Andrea Dietrich Poet Etheree

Blackness Now Is Mine

"I see a line of cars and they're all painted black
With flowers and my love both never to come back"
 from Rolling Stones' Paint it Black

You’ve 
died and
gone away.
Your soul has fled!
Abiding blackness
now seeps into my head.
The bright hues all around me
I simply cannot comprehend.
How sickening is the blue of sky
and the vivid green of trees hovering
around the ground beneath which you now lie!
Let their leaves turn black, and let that sky
turn overcast. How can sun shine?
Pretty flowers red and blue -
I want to see them die.
Blackness now is mine,
for in this world
no longer 
is there
You.

Written 11/14/2015
Aug. 23, 2021 for Chantelle Anne Cooke's The Color Black Poetry Contest

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Unseeking Seeker August 30, 2021 at 1:12 AM What an amazing Etheree, Andrea! Congrats on your win

Rama Balasubramanian August 29, 2021 at 11:45 AM Sadness of grief well penned friend. Amazing write. Congratulations

Jennifer Walker November 21, 2015 at 4:10 PM So depressing. Dark and solemn but molded into a fantastic poem.

Iris E. Sankey- Lewis November 21, 2015 at 3:59 PM Such passionate tribute. All will be well. Thanks for stopping by with your warmth.

John Beam November 21, 2015 at 8:47 AM Congrats Andrea on the Honor. I enjoyed your interpretation.

Jan Allison November 21, 2015 at 8:21 AM I am sure many can relate to this sad write - brought a lump to my throat Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

D.W. Rodgers November 20, 2015 at 7:40 AM A diamond but carefully honed, certainly not rough, and a fitting testament to a lost soul.

Nathan D. November 19, 2015 at 10:24 AM I love it. is there any thing blacker then "I want to see them die" good luck in the contest

Arthur Vaso November 18, 2015 at 11:01 PM Beautiful Andrea, I love the inspiration here!

Lindsay Laurie November 18, 2015 at 8:52 PM Hello Andrea... nicely constructed Andrea and unfortunately many people will be able to relate to your poem - good luck - Lindsay

Constance La France November 18, 2015 at 4:47 PM Andrea, this is outstanding Constance La France November 18, 2015 at 4:49 PM A winner for sure

David Meade November 18, 2015 at 3:42 PM The color of black symbolizes the grief of death, it absorbs all light and life. A powerful write -- your center line is ground level and then you bury it deep. Nicely done.

Kp Nunez November 18, 2015 at 2:24 PM There is so much anger and dark emotion here, Andie. I can feel a rebellion brewing...all the best in the contest. hugs!

Wilma Neels November 18, 2015 at 12:33 PM Andrea, you really captured the essence of dark with your write. Absolutely enjoyed it tonight ;) enjoy the rest of your Wednesday :)

Anne-Lise Andresen November 18, 2015 at 11:30 AM - Andrea, this is so wonderful ! - Hard to put other word for it - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Daver Austin November 18, 2015 at 9:48 AM This graveyard scene is dramatic as a pistol. All the things one won't admit, but are felt nevertheless. Love, daver

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders November 17, 2015 at 9:09 PM This is great, Andrea! A perfect interpretation of the song. All the songs for this contest I know so well (except for one). It makes it hard to choose one. I'm leaning towards Winds of Change. I was a senior in high school when the Berlin Wall came down...thanks for visiting my Homeward Bound entry. I usually steer clear of lyrics, but the music reminded me of a church hymn, so I just went with it.

Nette Onclaud November 17, 2015 at 2:37 PM how deep, somber and beautiful!... i am seeing a lot of double etheree; i did mine using another form,hope that's okay... ohh so marvelous, andie.. huggs

Heather Ober November 17, 2015 at 8:30 AM Wow!! This is so full of emotion - sorrow, anger, grief, loneliness. You capture so much in this restrictive form!

James Inman November 17, 2015 at 7:45 AM Andrea I stopped by wondering, "I wonder what Andreas up to?" Wow! I guess I found out. This is incredible. Intense emotion, very strong write. Double Etheree!! One to definitely be proud of.

Ravi Sathasivam November 17, 2015 at 6:29 AM Excellent. Well penned. Very moving poem . Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it

Theresa Cw November 17, 2015 at 3:35 AM Wow, Andrea if only I could write as well as you. I'll have you know since I first started with poetry soup I have followed your many expertise of how in depth you always seem to glow in any given matter... this many be a dark and blackness poem but you sure do shine bright like a star...... xx 7 huggs Theresa

Joe Maverick November 16, 2015 at 11:01 PM Oh how blaarck..' not a favourite theme of mine Andrea, but I am making the effort to comment, its well enough done and best for the contest..'

Lin Lane November 16, 2015 at 8:02 PM Well, Andrea...it was worth the wait. You captured the dark mood of death.

Matthew Anish November 16, 2015 at 7:50 PM This is a moving poem and I like the song you quoted from. Is this about someone in particular? Peace & Love Matthew Anish

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