Gregory Richard Barden Poet Rhyme

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Blood and Fire

I'd never drawn a breath until I'd seen

          A tremble of the black moon in your eye,

The next was taken by the impish glean

That bared your heinous soul,

          Fierce flames of piceous coal ...

                    To kindle with my core, your object, sly.


Gone, my will, the instant that you spoke -

          My blood, as molten metal with each word,

                    That wanton beast within that you awoke

                    Now scorching with its cause,

          And impaling, deep, its claws ...

The flesh 'tween bad and good ... now aptly blurred.




~ 6th Place ~  in the "Premiere Number 150 Any Form" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Rhyme Time 3" Poetry Contest, Laura Loo, Sponsor. I enjoy your contests very much, and I hope you keep having them!

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Sandra Haight May 30, 2018 at 4:18 PM Such powerfully deep and dark metaphors, Gregory. "The flesh 'tween bad and good ...now aptly blurred." The pain of obsession...Congratulations on your fine placement on this short list of winners. Sandra Gregory Richard Barden May 31, 2018 at 8:29 AM Thank you so very much, Sandra, I'm glad you liked this one - it's special to me! Blessings! :-) <3

Line Gauthier May 27, 2018 at 11:03 AM Back with more congrats, Gregory. Gregory Richard Barden May 27, 2018 at 11:41 PM Thank you muchly, Line! ;-) <3

Carrie Richards May 24, 2018 at 1:00 PM Wow........ ....your poetry, when dark or when it's not, throbs like a heartbeat, captivates our attention! Well done, as always! Gregory Richard Barden May 27, 2018 at 11:40 PM Many kind thanks to you, Carrie - I SO appreciate your gracious comments, my friend! :-) <3

Susan Gentry May 24, 2018 at 12:14 PM Congratulations on your win. Well done. Gregory Richard Barden May 27, 2018 at 11:40 PM That's very kind, Susan, thank you! :-) <3

Janice Canerdy May 24, 2018 at 7:57 AM How aptly you have described the wicked seducer, Greg! CONGRATS!! Janice Gregory Richard Barden May 27, 2018 at 11:39 PM Thank you so much, Janice - blessings! :-) <3

Line Gauthier May 11, 2018 at 5:44 PM Love your opening lines " I'd never drawn a breath until I'd seen A tremble of the black moon in your eye" Congrats on your podium finish, Gregory. Gregory Richard Barden May 15, 2018 at 5:44 PM That's very kind of you, Line - so pleased those lines made an impression - I love to create unusual metaphor and imagery. Blessings! :-) <3

Heidi Sands May 11, 2018 at 1:34 PM Congratulations for your win Gregory :) Gregory Richard Barden May 15, 2018 at 5:43 PM Thank you so much, Heidi! :-) <3

Beautiful Scars May 11, 2018 at 12:53 PM great metaphorical use of language Gregory! I am not surprised to see this poem is yours...great job...Thank you and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo Gregory Richard Barden May 15, 2018 at 5:37 PM Thank you so much for my placement, Luloo, I am so honored to be on a list of such wonderful writers, and humbled to be placed so high! I'm very pleased that you enjoyed it - blessings and best wishes! :-)