Big Brother's Promise

For a while our mommy got fat
and so grouchy. I didn’t like that!
But early one day
Dad took mommy away.
They came back and her tummy was flat!

In her arms there was something so small
that I barely could see it at all.
I just wanted to hold
it. You’d think it was gold!
They said, “Don’t let your new brother fall.”

You bawled every day with such might
you gave our cat, Felix, a fright.
It was such a great day
When I heard Mommy say,
“The baby now sleeps through the night.”

Your first smile today was for me.
You’re going to be a good buddy.
There’s so much that we’ll do.
Here’s my promise to you:
The best brother ever I’ll be!

By Andrea Dietrich/ April 28, 2011
For Miranda Lambert's Contest:
"Brotherly Love"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 11/5/2014 8:34:00 AM
Andrea what a funny write! My belly is about to burst with laughter and I am really flat. Love....RAJAT
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Date: 3/20/2014 10:58:00 PM
Andrea Words of sweetness and joy. A creative and fun write about sibling love and caring. Thanks for the lovely comment on my Friendship poem. Hope to hear from you again soon. Hugs
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Date: 11/20/2012 2:57:00 PM
Such compassion you show here Andrea, a lovely poem.....
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Date: 8/11/2011 3:52:00 PM
Cute write. I love Limericks, although I always write them singly (I think most English poets do), but your link-up works well here. Hope you are well. xoxo Robert.
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Date: 6/1/2011 2:43:00 PM
Great job, I loved it.
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Date: 5/27/2011 2:51:00 PM
I love it ,sweet and so loving Andrea . Superb writing. Anne
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Date: 5/11/2011 6:40:00 AM
Wonderful write for the contest. I enjoyed the read. Caryl
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Date: 5/4/2011 8:05:00 PM
ooo! good luck here too... lots of love... take care...p.d.
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Date: 5/3/2011 1:15:00 AM
Aww this was such a sweet write! Love how you did it from the big brother's point of view and in limericks too O_o but still so sweet, I think you captured that big brother's sentiments so well--- ok don't laugh, at first I thought this was like Big Brother as in the tv show, lol & I thought the mommy went to a plastic surgeon or something that's why she had a flat tummy-- ohh duuhhhh I am such a DUmmy dumm dumm-- had to read your first stanza again, lol I need sleep! O_o hugs to you
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Date: 5/1/2011 6:23:00 AM
Nothing so sweet and lovely write as this I have come across since long. This goes to my fav. Andrea
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Date: 4/30/2011 7:02:00 PM
Lovely write .Enjoyed.Best wishes--kashinath
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Date: 4/30/2011 8:07:00 AM
This is cute. I have 3 brothers so remember my youngest one being born. GOOD one. I hope the shots helped your arm but if it is a tear then surgery would be the way to fix it. As for arthritis I suffer everyday with it. Keep a massager by the bed so I can get up in the morning. Get so sore and stiff at times. When I am on my feet for more than 4 hours I ache all over. Need a desk job. ha ha
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Date: 4/29/2011 3:32:00 PM
andie! you really had the same birds in mind for constance's tourney?? maybe seveners think alike, yeyyy! on another point, i was asking who your fav poet is in literature.. mine is pablo neruda... there, hope you caught the drift or i'll be damned, haha! :) huggs
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Date: 4/29/2011 2:07:00 PM
Good one, Andrea : )
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Date: 4/29/2011 1:06:00 PM
What a great poem. I could envision the older brother having these thoughts about a younger brother. Especially having 4 sons myself. Thanks for sharing.
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Date: 4/29/2011 7:40:00 AM
Andrea, very nice poem. I love it. Thanks for sharing....again. Ernilando
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Date: 4/29/2011 4:55:00 AM
So cute and adorable Andrea... perfect for Miranda's contest luv..good luck.. luv the promises professed one bro to another ...so sweetly penned.. a great treasure ..am sure she will luv this entry ... my entry for Nette was done researching both decades so some late 60's some early 70's .. don't know how to title it when it is in between...waiting to hear from sponsor luv..
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Date: 4/29/2011 4:50:00 AM
oh my!! really heartwarming, wooty thing, heartie... i have 5 brothers and it's no wonder i am sometimes funky, hahahha! this goes to the winner's list!! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 4/29/2011 12:18:00 AM
Aw, that's cute, Andrea. Older siblings get disturbed by infants who cry through the night. Nice viewing this through the big brother's eyes. Best wishes in the contest. (The "stop" was a flatline from clogged arteries.) Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/29/2011 12:17:00 AM
I don't get it. What had happened with the fat lady? and where did she go? ....Oh..umm....Sorry my 5 year old took over the keyboard while I went for a potty break...Oh Geez. You wanna explain this to him>? Ha. Just joking! I'm in a corny mood. Nice poem! ~JSLambert
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Date: 4/28/2011 11:48:00 PM
very appealing Andrea. Good luck with this. Love, Joyce
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