Nette Onclaud Poet Dramatic Verse

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Black Sheep's Bullying

Hard knuckles punch young boys--
    to drill batchmates with madness
where innocence lays bloodied, done--
      from a quickening of fear, a groan of oppression:

Our children silent as unfinished dreams,
  in this wasteland of vicious apathy-
     As hunters' whims injure meek lamb
through their rabid sense of entitlement… 

Is it about a fancy of being anti-heroes
   or alleviating youth's untold pain?
 Tell us sheep, hearts of black;
for each lesion pierced, your own essence...torn apart.


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For Lu Loo's NA the Day Away Contest
Submitted 9/4/2019
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Re-post: 1 -12 lines ONLY - A Poem That Did NOT Receive
A Ribbon Placement 1-3 Contest

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David Drowley September 9, 2019 at 4:05 PM 'Nette, Congratulations on your win. Powerful emotional impact! David'

Richard Lamoureux September 7, 2019 at 9:03 AM So glad this sheep is top of the heap! Congrats and a big hug.

Beautiful Scars September 7, 2019 at 2:01 AM this hit hard because my daughter has been being bullied since last year. It's not easy as a kid, let alone a mother. Great way to capture the essence of youthful pain at its best. Loved this poem...Thank you for your participation and congratulations on your placement :)-luloo

Jennifer Proxenos July 19, 2019 at 9:06 AM Your write the most magnificent poetry Nette, you stand apart and you grace poetry soup with your magnificent talent. I really enjoyed this write and felt sorry for the the sad looking lambs! Best of luck. Hugs, Jenn.

Ralph Sergi July 15, 2019 at 3:17 PM Hi nette: You evoked a sadness for the poor lambs A very powerful poem!

Anne-Lise Andresen July 15, 2019 at 1:13 PM - A powerful writing ... "with the cards on the table" - Winner wishes for you, Nette :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Gershon Wolf July 14, 2019 at 7:23 PM Somehow I am reminded of Lord of the Flies -- the jungle bubbling up beneath the thin veneer of civilization. :) gw

Eve Roper July 14, 2019 at 1:13 PM Bravo, my dear Nette, very well written with great impact of feel.. Hugs my dear

Silent One July 14, 2019 at 5:20 AM wow... powerful poem Nette...

Connie Marcum Wong July 13, 2019 at 11:30 AM Wow Nette, this piece shouts and is magnificent! It is sure to garner notice in the contest my friend! : ) xxoo

Richard Lamoureux July 13, 2019 at 9:23 AM You made me feel sorry for the black sheep. Hugs Rick.

Arturo Michael July 13, 2019 at 7:15 AM It takes our own wool being torn apart...to do something about it...

Panagiota Romios July 13, 2019 at 12:19 AM Nette~ I am so moved by your imagery and powerful words and theme, A poem with true meaning that matters in this mad universe! Also a FAV. Gratefully, Panagiota