paul Laura Breidenthal September 12, 2015 at 1:35 PM I love blue as well..Thanks Paul, for taking a look at my older poems. Means a lot! ~Laura

Harry Horsman December 27, 2012 at 3:42 PM just taking in an oldie, awesome poem...

Andrea Dietrich November 6, 2012 at 3:00 PM this is your second one here and I like this one even better than the first. What a great way to describe blue. this is very deep writing. I see it was a featured poem too, so a belated congrats to you. by the way, that poem of mine you mentioned was not my first poem. I have three times as many poems as what are posted here at soup. But I did not start writing till year 2000 (at least not in earnest, considering myself a poet). how long have you been writing?

John Rhinem May 10, 2012 at 3:00 PM Smile ~ I felt my toes tapping to the bluebirds beat of this picturesque and sweeet, flowing rhyme, my dear sweeet beautiful Laura * Personally, from what my eyes have thus seen and spirit perceived, i think that You are a very beautiful to be worthy woman * Gifted in verse and priceless, i believe and thank you, for Your lovely beauties visit * My love, forever; John!:) ~

Poet Destroyer A January 12, 2012 at 8:33 PM Laura, congratulations on having your poem featured this week ;-) always,..pd.

Anne-Lise Andresen January 9, 2012 at 11:47 AM Congratulations on the week`s win Laura!! :) oxox love from Anne-Lise

Carol Sunshine Brown January 9, 2012 at 8:12 AM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Laura. I wish you the best in 2012 with your writing. Love, Carol

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire January 4, 2012 at 7:22 PM Dear Laura, I am reading YOUR POEMS on page 1 now as I read this again The First line in the second stanza I Truely know the Feeling the POETESS Expresses : " A pleasant Sadness Filters my Soul : I don't remember which POEM it is in but I do remember I Wrote a line like this One : "The Gentlest Sadness touches my Heart" Many other Lines in this POEM are waves to my Feelings.

Nick Bagnall November 3, 2011 at 6:52 AM This is a very beautiful poem, I hung on every single word, very well written.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire October 30, 2011 at 5:33 AM Dear Laura, Superb Write A great transition from Blue to Black with LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER, YOUR Liege...HG

Edward Orozco July 1, 2011 at 2:42 AM i love it, title and all =) after it is my favorite color! - edward

James Peranteau May 28, 2011 at 6:33 AM fin'nin ta comment soon...*smiles*