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Black Swan

I was always looking up to everyone, as they were looking down.

It was another day in paradise but the only view that I was concerned was that of my reflection.

I was different. 

I see angels flying over the water, swimming with majestic animals.

While they were lured to the water by their souls, I was lured to what was next to the water, fire. 

The hot fire warmed my heart, but then I realized I had burned my wings, it was amazing cause I never knew how to fly and now I did not have to learn.

I was always looking up to everyone, as they were looking down.

I would play with fire and know only "He" would see the joy in my smiles.

Everyone else was scared I would burn their wings.

My downfall was not playing with fire, or being different. 

My downfall was that I judged them for judging me.

Instead of playing with fire, I did not play at all.

I judged them back, except I was alone, and did not know better, and now I am alone forever, playing with fire.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 4/25/2016 3:00:00 PM
Enjoyed this one as well. I used to be afraid of using "I" because I didnt want others to think it was about "me" lol (silly I know.. I can careless now lol) Keep writing! =)
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Date: 4/24/2016 8:49:00 PM
Dear Hani Sorry it took me so long to reply to your e-mail but I'm glad you dropped me the note to come and read at your site. I throughly enjoyed the read, you have alot of talent my poetic friend, my favorite part is about playing with fire, I know what you mean I've been burnt myself at times, OMG, but never give in to those whom put you down about your work. Just write what you feel, stay true to yourself, your good girl, never doubt that, cheri d.
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Date: 4/19/2016 10:20:00 PM
Very intense and dramatic write, Hani, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Date: 3/15/2016 11:10:00 AM
Hani, Congrats in Julia's contest.. interesting topic. Love LINDA
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Date: 3/10/2016 12:19:00 AM
Congrats on ur awesome winning poem Hani.
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Date: 3/9/2016 10:20:00 PM
Hi Hani, Congratulations on your placement in the contest.
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Date: 3/9/2016 11:59:00 AM
This is a really well-told story from a unique and provocative perspective. Congratulations on your placement.
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Hani Gholami
Date: 3/9/2016 6:05:00 PM
Thank you Mark, all the best.
Date: 3/9/2016 2:54:00 AM
Well done for your third place win in my contest! I do have a suggestion, however - that you knock out the last word. It is more dramatic to end with 'fire'.
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Hani Gholami
Date: 3/9/2016 6:04:00 PM
Thank you for the suggestion could not agree with you more. Thanks for sponsoring the contest and enjoying my poem, all the best.