Big Brother's Promise

For a while our mommy got fat
and so grouchy. I didn’t like that!
But early one day
Dad took mommy away.
They came back and her tummy was flat!

In her arms there was something so small
that I barely could see it at all.
I just wanted to hold
it. You’d think it was gold!
They said, “Don’t let your new brother fall.”

You bawled every day with such might
you gave our cat, Felix, a fright.
It was such a great day
When I heard Mommy say,
“The baby now sleeps through the night.”

Your first smile today was for me.
You’re going to be a good buddy.
There’s so much that we’ll do.
Here’s my promise to you:
The best brother ever I’ll be!

By Andrea Dietrich/ April 28, 2011
For Miranda Lambert's Contest:
"Brotherly Love"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Chakrabarty Avatar
November 5, 2014 at 8:34 AM
Andrea what a funny write! My belly is about to burst with laughter and I am really flat. Love....RAJAT
Davis Avatar
March 20, 2014 at 10:58 PM
Andrea Words of sweetness and joy. A creative and fun write about sibling love and caring. Thanks for the lovely comment on my Friendship poem. Hope to hear from you again soon. Hugs
Horsman Avatar
November 20, 2012 at 2:57 PM
Such compassion you show here Andrea, a lovely poem.....
Zzzzz Avatar
August 11, 2011 at 3:52 PM
Cute write. I love Limericks, although I always write them singly (I think most English poets do), but your link-up works well here. Hope you are well. xoxo Robert.
Talbott Avatar
June 1, 2011 at 2:43 PM
Great job, I loved it.
Rutherford Avatar
May 27, 2011 at 2:51 PM
I love it ,sweet and so loving Andrea . Superb writing. Anne
Muzzey Avatar
May 11, 2011 at 6:40 AM
Wonderful write for the contest. I enjoyed the read. Caryl
A   Avatar
May 4, 2011 at 8:05 PM
ooo! good luck here too... lots of love... take care...p.d.
K. Avatar
May 3, 2011 at 1:15 AM
Aww this was such a sweet write! Love how you did it from the big brother's point of view and in limericks too O_o but still so sweet, I think you captured that big brother's sentiments so well--- ok don't laugh, at first I thought this was like Big Brother as in the tv show, lol & I thought the mommy went to a plastic surgeon or something that's why she had a flat tummy-- ohh duuhhhh I am such a DUmmy dumm dumm-- had to read your first stanza again, lol I need sleep! O_o hugs to you
Mehta Avatar
May 1, 2011 at 6:23 AM
Nothing so sweet and lovely write as this I have come across since long. This goes to my fav. Andrea
Poet Avatar
April 30, 2011 at 7:02 PM
Lovely write .Enjoyed.Best wishes--kashinath
Babcock Avatar
April 30, 2011 at 8:07 AM
This is cute. I have 3 brothers so remember my youngest one being born. GOOD one. I hope the shots helped your arm but if it is a tear then surgery would be the way to fix it. As for arthritis I suffer everyday with it. Keep a massager by the bed so I can get up in the morning. Get so sore and stiff at times. When I am on my feet for more than 4 hours I ache all over. Need a desk job. ha ha
Onclaud Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 3:32 PM
andie! you really had the same birds in mind for constance's tourney?? maybe seveners think alike, yeyyy! on another point, i was asking who your fav poet is in literature.. mine is pablo neruda... there, hope you caught the drift or i'll be damned, haha! :) huggs
Horne Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 2:07 PM
Good one, Andrea : )
Larocca Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 1:06 PM
What a great poem. I could envision the older brother having these thoughts about a younger brother. Especially having 4 sons myself. Thanks for sharing.
Tugaff Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 7:40 AM
Andrea, very nice poem. I love it. Thanks for sharing....again. Ernilando
Sweetheart Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 4:55 AM
So cute and adorable Andrea... perfect for Miranda's contest luv..good luck.. luv the promises professed one bro to another ...so sweetly penned.. a great treasure ..am sure she will luv this entry ... my entry for Nette was done researching both decades so some late 60's some early 70's .. don't know how to title it when it is in between...waiting to hear from sponsor luv..
Onclaud Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 4:50 AM
oh my!! really heartwarming, wooty thing, heartie... i have 5 brothers and it's no wonder i am sometimes funky, hahahha! this goes to the winner's list!! :) huggs, nette
Devonshire Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 12:18 AM
Aw, that's cute, Andrea. Older siblings get disturbed by infants who cry through the night. Nice viewing this through the big brother's eyes. Best wishes in the contest. (The "stop" was a flatline from clogged arteries.) Love, Carolyn
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April 29, 2011 at 12:17 AM
I don't get it. What had happened with the fat lady? and where did she go? ....Oh..umm....Sorry my 5 year old took over the keyboard while I went for a potty break...Oh Geez. You wanna explain this to him>? Ha. Just joking! I'm in a corny mood. Nice poem! ~JSLambert
Johnson Avatar
April 28, 2011 at 11:48 PM
very appealing Andrea. Good luck with this. Love, Joyce
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