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her sunlight shaded with clouds burning love shuttered in pain. rainfalls pour down on her feet black widow spits in demon's face. broken mirror hangs in the wall she sees face dirty and old. pulling down tears one by one rinse the wound caused by his hands. she caves underground to feel the darkness composed herself while brokenhearted. wait for the morning to witness the sunlight free her mind to feel the long lost love. fiercefully, she ran through the door no regrets, left her home alone. blue and purple paintings on skin have gone when she dance in the rain.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Date: 5/22/2016 8:24:00 AM
A metaphorical winner, congratulations Alyah for feature honors...
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Date: 8/13/2015 3:20:00 PM
Pain and anguish, enough to break a person down. Not all have the will or the courage to put a stop to it. Very expressive write, Aiyah. #7 ~ hugs // paul
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Date: 8/11/2015 11:18:00 AM
i so like the interplay of images here, pain and hope.. sweet congrats, aiyah.. galeng!
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Date: 8/10/2015 6:28:00 PM
AIYAH, :-) Congratulations on your wonderful win! *SKAT*
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Date: 8/10/2015 3:23:00 PM
Awesome use of metaphors !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara
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Date: 8/10/2015 10:30:00 AM
Back to congratulate you dear one. I hope you are keeping well. hugs!
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Date: 8/10/2015 1:38:00 AM
Congrats on ur awesome winning poem Aiyah! Splendid work! Thnx for visit to my page!
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Date: 8/6/2015 9:20:00 AM
This is an outstanding poem my dear friend, Aiyah though it's poignant. This woman doesn't deserve this excruciating pain and no one deserves it either. You are a very talented poet my dear friend! Hugging this precious gem of yours and you. Thank you so much for sharing! Thanks a lot as well for your precious time reading my poem, encouraging words, friendship etc. A fave. God bless you always! love lots and biggest hug, Leonora
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Date: 8/5/2015 11:29:00 PM
Powerful image you painted here here, Aiyah. I ache for the woman in this poem. I' have read this several times, my mind riveted to the picture in my mind. Your talent and skill is obvious here. hugs, hugs and hugs some more. 7...dare I fav this reminder of pain? Kim
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Date: 8/5/2015 5:10:00 PM
abusive treatment has no this world or any other you can bully me, I encourage you to try....but you will experience an adverse consequence, I tell no lie.....the only way to stop any abuse is to confront it head on without works for me....;)
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Date: 8/5/2015 1:04:00 PM
- Painful painting ...... it was good that she left .... hope she will never turn back, no one deserves such pain - A well written ... but very sad poem, dear friend Aiyah - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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