Blue

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                                        grave sapphire eyes
                                        sting with tears, and she shivers

                                        her cold hands turn blue 

                                        donning his Navy pea coat 
                                        her blue mood lifts with the fog





For Francine's Contest "Blue" by Carrie Richards

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Tara Jennings

Date: 2/22/2011 6:43:00 AM

Oh my. This made me cry. I felt the fog swirling and the grey blue emotions of sorrow and longing. Very talented

Laurie Ginn

Date: 2/11/2011 11:10:00 PM

Holy cow this gave me the creeps lol. It may be because it's 2am and I can't sleep and the thought of some poor soul stuck in a cold fog crying is for some reason a bit unnerving. Great!

Laurie Ginn

Date: 2/11/2011 11:10:00 PM

Holy cow this gave me the creeps lol. It may be because it's 2am and I can't sleep and the thought of some poor soul stuck in a cold fog crying is for some reason a bit unnerving. Great!

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 2/10/2011 8:53:00 AM

I could actually imagine this scene in my mind, Carrie-- very vivid tanka--wish you the best in the contest -- sure in the winners' list --hugs nikko :)

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 2/9/2011 4:54:00 PM

I haven''t seen this contest yet, Carrie but this is as poetic as they come methinks. Well constructed and holds the reader there a spell or ,... in a spell. So be it. I like it lots.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/9/2011 12:42:00 PM

Spectacular write Carrie and much good luck in the contest.. a very visual piece .. feeling every line my friend.. with luv..

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/9/2011 9:25:00 AM

When someone we love is away, it does make us feel closer to them to put on their shirts/jackets. It's like a part of them lingers there. Wonderful entry for Francine's contest, Carrie, and I wish you success. Love, Carolyn

Harry Horsman

Date: 2/9/2011 6:29:00 AM

Such a wonderful warm poem on a chilly subject, Andrea says it right below, this a tale woven by a master Weaver, spellbound one is. good luck. Harry