Beyond the Breakers

In shallow waters, I look out to sea.
Small waves are lapping, giving me a sting 
upon my legs with their frigidity.
My body, with my thoughts, is wandering
as I wade farther, ever farther out.
Beyond the breakers, I would love to go.
Could anybody even hear me shout
if I were caught inside an undertow?
A splash of violet on twilight’s sky
reminds me I must stay nearby the shore!
Deep feelings surge like waves. I want to cry.
How beautiful it is, yet I want more!
Vast ocean, like my dreams, is out of reach.
I turn away and wade back to my beach.   


Feb. 8, 2017 one of my biggest disappointments for an N/A last year
Now entered for  Line Gauthier's "Another Stunner 2017" Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017


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Date: 4/21/2018 4:50:00 PM
This is a great metaphor, love the poem, Andrea. I am glad to get to see this through Line's contest.
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Date: 4/20/2018 4:44:00 AM
- A great 3rd place in the contest, congratulations, Andrea :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/19/2018 9:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! I enjoyed reading it, excellent imagery and story, describes life.
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Date: 4/19/2018 5:11:00 PM
I really like this piece, Andrea. Congratulations on your strong showing! I like how you come full circle back to the beach from which you started. This is so often true in life. Nice job!! :) Bartholomew
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Date: 4/19/2018 5:06:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea, for entering my contest with this lovely poem. Congrats on your bronze medal win.
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Date: 2/18/2017 12:34:00 PM
You my friend never fail to deliver top level poems, regardless of which poetry form you may write in! This one is a ten in my book..
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Date: 2/12/2017 3:42:00 AM
I was double down sure I'd already commented on this, but I don't see my face down there! Yi. I love the originality behind your approach. Ocean responses continuously roll thru those standing in her waves, but rarely are they shared and that's what I loved about this. Loved it when I read and commented earlier to, I just know it! Love ya ... CayCay
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Date: 2/11/2017 12:47:00 PM
So beautiful and haunting Andrea!:) Sorry I'm floating in less frequently...new year has been busy! Hope you are well..like your wonderful poems:)
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Date: 2/10/2017 11:47:00 PM
A beautiful, emotive sonnet, Andrea! I love the ocean and all the emotion it evokes. Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 2/10/2017 2:24:00 PM
glad you did a sonnet and glad you actually wrote about breakers, nicely done..good luck dear poet
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Date: 2/9/2017 4:07:00 PM
I can hear you my dear....Very beautiful Ms. Sonneteer...
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Date: 2/9/2017 2:22:00 PM
- A touching beauty, Andrea - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/9/2017 1:54:00 PM
Very nicely penned Andrea...GL in the contest...
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Date: 2/9/2017 12:10:00 PM
Oneirologists say dreams of the sea represent an abundance of emotion. Your poem was like a dream sequence in which you both love and fear these emotions (the undertow, being out of reach. Beautiful descriptions of the water and what it represents to you, Andrea. Awesome! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/9/2017 11:23:00 AM
Wading at twilight can be dangerous, Andrea. Loved your sonnet:) Good luck!
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Date: 2/9/2017 10:42:00 AM
love your take on this theme, andie, staying where all is safe... wonderfully penned!.. mail soon.. hugggs
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Date: 2/9/2017 8:42:00 AM
Very enjoyed read. So smooth sonnet.
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Date: 2/9/2017 8:39:00 AM
What a joy to read ... The last two lines lingers on ...
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Date: 2/9/2017 6:37:00 AM
Very beautiful Andrea, the emotions in this poem are definitely felt.
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Date: 2/8/2017 11:07:00 PM
I can relate to the longing expressed in this poem. Beautifully written.
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Date: 2/8/2017 8:55:00 PM
Oh, the pull of the ocean, wise to keep one's head about them when in the water. Super sonnet, Andrea. Nice theme, great rhymes.
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Date: 2/8/2017 8:50:00 PM
ah, I can surely feel the words here! Hugs!
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Date: 2/8/2017 8:45:00 PM
Me too Andrea; am curious but not that curious! Your poem is really good; almost like your having an out of body experience! G/L in the contest!~Che :)
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Date: 2/8/2017 8:31:00 PM
This is a touching thought provoking poem. Another fav for me.
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