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Blackbirds In The Rain

blackbirds in the rain walking among the fallen leaves under the old mango tree with dripping leaves bathing the grass below blackbirds diligently lifting the rain soaked fallen leaves peering underneath for insects and worms flushed out by the drizzling rain pausing to gulp one down then scooting off again searching for more sitting under the shed with raindrops playing their music on the galvanised sheet roof with a beat that resonates within my inner being putting me in a trance connecting me to the rain and the puddles on the ground with the raindrops gently tapping the water's surface creating rings that collide with one another disrupting their individual shapes creating a dynamic new pattern reflecting their unity and bubbling with energy in the drizzling rain O what a deep feeling of peacefulness and serenity with the rain the dripping leaves and the puddles serenading my spirit with the eternal song of Nature and merging it into the Unity Of All Things
It was raining today. There was a constant drizzle for hours. I sat in a shed attached to the house, watching the blackbirds in action in the rain, searching for their food. The constant rhythmic sound of the rain on the galvanised sheet roof of the shed and the gentle drama playing out in the backyard with the blackbirds was a spiritual experience for me connecting me with Nature and the unity of all things as mentioned in the last verse. .

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Date: 8/1/2015 9:16:00 PM
I love a good free verse and yours is exceptional.. Congrats on your big win, John!
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john beharry
Date: 8/22/2015 8:38:00 PM
Lyric Man, thank you for your assessment and congrats. Have a nice day!
Date: 7/27/2015 11:14:00 PM
Awesome pen BW! Powerful words n wonderful; expressions n here u r at top place dear! Big congrats!
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john beharry
Date: 8/22/2015 8:36:00 PM
Dr Sharma, thank you kindly. May you have a wonderful day!
Date: 7/26/2015 2:31:00 AM
Wonderful poem. I like how you have shaped the words like trickling water. I can hear it and smell the dampbearth and see the birds glistening in the rain. Congratulations on t your placing. SuZ
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john beharry
Date: 8/22/2015 8:33:00 PM
Suzanne, I am glad that you could vicariously experience the magic of the scenario. It was truly wonderful. Thanks for your congratulations. Have a lovely day!
Date: 7/25/2015 11:03:00 PM
Awesome write on Nature and the world we breathe. Congrats on your win! A7
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john beharry
Date: 8/22/2015 8:26:00 PM
Thank you very much, Robert. Have a wonderful day!
Date: 7/25/2015 10:56:00 PM
John. Congratulations on your awesome win. Love SKAT
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john beharry
Date: 8/22/2015 8:24:00 PM
Skat, thanks for your congrats, but quite frankly, although I consider this to be my best free verse poem, I had dismissed the idea of placing in your contest since when I checked the status in Member Contest Entries after entries closed, I saw it was classified as N/A. It is a pleasant surprise that it placed. Thank You!
Date: 11/15/2014 7:48:00 AM
Loved it, John! a 7 and a sav . Especially liked the way you ended your poem with those last 9 lines. Blessings, Darlene
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john beharry
Date: 11/16/2014 8:15:00 PM
Darlene, Thanks for your rating. Those last lines reflect the essence of the piece. Best Regards!
Date: 11/14/2014 11:12:00 PM
John, with your descriptive words I felt like I was there. nice write :) eve and one of my fav.
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john beharry
Date: 11/16/2014 8:09:00 PM
Thanks for your comment, Eve. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece. The words wrote themselves.