Black Cloaked Man



In one ghost whisper of a town,
the mourning sunset had bloodshot eyes
A tombstone place that was
	long shadow 
past it’s boomtown prime
Withering eureka hope       fills the short cups
of the abandoned mine folk
Whiskey tears takes a canary desperado gulp
Purgatory waiting  ~  Gut rot 
has all the suicidal time in the world
to stomach more wasted dreams

On this dying twilight night,
	a bad moon is darkly rising ...
as the half-empty 
		saloon 
	doors 
swing

During visitation of a short desert weep,
	               a 6-foot four 
twin emerald glow     mysteriously
steps out of the downpour

A black-cloaked man,
with twelve lead fingernails,
was tapping a cold metal dirge melody
		       as he walked in
Taking up space for two,
the raven-haired man said to no one in particular,
Death was his sidearm friend 

After ordering the strongest bottle
from a shakily, weak-handed bartend ...
the tall, dark-clothed man
saw gambling courage    slowly     returning
in the pale faces of the paying patrons

Green hue greed shone in the mirror reflection — 
his baleful, beryl stare saw that avarice look before
Plenty of bottom card dealt undertaker action
was coming ... coffin photos taken of a bloody floor

Midnight was always the best time 
for quick draw ire killings
When drunken surfeit hearts had a belly full
of wanton violence feelings

Losing was the spark
	  that lit the firewater spillings
Scarlet darkness overshadowed
		the cemetery sob kneelings

Cloaked in the mantle of a soul reaper,
the blackness of a red bullet hole
         was a grim reminder
to those witnessing the terrifying departure
		         of slow hand ... 
	  cheating, widow purse keepers — 
That a dozen toasts for the living
always were closing-of-the-eye cheaper

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 1/9/2019 5:34:00 PM
Hello Freddie, I lke the story in a poetry form. Have a nice evening my friend. Peace, love, joy. Darlene
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Date: 12/13/2018 7:53:00 AM
beautiful write...uncanny...sounds like the reaper man from hell lol
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Date: 12/12/2018 10:25:00 AM
You, dear Freddie, are always bountiful with imagery. Love this Old Western style scene in all its sad grimness. I joined the Cowboy Art Museum for one year and it has drawn me to the Old West so especially love the read. A fave. Keep the ink wet and be blessed always. <3 Kim
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Date: 12/12/2018 9:19:00 AM
Excellent, Freddie!! You took me along with you, as I saw it all evolve from the security of a shadowy corner, not daring to breathe or even whisper, afraid of breaking the spell. Such poetic narrative is hard to emulate, believe me! ~ Best regards // paul
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Date: 12/11/2018 6:35:00 PM
Masterfully penned epic... a riveting tale to the end! You filled this with excellent detail, and I love so many of the phrases you used- like "Withering hope fills the short cups" and "When drunken surfeit hearts had a belly full"... very aptly described. Well done!! ;)
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Date: 12/11/2018 6:20:00 PM
An Amazing epic, Freddie.. Exciting and interesting.. Really stirred my curiosity.. Bravo!! Blessings to you..
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