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Blow Out the Candle

I saw you alone with her in silence, gaping…there’s not much more I can handle. You were the one I’d go to for guidance, but for now I’ll just blow out the candle. A blaze we shared under constellations, flames of romance; be still my beating fears. So intense we died in consummation, but the breeze came along and brought me tears. I needed you…like the air in my lungs, you needed freedom from my restless heart. Our hot flare left leaving ashes that stung, but the wind blustered, our torch did depart. Wax melted before we got to dandle, so for now I’ll just blow out the candle. Create an Idiom Contest Idiom: "Blow Out The Candle" To me this means the loss of romance; a fire of love burned out Date Written: July 21, 2016

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Just James

Date: 8/5/2016 8:44:00 AM

Well written ...great win!

Lu Loo
Date: 8/5/2016 8:43:00 PM

thank you James :)-luloo

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/4/2016 11:16:00 AM

Many congratulations on your lovely write well deserving of your win, Laura:)

Lu Loo
Date: 8/4/2016 12:35:00 PM

thank you sweet Jo :)-luloo

R.A. Marschall

Date: 8/3/2016 3:56:00 PM

Wonderful sonnet! Congrats on your win! R.A.

Lu Loo
Date: 8/3/2016 6:34:00 PM

thank you RA:)-luloo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/3/2016 3:20:00 PM

Nicely done, Laura Loo!! big congrats on the winner list.

Lu Loo
Date: 8/3/2016 6:33:00 PM

thank you lovely Andrea :)-luloo

Tom Arnone

Date: 8/3/2016 9:19:00 AM

You made me think of those trick candles that, no matter how hard you try, you cannot extinguish their flame. ;-) Congrats on your placement!

Lu Loo
Date: 8/3/2016 1:02:00 PM

many thanks Tom :)-luloo

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 8/3/2016 8:31:00 AM

Such a fabulous poem Laura,yes its hard to blow out the candle!

Lu Loo
Date: 8/3/2016 1:02:00 PM

thank you sweet Sara :)-luloo

Jesse Day

Date: 8/3/2016 7:51:00 AM

I enjoy sonnets and your poem is well written. My biggest concern was if your idiom is considered an original. I spent much time researching. I determined that although it is a common literal expression, I could find no common scenario where it was used as an idiom. Congrats on your high placement in the Create an Idiom Contest!

Lu Loo
Date: 8/3/2016 11:22:00 AM

Thank you Jesse! Yeah I know it seems common to say blow out the candle but I thought of my friend who was getting divorced and they loved candlelight dinners. So I used that as the loss of romance or love. I also researched and couldn't find it either. Thank you so much!! Be blessed :)-luloo

Jan Allison

Date: 7/31/2016 3:15:00 PM

Great idiom you created - love the flow and rhyme of your sonnet - good luck:-) hugs jan xx

Lu Loo
Date: 7/31/2016 4:05:00 PM

thank you lady :)-luloo

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/31/2016 2:16:00 PM

Really nice flow to this sonnet, Laura. Plus I learned a new word. Good luck in contest. A very well written sonnet!

Lu Loo
Date: 7/31/2016 4:04:00 PM

thank you DT :)-luloo