Bewitched

Ageless and amazingly, the nerves sing,
butterflies flutter within the begin
like the bowed tension of a cello’s string.

Let the trailing flow of sweet kisses sting.
Pain so close to passion, adrenaline,
ageless and amazingly, the nerves sing.

Nipping ear and throat so breathtaking,
as we fall and roll on the white bear skin
like the bowed tension of a cello’s string.

Peacock feathers trace the grace amazing,
flames dance high on the walls of the cabin
ageless and amazingly, the nerves sing.

Double backed, we ride through the heat lightning.
in the firelight her eyes are fetchin’
like the bowed tension of a cello’s string.

My wife, my life, my so happy ending,
who but thee could there be so bewitchin’?
Ageless and amazingly, the nerves sing,
like the bowed tension of a cello’s string.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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A   Avatar
April 5, 2013 at 7:41 PM
Debbie, ;-) Congratulations with Anne's Favorite Poetry Form: Villanelle! Have yourself a good one. always & forever*LINDA
Jones Avatar
April 4, 2013 at 5:36 PM
Congratulations on your nice winning poem
Roberts Avatar
April 2, 2013 at 10:51 AM
great job Debbie, congrats on your win
Johnson Avatar
April 1, 2013 at 6:00 PM
Congratulations Debbie. Love, Joyce
Dietrich Avatar
April 1, 2013 at 3:17 PM
congrats again, Deb. it is still amazing!
Lamoureux Avatar
April 1, 2013 at 3:09 PM
This is exceptional Debbie, mind you I would expect nothing less. Congratulations.
Devonshire Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 2:42 PM
An excellent poem, Deborah. Quite an amazing villanelle. Congrats on your win! Love, Carolyn
Adeite Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 12:46 PM
Great entry and a worthy win. Enjoy your winnings. keep up the great work. Love, Adeleke
Green Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 9:14 AM
This poem is just amazing. Like the bowed tension on a cello's string, fantastic metaphor. Full of passion and need to satisfy. Love this.
Sweetheart Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 6:35 AM
Congrats Debbie on your winning poem in Dr. Ram's contest with this magnificent piece .. a brilliant write and win for u to enjoy my TEACH... with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii..watching fireworks at 3 a.m....AlohA...
George   Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 4:11 AM
A timeless treasure, this lovely Villanelle, Deborah. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Love, Lainie
Dietrich Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 12:29 AM
great imagery, Deb. Congrats on your SUPER win. LUv, Andrea
Freeman Avatar
July 2, 2010 at 11:11 PM
Congratulations Deborah, on your poem's success in the competition. Agape, Moses
Mehta Avatar
July 2, 2010 at 10:38 PM
Congrats on the 3rd place win in my contest.
Johnson Avatar
July 2, 2010 at 10:14 PM
Great poem Deborah and congratulations. Love, Joyce
Hickman Avatar
June 14, 2010 at 10:36 PM
truly an intriguing piece and a wonderful villanelle for sure,,wishing you the best in the contest, with your talented write,,and Thank You for reading my words and leaving such sweet words behind,,,Blessings..Cecil PS soup mail
Knop Avatar
June 12, 2010 at 7:25 AM
Lovely poem, Deborah! Wish you best of luck in the contest and thank you for your welcome comments..Have a great weekend con grande gioia!! Love, Gert
Sweetheart Avatar
June 11, 2010 at 4:32 PM
Quite lovely TEACH..and good luck in Dr. Ram's contest... a super duper entry.. and graceful words abound... luv the heat lightening..but u knew that right? pupil..luv..
Reed Avatar
June 11, 2010 at 10:04 AM
as the cello ages so does the art of making love. and every old cello ripens with age -- alan
Henderson Avatar
June 10, 2010 at 8:46 PM
You really put this together well. I hope it wins for you. Charles
Goff Avatar
June 10, 2010 at 7:20 PM
style, art, grace, if space allowed, words of praise unending for such a classic....blown-away....to call it my fav scratches but the surface....
Mehta Avatar
June 10, 2010 at 5:26 PM
Thanks for supporting my contest.
A   Avatar
June 10, 2010 at 4:45 PM
such a sweet write, enjoyed...smiles:)
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