Blow Out the Candle

I saw you alone with her in silence,
   gaping…there’s not much more I can handle.
You were the one I’d go to for guidance,
   but for now I’ll just blow out the candle.

A blaze we shared under constellations,
   flames of romance; be still my beating fears.
So intense we died in consummation,
   but the breeze came along and brought me tears.

I needed you…like the air in my lungs,
   you needed freedom from my restless heart.
Our hot flare left leaving ashes that stung,
   but the wind blustered, our torch did depart.

Wax melted before we got to dandle, 
   so for now I’ll just blow out the candle.

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Idiom: "Blow Out The Candle"
To me this means the loss of romance; a fire of love burned out

Date Written: July 21, 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 8/5/2016 8:44:00 AM
Well written ...great win!
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Date: 8/5/2016 8:43:00 PM
thank you James :)-luloo
Date: 8/4/2016 11:16:00 AM
Many congratulations on your lovely write well deserving of your win, Laura:)
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Date: 8/4/2016 12:35:00 PM
thank you sweet Jo :)-luloo
Date: 8/3/2016 3:56:00 PM
Wonderful sonnet! Congrats on your win! R.A.
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Date: 8/3/2016 6:34:00 PM
thank you RA:)-luloo
Date: 8/3/2016 3:20:00 PM
Nicely done, Laura Loo!! big congrats on the winner list.
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Date: 8/3/2016 6:33:00 PM
thank you lovely Andrea :)-luloo
Date: 8/3/2016 9:19:00 AM
You made me think of those trick candles that, no matter how hard you try, you cannot extinguish their flame. ;-) Congrats on your placement!
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Date: 8/3/2016 1:02:00 PM
many thanks Tom :)-luloo
Date: 8/3/2016 8:31:00 AM
Such a fabulous poem Laura,yes its hard to blow out the candle!
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Date: 8/3/2016 1:02:00 PM
thank you sweet Sara :)-luloo
Date: 8/3/2016 7:51:00 AM
I enjoy sonnets and your poem is well written. My biggest concern was if your idiom is considered an original. I spent much time researching. I determined that although it is a common literal expression, I could find no common scenario where it was used as an idiom. Congrats on your high placement in the Create an Idiom Contest!
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Date: 8/3/2016 11:22:00 AM
Thank you Jesse! Yeah I know it seems common to say blow out the candle but I thought of my friend who was getting divorced and they loved candlelight dinners. So I used that as the loss of romance or love. I also researched and couldn't find it either. Thank you so much!! Be blessed :)-luloo
Date: 7/31/2016 3:15:00 PM
Great idiom you created - love the flow and rhyme of your sonnet - good luck:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/31/2016 4:05:00 PM
thank you lady :)-luloo
Date: 7/31/2016 2:16:00 PM
Really nice flow to this sonnet, Laura. Plus I learned a new word. Good luck in contest. A very well written sonnet!
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Date: 7/31/2016 4:04:00 PM
thank you DT :)-luloo
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