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Bitter Apples

In a derelict farmhouse, it's early dawn
She counts the apples spread like marbles on the floor

Amber sun streams in, 
forming prisms on the walls
There's a prison in her mind that locks a door

The orchards are the center of her world

She lifts the apples to her lips
and tastes the bitterness of tears 
The sustenance of suffering is fear

She lives in a world that has no shore
Only apples to fill the void
And a silent voice within she can't ignore

There are walls she cannot climb
There is nothing she can find
to break the chain that binds her to the floor

A journal left behind
is written in her hand,
but elements of life
will disappear

A season will unfold
to makes the reader cold
as if one's fragile reason has no core


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6/2/17
God Knows Where I Am : Contest sponsored by Craig Cornish

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 6/13/2017 10:33:00 AM
Bravo Carrie, I loved you take on this story and your clever use of "core" to tie everything together.
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Date: 6/12/2017 9:39:00 PM
Congratulations Carrie, I knew this would do well...such a sad story
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Date: 6/12/2017 9:08:00 PM
congrats Carrie...I feel you have captured the essence of the story here.
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Date: 6/11/2017 8:00:00 AM
Love the flow and beauty of this sad write. Congrats, Carrie!
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Date: 6/3/2017 12:58:00 PM
such a sad story you have caught the essence of her last days well..really love the stanza that starts with...There are no walls she cannot climb...beautiful writing...good luck
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Date: 6/3/2017 6:33:00 AM
This is one of the best I've read so far, Carrie:) amazing work:)
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Date: 6/2/2017 10:00:00 PM
So beautifully expressed, Carrie! I think you hit the "core" of the message of this subject quite well! Good luck in the contest :)
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