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Beyond the West Window

“The sounds of Earth is the music of my soul” I remember the valley rolled with thunder A section of tenors echoed from above The sky was shredded, by forked lightning Somehow that moment transcended love Static electric rose up through the cloisters The organist played like a demon inspired Rooftop gargoyles overflowed with water And eyes welled up, as if nature conspired Rivers were swollen, the lake was heavy A boy soprano, almost pierced the dome Landslides rumbled away in the distance High on ambivalence, I thought about Rome The conductor was whipped into a frenzy Fitfully pointing his wand in the air As the tempest outside reached crescendo Defiant altos, sang a hymnal prayer Beyond the west window, storms fell silent Shafts of light, shone through from space Together the choir reached out in emotion As they swayed stoically, to Amazing Grace Originally penned 08/10/22 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 14 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Mark Toney 09/13/22

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Date: 10/7/2022 10:31:00 AM
Amazing grace indeed David! This poem overflows with amazing grace, wonderful imagery and great musical metaphors. This is a fav for me. So well done!!! Congrats and high fives for your win! Cheers!
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David Kavanagh
Date: 10/7/2022 11:06:00 AM
Your far too kind Sam, and I’ll take the Fav to my grave, I quite like this one too, was a great feeling when it started coming together, I’ve no idea how or why my muse tapped into this one, but was delighted it did, thanks again, cheers David
Date: 10/3/2022 3:56:00 AM
David, your poetic lines played like a symphony, rising to a crescendo. Congratulations on having written such a well-paced metaphorical drama!
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David Kavanagh
Date: 10/3/2022 5:06:00 AM
Heya Lin great to see you visit here today, I hope you’re doing well, the metaphorical power of the symphony refusing to be silenced by the terrific storm raging outside, and perhaps defiantly giving it a run for its money (we shall not be moved) not today anyway, cheers David
Date: 10/2/2022 11:29:00 AM
Dear David, I was swept up and away in the rhythm and intensity of your dramatic and dynamic imagery. I adore the stirring metaphorical power and beauty of this poem that is felt so deeply. I especially loved; “A boy soprano, almost pierced the dome” .. wow! So potent!! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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David Kavanagh
Date: 10/2/2022 11:57:00 AM
Thank you so much Susan, I’m delighted this one was so well thought of by you, and your critique is most uplifting, it makes my efforts all the more worthwhile, I am so happy with the placement, cheers David
Date: 9/28/2022 7:01:00 AM
The music of nature, such a beautiful subject for this descriptive and poetic piece. You could feel it in your bones as you read the lines. Well done and congrats on the top 10 win.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/30/2022 3:40:00 AM
I’m delighted you felt this one deep down, it makes my efforts worthwhile, I felt it too whilst writing, thank you so much for stopping by Mark, cheers David
Date: 9/28/2022 5:07:00 AM
I would agree with Mark: "dramatically exhilarating"....you have captured the emotional and spiritual experience with "Amazing Grace". Beautifully penned. :)Paulette
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/30/2022 3:36:00 AM
Thank you Paulette, an uplifting one from me is a rarity, but I really enjoyed writing this one, cheers David
Date: 9/27/2022 3:40:00 PM
David, as you mentioned below, "dramatically exhilarating" is what you were looking for and you delivered it big time! Congratulations on your win on Mile 14 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. We're over halfway to the finish line! Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 15 has already started.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/30/2022 3:35:00 AM
Thank you Mark, one of my more enjoyable poems to write, I’m delighted with the placement in your contest, cheers David
Date: 9/6/2022 11:10:00 PM
David, excellent Rhyme poem, wonderful writing and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - Let Your Muse Be Inspired, God Bless ~
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/7/2022 1:26:00 AM
You’re very kind Constance, I was absolutely delighted with the win in your thought provoking contest, hope you are keeping well, cheers David
Date: 9/3/2022 1:27:00 AM
So beautiful David, one can imagine the magical scene in church reading your poem. Congratulations on your win in Constance’s contest, well done… Belle
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2022 3:42:00 AM
Thank you so much Belle, hairs standing on the back of one’s neck, from the static electricity building inside, and outside the church, a magical sensation indeed, cheers David
Date: 9/2/2022 6:46:00 AM
Congratulations on this great winner. Way to go. Sara
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David Kavanagh
Date: 9/2/2022 8:58:00 AM
Heya Sara thank you so much for stopping by, I’m delighted as always to get a winner, this one was very enjoyable and uplifting to write, cheers David
Date: 8/21/2022 10:01:00 AM
Oh I love this poem David so beautifully written…..music and storm love them both! Debx
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Date: 8/21/2022 10:43:00 AM
An enjoyable one to write Deb, music and storm compete and accompany each other, to invigorate the soul, thank you for stopping by, cheers David
Date: 8/19/2022 12:55:00 PM
Wow! This was awesome!
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/19/2022 2:20:00 PM
Thank you Kim, as you can see in my poems, much ambivalence dominates my mind, but hey I enjoyed writing this one, cheers David
Date: 8/15/2022 11:38:00 AM
A deep creative write David, a storm can bring out many emotions , and music can also do so, thus a combination of the two can bring about a sense of defiance as all around us chaos is happening, - reminds me of the Spartans. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/15/2022 1:37:00 PM
Thank you Jennifer, yes indeed defiance in the face of adversity from the choir towards the storm, we shall not be moved, cheers David
Date: 8/10/2022 5:31:00 PM
Enjoyed your dark verse David, the imagery in this one is stunning, the rooftop gargoyles overflowing, the conductor whipped into a frenzy, then calm once more. one word BRAVO. Tom
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 8/11/2022 12:51:00 AM
You showed that perfectly
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/11/2022 12:49:00 AM
Thank you Tom, I was perhaps battling natural raw energy from the storm, against the emotional resilience within the choir, as they remained unflinching and defiant, refusing to be silenced by its terrific impact all around them, Cheers David
Date: 8/10/2022 3:24:00 PM
David, your thoughts came from some place deep and dark, and it was dramatically exhilarating! A standing ovation for the maestro whose hand wrote these lines.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 8/10/2022 4:01:00 PM
I call em like I see em. ;)
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David Kavanagh
Date: 8/10/2022 3:45:00 PM
Heya Jenna, I honestly have no idea where this one came from, I’ve been pretty quiet of late, so dramatically exhilarating is probably what I was looking for, thank you so much I’m delighted with your comment, cheers David

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