Blood Dripping


Let me remove the sword from my back dear friend,
The blood is dripping and I am full of sadness;
Seems that loyalty is just a thing of madness,
Oh, the pain in my heart is shattering.
I must learn to never ever trust you again,
You say one thing but you do another;
It is raining on my soul, I thought we were forever,
Your words are just senseless dribble scattering.  
My disappointment is sadly staggering,  
So I must add more bricks to my high wall;  
And should you try to climb it you will surely fall,  
I know the Lord up above makes me always stronger.
But I must thank you for your cruel deception,  
As sorrow always gives my writing direction.

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December 3, 2015

Canzone/Blood Dripping
Copyright Protected, ID 731766

For the contest, A Poem Written on a Rainy Day
sponsor, Poet Destroyer and Skat

Fifth Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 10/28/2016 9:57:00 PM
A straight forward, tell-it-like-it-is poem, BW. Keep the pot of truth boiling. Don't let 'em off the hook. The title was a great lure. Edgy and strong poem. Love you always, RW
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Date: 2/22/2016 8:13:00 AM
Congratulations BW on the success of this poem! Continue writing and share the blessings of poetry! :) _hans
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Date: 2/21/2016 3:55:00 PM
Hi Broken Wings, congratulations on your placement in the contest. Once again you touch the heart with your emotional write. Always let your tender heart speak. It speaks a sad beauty.
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Date: 2/22/2016 3:50:00 AM
Vlad, thanks so much for the congratulations and for the lovely comment ~
Date: 2/21/2016 12:52:00 PM
Sad but lovely, Broken Wings. Congratulations on your nice placement in the 'rainy days' contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Constance La France
Date: 2/21/2016 12:57:00 PM
Sandra, thanks so much for the visit and the congratulations and hugs !
Date: 2/21/2016 4:36:00 AM
Congratulations, Broken Wings. Your poem is intense and emotional--and highly enjoyable.
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Constance La France
Date: 2/21/2016 12:52:00 PM
Steve, thanks for the congratulations and the compliments ~
Date: 2/21/2016 4:36:00 AM
a most sullen, beautiful write, constance... sending my huge congrats!..huggs
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Date: 2/21/2016 12:53:00 PM
Andrea, thanks so much for the marvelous !
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Constance La France
Date: 2/21/2016 12:52:00 PM
nette, thanks for the congrats and the beautiful and hugs!
Date: 2/21/2016 2:19:00 AM
a marvelous write to get done on a rainy day, Constance!!
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Date: 2/21/2016 12:53:00 PM
Andrea, thanks so much for the marvelous !
Date: 2/21/2016 2:19:00 AM
oh, and BIG congrats.
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Constance La France
Date: 2/21/2016 12:54:00 PM
Andrea, thanks for visiting with the congrats !
Date: 2/20/2016 10:49:00 PM
Great write, Broken Wings!!
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Constance La France
Date: 2/21/2016 12:55:00 PM
Sarita, thanks for the vistit and the great !
Date: 2/20/2016 9:47:00 PM
Broken, thank you for the Rainy Day theme win. With Love... Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Constance La France
Date: 2/21/2016 12:55:00 PM
Linda, that was a good contest, and I am totally honored with my placement, love constance
Date: 2/20/2016 9:06:00 PM
Broken, Thanks for the Support *SKAT*
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Constance La France
Date: 2/21/2016 12:56:00 PM
Skat, thank you so much for visiting, appreciated
Date: 12/3/2015 5:20:00 PM
Good flow, rhyme and rhythm..I enjoyed reading this one today..Life does give us some people who can be good at putting daggers in the back..Thanks for the visits to my p age..Sara
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Constance La France
Date: 12/3/2015 5:27:00 PM
Sara, thanks for the visit, sadly life is full of such people, one has to just remove the daggers on go on ~
Date: 12/3/2015 8:59:00 AM
BW, the quality of this write is exceptional. The first line incredibly strong, and "...raining on my soul..." also wonderful, as is the imagery. The well placed rhyme give it a smooth flow and make it easy to read; and, of course the content is sensitive, sad and beautiful.
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Constance La France
Date: 12/3/2015 2:40:00 PM
James, thanks so much for the nice comment, this is the first Canzone poem I have written, I did a bit of research and it was the form Dante used, it can be any rhyme scheme you want and actually even lines are flexible, there can be up to 7 verse but I only did one, I chose to use Dante's rhyme scheme, if you want to know what it is, send me a soup mail ~
Date: 12/3/2015 8:31:00 AM
I have been betrayed by people who were closest to me too. Even though the experience was excruciating, I came out stronger and even a better person..As long as we don't let that experience define us or make our heart bitter, everything will work out for the better... Great write Broken Wings... I hope your pain will be replaced by joy very soon. Love, Rahy
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Rahy Hy
Date: 12/3/2015 3:03:00 PM
I am an illiterate souper... I don't know how it's done! Sorry! :-)
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Constance La France
Date: 12/3/2015 2:44:00 PM
oh, you do not have soup mail ~
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Constance La France
Date: 12/3/2015 2:41:00 PM
Rahy, you are so right things like this do make us stronger but still when it happens it is shattering, I am a strong person although my wings are eternally broken ~ I am sending you a soup mail.
Date: 12/3/2015 1:54:00 AM
Oh wow.. getting direction out in sadness too.. bravo broken! Magnificent write!!
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Date: 12/3/2015 7:13:00 AM
Upma, thanks for your words, in poetry I can let go of the sadness, in reality, I put on a mask of happiness, no one could guess at the depth of my sorrow ~
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