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Doing research on this form I see that there is not a definitively accepted explanation of what or how it should read. So I've given it a shot based off of the few different assumptions I could find. This one is from the description of Sedoka which is based on dialogue between two, with both asking the same or similar questions, but from their own perspective..

Blinding Thoughts

Her brown eyes sparkle,
never seeing me stand near.
Could I ever approach her?

Each day I wonder 
if he might see me this time.
Would he ever approach me?

feelingssedoka

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 1/11/2023 7:30:00 AM

FJ, this is fantastic! I enjoyed it.

FJ Thomas
Date: 1/11/2023 9:30:00 AM

Thank you Edward. I do hope I have somewhat grasped the concept. Still researching!

Lisa Ricci

Date: 1/10/2023 8:03:00 AM

Good Morning. First I love entries of romance and love. Second, I very much enjoyed the conversation/thoughts of both sides as they wonder. I consider this wonderful poetry that you leave us readers with. Thank you for sharing your poetic talent. It was an honor turning to your page today. Keep enjoying poetry and poetrysoup too.

FJ Thomas
Date: 1/10/2023 8:11:00 AM

Good morning Lisa, thank you for your positive thoughts. I do appreciate them.

Joseph May

Date: 1/10/2023 7:20:00 AM

Just a simple hello would break the ice, instead they pads as ships in the night, Nicely penned Flo

FJ Thomas
Date: 1/10/2023 8:10:00 AM

Exactly. Such a simple thing to make them both happy, yet they wait. Thanks again Joseph

Hilo Poet

Date: 1/10/2023 6:09:00 AM

Your Ni kutata's (two stanzas) of your Sedoka is exactly as you had formulated them, FJ, rendering solutions to their queries--marvelously done. I enjoyed this very much my friend, Aloha William

FJ Thomas
Date: 1/10/2023 8:02:00 AM

Ah William if only I could find reliable, consistent information on this form. Sadly I remain woefully ignorant. But your kind words give me hope that I am at least heading in the correct direction! Thank you :)