Black

Enveloped in black
Darkness of a living death
The black shroud tightens
Heightened frenzy of thrashing
Pinned in the arms of Black Knight

For Andrea's Color Tanka Contest
May 14, 2013

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David Scott

June 10, 2013 at 12:05 PM

I LIKE THE COLOUR BLACK LOVE YOUR WRITE XX DAVIDSCOTT

Eileen Manassian

June 10, 2013 at 12:09 PM

Why thank you, David. Glad you stopped by!

Timothy Hicks

May 15, 2013 at 3:32 PM

I wish to explain myself on The Nameless. It was based off a Lovecraft story I read awhile back. I was wanting it all to feel like one big facade, the world as he knows it, coming apart at the seems. Why? Who knows... like Lovecraft's stories he never explains the why, which is the reason they are so eerie.

Eileen Manassian

May 15, 2013 at 3:37 PM

OH! Thanks for the explanation! :) I did get that eerie feeling with yours! You did well!

Painted Hunter

May 15, 2013 at 6:57 AM

Hey you! How the heck are ya? This is great, Eileen. I especially love it because black (outside of camo) is my favorite color. I was going to do one for this contest but it never really took off for me...I had black in mind, though.

Eileen Manassian

May 15, 2013 at 7:02 AM

You know what they say....Great MINDS think alike! :) Missed ya!

Timothy Hicks

May 14, 2013 at 11:52 PM

Very creative entry! I'm not sure if I feel more imprisoned or protected... just what is this black knight's true intentions? he he he... I'm not sure why, but I figured if you would do the contest it would have been Pink or Purple... surprised to see you do Black though... you're surprisingly unpredictable sometimes... lol!

Eileen Manassian

May 15, 2013 at 5:48 AM

Well...I was going more for the imprisoned bit with the last line reading pinned in his arms. Well...PURPLE is my favorite color, then pink so you got that right, but I wrote one on purple and thought it was a Tanka when it was a Sedoka...so I didn't want to revise. Just found a new thing...AND good to be unpredictable. Keeps interest going, yes?

Richard D Seal

May 14, 2013 at 5:46 PM

Hmmm is black actually a colour my little Desert Orchid, trust you to be awkward, lol, yes I think you've done all right here. You do like your Knights, shiny or dark ha ha. Take care, Richard

Eileen Manassian

May 15, 2013 at 5:50 AM

Well, if you must be difficult...white is the absence of light and black is the presence of all colors, but...really Richard...must you be difficult??? ;) Perhaps you've gone from dragon slayer to dark knight? Can't keep up with you! I think I like you being a gardener who tends to his flowers the best! :)

Demetrios Trifiatis

May 14, 2013 at 3:05 PM

Excellent! H.M. Good luck, athough not necessary!

Eileen Manassian

May 15, 2013 at 5:51 AM

From you, always necessary, my dear poet! :) I value your high marks greatly!

Heather Ober

May 14, 2013 at 9:38 AM

Wow!! Very creative entry for Andrea's contest. You should write tanka more often, lady! :)

Eileen Manassian

May 14, 2013 at 11:54 AM

I've missed you, Heather! :) Thanks for the visit!

Poet Tacito

May 14, 2013 at 7:17 AM

The darkness, shines. This was very intense.

Barbara Gorelick

May 14, 2013 at 7:02 AM

quite the description of black! A bit on the dark side...lol. enjoyed. BG

Eileen Manassian

May 15, 2013 at 5:46 AM

Thanks Barbara....thought I'd be a little on the dark side! I usually write romantic mush! A change is always good! :)

Russell Sivey

May 14, 2013 at 6:07 AM

This is quite a brilliant dark poem...dark only as the color my friend! It is a truly wonderful piece, one that I enjoyed reading immensely this morning! What a powerful poem, a intriguing write, Great Work!!

Eileen Manassian

May 15, 2013 at 5:45 AM

Well...I'd done a sedoka on purple...cause I thought I was writing a Tanka...imagine. So...had to go with another theme and I thought...why not? Thanks for the visit! :) I appreciate it.

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