David Kavanagh Poet Rhyme

Beyond the West Window

“The sounds of Earth is the music of my soul”


           I remember the valley rolled with thunder 
             A section of tenors echoed from above 
          The sky was shredded, by forked lightning 
           Somehow that moment transcended love 

          Static electric rose up through the cloisters
           The organist played like a demon inspired 
            Rooftop gargoyles overflowed with water
           And eyes welled up, as if nature conspired 

            Rivers were swollen, the lake was heavy 
            A boy soprano, almost pierced the dome 
            Landslides rumbled away in the distance 
         High on ambivalence, I thought about Rome

           The conductor was whipped into a frenzy 
               Fitfully pointing his wand in the air 
          As the tempest outside reached crescendo
               Defiant altos, sang a hymnal prayer 

          Beyond the west window, storms fell silent 
           Shafts of light, shone through from space 
           Together the choir reached out in emotion 
          As they swayed stoically, to Amazing Grace 
 
Originally penned 08/10/22
2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 14 Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Mark Toney
09/13/22

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Sam Kauffman October 7, 2022 at 10:31 AM Amazing grace indeed David! This poem overflows with amazing grace, wonderful imagery and great musical metaphors. This is a fav for me. So well done!!! Congrats and high fives for your win! Cheers! David Kavanagh October 7, 2022 at 11:06 AM Your far too kind Sam, and I’ll take the Fav to my grave, I quite like this one too, was a great feeling when it started coming together, I’ve no idea how or why my muse tapped into this one, but was delighted it did, thanks again, cheers David

Lin Lane October 3, 2022 at 3:56 AM David, your poetic lines played like a symphony, rising to a crescendo. Congratulations on having written such a well-paced metaphorical drama! David Kavanagh October 3, 2022 at 5:06 AM Heya Lin great to see you visit here today, I hope you’re doing well, the metaphorical power of the symphony refusing to be silenced by the terrific storm raging outside, and perhaps defiantly giving it a run for its money (we shall not be moved) not today anyway, cheers David

Susan Ashley October 2, 2022 at 11:29 AM Dear David, I was swept up and away in the rhythm and intensity of your dramatic and dynamic imagery. I adore the stirring metaphorical power and beauty of this poem that is felt so deeply. I especially loved; “A boy soprano, almost pierced the dome” .. wow! So potent!! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan David Kavanagh October 2, 2022 at 11:57 AM Thank you so much Susan, I’m delighted this one was so well thought of by you, and your critique is most uplifting, it makes my efforts all the more worthwhile, I am so happy with the placement, cheers David

Paulette Calasibetta September 28, 2022 at 5:07 AM I would agree with Mark: "dramatically exhilarating"....you have captured the emotional and spiritual experience with "Amazing Grace". Beautifully penned. :)Paulette David Kavanagh September 30, 2022 at 3:36 AM Thank you Paulette, an uplifting one from me is a rarity, but I really enjoyed writing this one, cheers David

Mark Toney September 27, 2022 at 3:40 PM David, as you mentioned below, "dramatically exhilarating" is what you were looking for and you delivered it big time! Congratulations on your win on Mile 14 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. We're over halfway to the finish line! Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 15 has already started. David Kavanagh September 30, 2022 at 3:35 AM Thank you Mark, one of my more enjoyable poems to write, I’m delighted with the placement in your contest, cheers David

Constance La France September 6, 2022 at 11:10 PM David, excellent Rhyme poem, wonderful writing and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - Let Your Muse Be Inspired, God Bless ~ David Kavanagh September 7, 2022 at 1:26 AM You’re very kind Constance, I was absolutely delighted with the win in your thought provoking contest, hope you are keeping well, cheers David

Beryl Edmonds September 3, 2022 at 1:27 AM So beautiful David, one can imagine the magical scene in church reading your poem. Congratulations on your win in Constance’s contest, well done… Belle David Kavanagh September 3, 2022 at 3:42 AM Thank you so much Belle, hairs standing on the back of one’s neck, from the static electricity building inside, and outside the church, a magical sensation indeed, cheers David

Sara Kendrick September 2, 2022 at 6:46 AM Congratulations on this great winner. Way to go. Sara David Kavanagh September 2, 2022 at 8:58 AM Heya Sara thank you so much for stopping by, I’m delighted as always to get a winner, this one was very enjoyable and uplifting to write, cheers David

Deb M August 21, 2022 at 10:01 AM Oh I love this poem David so beautifully written…..music and storm love them both! Debx David Kavanagh August 21, 2022 at 10:43 AM An enjoyable one to write Deb, music and storm compete and accompany each other, to invigorate the soul, thank you for stopping by, cheers David

Kim Rodrigues August 19, 2022 at 12:55 PM Wow! This was awesome! David Kavanagh August 19, 2022 at 2:20 PM Thank you Kim, as you can see in my poems, much ambivalence dominates my mind, but hey I enjoyed writing this one, cheers David

Jennifer Proxenos August 15, 2022 at 11:38 AM A deep creative write David, a storm can bring out many emotions , and music can also do so, thus a combination of the two can bring about a sense of defiance as all around us chaos is happening, - reminds me of the Spartans. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. David Kavanagh August 15, 2022 at 1:37 PM Thank you Jennifer, yes indeed defiance in the face of adversity from the choir towards the storm, we shall not be moved, cheers David

Tom Cunningham August 10, 2022 at 5:31 PM Enjoyed your dark verse David, the imagery in this one is stunning, the rooftop gargoyles overflowing, the conductor whipped into a frenzy, then calm once more. one word BRAVO. Tom Tom Cunningham August 11, 2022 at 12:51 AM You showed that perfectly David Kavanagh August 11, 2022 at 12:49 AM Thank you Tom, I was perhaps battling natural raw energy from the storm, against the emotional resilience within the choir, as they remained unflinching and defiant, refusing to be silenced by its terrific impact all around them, Cheers David

Jenna Logan August 10, 2022 at 3:24 PM David, your thoughts came from some place deep and dark, and it was dramatically exhilarating! A standing ovation for the maestro whose hand wrote these lines. Jenna Logan August 10, 2022 at 4:01 PM I call em like I see em. ;) David Kavanagh August 10, 2022 at 3:45 PM Heya Jenna, I honestly have no idea where this one came from, I’ve been pretty quiet of late, so dramatically exhilarating is probably what I was looking for, thank you so much I’m delighted with your comment, cheers David