Constance La France Poet Canzone

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Blood Dripping

Let me remove the sword from my back dear friend,
The blood is dripping and I am full of sadness;
Seems that loyalty is just a thing of madness,
Oh, the pain in my heart is shattering.
I must learn to never ever trust you again,
You say one thing but you do another;
It is raining on my soul, I thought we were forever,
Your words are just senseless dribble scattering.  
My disappointment is sadly staggering,  
So I must add more bricks to my high wall;  
And should you try to climb it you will surely fall,  
I know the Lord up above makes me always stronger.
But I must thank you for your cruel deception,  
As sorrow always gives my writing direction.

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December 3, 2015

Canzone/Blood Dripping
Copyright Protected, ID 731766

For the contest, A Poem Written on a Rainy Day
sponsor, Poet Destroyer and Skat

Fifth Place

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Freddie Robinson Jr. October 28, 2016 at 9:57 PM A straight forward, tell-it-like-it-is poem, BW. Keep the pot of truth boiling. Don't let 'em off the hook. The title was a great lure. Edgy and strong poem. Love you always, RW

Hansteven Selfa February 22, 2016 at 8:13 AM Congratulations BW on the success of this poem! Continue writing and share the blessings of poetry! :) _hans

Vladislav Raven February 21, 2016 at 3:55 PM Hi Broken Wings, congratulations on your placement in the contest. Once again you touch the heart with your emotional write. Always let your tender heart speak. It speaks a sad beauty. Constance La France February 22, 2016 at 3:50 AM Vlad, thanks so much for the congratulations and for the lovely comment ~

Sandra Haight February 21, 2016 at 12:52 PM Sad but lovely, Broken Wings. Congratulations on your nice placement in the 'rainy days' contest. Hugs, Sandra Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:57 PM Sandra, thanks so much for the visit and the congratulations and hugs !

Nette Onclaud February 21, 2016 at 4:36 AM a most sullen, beautiful write, constance... sending my huge congrats!..huggs Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:53 PM Andrea, thanks so much for the marvelous ! Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:52 PM nette, thanks for the congrats and the beautiful and hugs!

Steve Grammatico February 21, 2016 at 4:36 AM Congratulations, Broken Wings. Your poem is intense and emotional--and highly enjoyable. Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:52 PM Steve, thanks for the congratulations and the compliments ~

Andrea Dietrich February 21, 2016 at 2:19 AM oh, and BIG congrats. Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:54 PM Andrea, thanks for visiting with the congrats !

Andrea Dietrich February 21, 2016 at 2:19 AM a marvelous write to get done on a rainy day, Constance!! Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:53 PM Andrea, thanks so much for the marvelous !

Sarita Milliner February 20, 2016 at 10:49 PM Great write, Broken Wings!! Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:55 PM Sarita, thanks for the vistit and the great !

Poet Destroyer A February 20, 2016 at 9:47 PM Broken, thank you for the Rainy Day theme win. With Love... Always & Forever ~LINDA~ Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:55 PM Linda, that was a good contest, and I am totally honored with my placement, love constance

Skat A February 20, 2016 at 9:06 PM Broken, Thanks for the Support *SKAT* Constance La France February 21, 2016 at 12:56 PM Skat, thank you so much for visiting, appreciated

Sara Kendrick December 3, 2015 at 5:20 PM Good flow, rhyme and rhythm..I enjoyed reading this one today..Life does give us some people who can be good at putting daggers in the back..Thanks for the visits to my p age..Sara Constance La France December 3, 2015 at 5:27 PM Sara, thanks for the visit, sadly life is full of such people, one has to just remove the daggers on go on ~

James Inman December 3, 2015 at 8:59 AM BW, the quality of this write is exceptional. The first line incredibly strong, and "...raining on my soul..." also wonderful, as is the imagery. The well placed rhyme give it a smooth flow and make it easy to read; and, of course the content is sensitive, sad and beautiful. Constance La France December 3, 2015 at 2:40 PM James, thanks so much for the nice comment, this is the first Canzone poem I have written, I did a bit of research and it was the form Dante used, it can be any rhyme scheme you want and actually even lines are flexible, there can be up to 7 verse but I only did one, I chose to use Dante's rhyme scheme, if you want to know what it is, send me a soup mail ~

Rahy Hy December 3, 2015 at 8:31 AM I have been betrayed by people who were closest to me too. Even though the experience was excruciating, I came out stronger and even a better person..As long as we don't let that experience define us or make our heart bitter, everything will work out for the better... Great write Broken Wings... I hope your pain will be replaced by joy very soon. Love, Rahy Rahy Hy December 3, 2015 at 3:03 PM I am an illiterate souper... I don't know how it's done! Sorry! :-) Constance La France December 3, 2015 at 2:44 PM oh, you do not have soup mail ~ Constance La France December 3, 2015 at 2:41 PM Rahy, you are so right things like this do make us stronger but still when it happens it is shattering, I am a strong person although my wings are eternally broken ~ I am sending you a soup mail.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma December 3, 2015 at 1:54 AM Oh wow.. getting direction out in sadness too.. bravo broken! Magnificent write!! Constance La France December 3, 2015 at 7:13 AM Upma, thanks for your words, in poetry I can let go of the sadness, in reality, I put on a mask of happiness, no one could guess at the depth of my sorrow ~