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Black Sheep - Too Late For Contest

black sheep of the flock
covers herself in white paint
silent deception ...

when she starts bleating
sound arouses suspicion
others are wary

storm clouds gather
dark face exposed by the rain
deception revealed

7/22/19

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Connie Marcum Wong

July 28, 2019 at 12:47 PM

Excellent Jan. This would have been a winner! xxoo

Caren Krutsinger

July 27, 2019 at 4:57 AM

This poem is a winner whether there is a contest or not, Jan. I know you know that. Bleat.

Winged Warrior

July 27, 2019 at 12:48 AM

Great verse Jan..love ya...you should re-enter for another contest...^WW^ :o)

Gershon Wolf

July 23, 2019 at 6:59 PM

This is really a deep, well-written senryu, Jan. The proverbial wolf in sheep's clothing. ~ Guess I ought to know in Chicago

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:44 PM

It has many layers to the poem and is open to interpretation GW:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

July 23, 2019 at 6:52 PM

very nice, Jan. sorry you missed the contest. I am sure this was one I lost.

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:44 PM

I probably would have got n/a lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

July 22, 2019 at 8:55 PM

Nicely done, Jan! Great accompanying video!

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:44 PM

MJ was superb he died all too young but his music lives on:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

July 22, 2019 at 7:59 PM

Hi Jan, We got something in common, I too am considered the black sheep of family. Hey you are "good" to keep. I wish you had gotten this in the contest on time - Alexis

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:43 PM

I was always treated so differently to my sister ... will say no more lol:-) hugs jan xx

David Mchattie

July 22, 2019 at 5:34 PM

The 'black sheep' tend to be the most interesting people to talk to. Have a great day my friend.

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:42 PM

lol I've met a few I have to say lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Rico Leffanta

July 22, 2019 at 4:52 PM

So that is why Trump hangs kids in cages, i.e., waiting for raindrops in the desert to wash the colour away? Well done! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:42 PM

LOl Rico am sure there is a poem in that for you!:=) hugs jan xx

Frederic Parker

July 22, 2019 at 4:36 PM

we all have masks dear poet, the one we show strangers, the one we show friends, the one we show those we love, the one we hold for ourselves,

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:41 PM

oh so true Frederic, sadly as i have found to my cost that we uncover the masks of those who we held in high esteem to know everything was a lie:-( hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

July 22, 2019 at 4:29 PM

i enjoyed your poem very much, jan, contest or not!

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:40 PM

thanks Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Eric Boddie

July 22, 2019 at 3:55 PM

i, too, am a black sheep....seldom absent of emotion, often deprived of sleep....why should care be a journey too many find too steep....but as long as i have Breath, your friendship, i will surely keep....i do apologize for my absence, but so much loss hit me so fast that i just needed some time to just think and see if i could rekindle my inspirations....i hope you understand my dear friend....

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:40 PM

sorry you've had a tough time Eric, welcome back to soup:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

July 22, 2019 at 8:00 PM

Hi Eric, It is good to see you posting again my friend:-) Alexis

Matthew Anish

July 22, 2019 at 11:34 AM

You created three nice short poems here! I write poetry and also write about collectibles for money! I hope you and yours are well. Thanks for the comment! Matthew Anish

Jan Allison

July 24, 2019 at 4:40 PM

Thanks Matthew we see the cancer specialist soon just hope the radiotherapy treatment has cured hubby for good:-) hugs jan xx