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Birds-of-Paradise

When some Birds-of-Paradise sit to dine,
they may eat a fruit like a clementine.
Others prefer an insect to a plant,
favoring a futilely praying mantis.

Copyright © David Crandall | Year Posted 2024

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Kim Rodrigues Date: 11/2/2024 7:42:00 AM Love the rhyme of plant and mantis. Congrats, David! Login to Reply David Crandall Date: 11/2/2024 8:39:00 AM Thanks Kim! David Crandall Date: 11/2/2024 8:38:00 AM Thanks Kim!

Suzette Richards Date: 11/2/2024 1:25:00 AM Congratulations on your 6th place win, David. It was an interesting take on the Bird-of-Paradise brief, but ‘futilely’ in this context threw me. The trailing rhyme (plant/mantis) was perfectly executed. See my soup mail for details to claim your prize. Login to Reply David Crandall Date: 11/2/2024 8:40:00 AM Wow, thanks Suzette! David Crandall Date: 11/2/2024 8:39:00 AM Wow, thanks Suzette!

thriveni c mysore Date: 11/2/2024 1:22:00 AM congratulations dear poet. you bring joy. cheers!!! Login to Reply David Crandall Date: 11/2/2024 8:38:00 AM Thanks Thriveni - nice to hear!

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/20/2024 10:16:00 AM Is the trailing rhyme with mantis and the preceding plant? I am trying to find example and I feel confused on how to do this. but this is nice and I think you did it right. Login to Reply Suzette Richards Date: 11/2/2024 1:29:00 AM To answer your question as to the sequence: In a trailing rhyme, the single stressed syllable word comes first. Apocorante rhyme is when the rhyme sequence is reversed. You may use either model. It was part of the original contest description, but I trimmed it down ... David Crandall Date: 10/20/2024 3:40:00 PM Just after responding I was listening to an old Dylan song, where he says "Hit him like a freight train / Moving with a simple twist of fate" that might be an example of trailing rhyme. David Crandall Date: 10/20/2024 10:32:00 AM Thanks Andrea, if I understood (always a questionable proposition-lol), "plant" (single syllable stressed word) and the first syllable (stressed) of "mantis" make the rhyme. The second syllable of mantis is "trailing". I'm not sure, but I don't think it matters which comes first (single syllable word or two syllable word).

Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/6/2024 12:00:00 AM Birds are fascinating. I enjoy this vignette. Login to Reply

Ink Empress Date: 10/5/2024 3:11:00 AM Beautiful rhymes dear david, bird of paradise is also a plant one that I absolutely love, and i thought of that as i read the title and then i read your poem and i see where youve taken the poem too. I love your creative word weaving here. And the rhythm of flow of this is beautiful. Pleasure reading your work. Sending you light always Login to Reply David Crandall Date: 10/5/2024 9:39:00 AM Thanks Ink Empress! Yes, what a unique flower. Until Suzette mentioned we could write about the plant or the animal, I didn't know there was a bird that also goes by that name.