Beware

Night is growing bolder, reaching into day. In the amber light mocking shadows play. Howling winds grow stronger--see the branches sway. Trembling leaves cling but soon are torn away. In the amber light mocking shadows play. Outside the fire’s glow something stalks its prey. Trembling leaves cling but soon are torn away. In the chilling darkness, what do the whispers say? Outside the fire’s glow something stalks its prey. Howling winds grow stronger--see the branches sway. In the chilling darkness what do the whispers say? Night is growing bolder, reaching into day. October 16, 2019

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Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 5/24/2020 6:53:00 PM

I just adore this write - a Pantoum is hard to make flow without sounding repetitive, but you have succeeded marvelously here - love it, and going into my faves! (I pray you return, my friend, and hope you're ok). Blessings! :o) <3

P.S. Awtry
Date: 5/24/2020 10:39:00 PM

Thank you so much, you have made my day. I am very honored by your kind words and the fave. I am ok; thank you for asking... but, I am dealing with an awful case of writer's block :(

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/10/2020 9:00:00 AM

You did well with the cube!

P.S. Awtry
Date: 2/10/2020 11:37:00 AM

Thank you Richard :)

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/29/2020 10:18:00 AM

Hello P.S. Awtry,a fire is a terrible thing to go through. Too bad the fire had to burn all night. It has done damage. have a nice day my friend.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 1/30/2020 8:59:00 AM

Darlene thank you for your visit. It is always good to hear from you :)

Quoth Theraven

Date: 12/17/2019 10:05:00 AM

P.S., The night has certainly grown bolder. So well conceived the fiery glow in your Pantoum's reach into the day. -Richard

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/17/2019 4:05:00 PM

Thank you Richard. :)

Panagiota Romios

Date: 12/8/2019 10:52:00 AM

I have never tried this. But you did vet well Panagiota

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/9/2019 4:47:00 PM

Thank you very much Panagiota:)

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 11/27/2019 12:31:00 AM

For one who has expressed reservation on this form, you have done remarkably well in this Pantoum,PS. It has a wonderfully dark and chilling atmosphere, created with your usual skill. Very well done.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 12/1/2019 5:34:00 PM

Thank you very much Geoffrey :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 11/17/2019 10:51:00 AM

This is simply excellent PS! I avoid this form like the plague. : ) xxoo

P.S. Awtry
Date: 11/17/2019 10:41:00 PM

Thank you Connie!

M. L. Kiser

Date: 11/13/2019 4:44:00 PM

Excellent Pautoum! Good luck in the contest.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 11/14/2019 11:30:00 PM

thank you :)

Andrew Fairchild

Date: 11/10/2019 8:37:00 AM

Wonderful! 'Night is growing bolder, reaching into day'. It really IS growing bolder, isn't it? Good for a spinal shiver!

P.S. Awtry
Date: 11/10/2019 10:58:00 PM

Yes, it is in so many ways ... Thank you very much :)

Jon Gutmacher

Date: 11/5/2019 6:26:00 PM

I read several of your poems, but this one was by far my favorite. I loved the word play. Read it a few times, and each time still loved it. jon

P.S. Awtry
Date: 11/5/2019 8:39:00 PM

Glad you liked it Jon :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/21/2019 1:01:00 PM

An amazing write PS - I have never tried this format but all I know is that you are very creative and the poem is so well crafted. A great read. Hugs, Jennifer.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/21/2019 2:33:00 PM

thank you Jennifer... This is one of those where you know what you want to say but just have to hope something like what you are aiming for comes across. Thank you for your kind words :)

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 10/21/2019 7:30:00 AM

Hello P.S. Awtry, a great poem for Halloween. I like this poem. Have a nice day my friend.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/21/2019 9:34:00 AM

Thank you, Darlene! Wishing you a lovely day, too :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 10/17/2019 7:59:00 PM

Wow! Great pantoum. Chillingly effective for me. A winner, methinks. :) gw (Soup mail, please)

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/17/2019 9:56:00 PM

Thank you Gershon! :)

Elaine Perrin

Date: 10/17/2019 10:36:00 AM

Beautiful imagery :-) x

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/17/2019 10:44:00 AM

Thank you Elaine :)

Geoffrey Brewer

Date: 10/17/2019 7:54:00 AM

Your well chosen images and phrases combined in rhythm and rhyme really convey the atmosphere of autumn in this difficult format. Very well written, P.S.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/17/2019 8:26:00 AM

Thank you Geoffrey! You have made my morning. I am glad you said difficult... (edited, see my next poem :D)

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/16/2019 2:46:00 PM

I’ve written quite a few Pantoums, P.S., and they can be tricky little beasts (I use the term ‘ beast’ with affection.. lol), and your poem is as lyrical as it is intriguing. A dark beauty with fantastic rhythm, rhyme, phrasing and imagery. Best wishes for a win, my dear friend, and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/16/2019 3:49:00 PM

They are as much puzzle as poem, I think. Thank you so much for your gracious words about this odd little pantoum! I must admit I ended it more than finished it...Was just so glad to be done with the exercise! :D

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/16/2019 1:22:00 PM

- A poem of admirable quality, P.S. !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/16/2019 1:48:00 PM

thank you Ann-Lise :)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 10/16/2019 12:58:00 PM

I dont find this an easy form to write but you've done a fine job. It just rolls off the tongue. Good luck. Tom.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/16/2019 1:02:00 PM

Thank you Tom. It is an awkward form!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/16/2019 11:29:00 AM

Beautiful colors and sounds of October, P.S..a lovely write--all the best.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/16/2019 11:40:00 AM

Thank you Vijay! Glad you liked it :)

Wendy Watson

Date: 10/16/2019 11:22:00 AM

Yes, this definitely had a lyrical quality with a ring of 'Now the day is over, night is drawing nigh..' to it. It has a slightly threatening feel which you've so cleverly created with your choice of verb forms in particular. This is a really good entry, P.S.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/16/2019 11:38:00 AM

Thank you so much for your insight Wendy :)

Chris Green

Date: 10/16/2019 10:32:00 AM

One of the best I have seen for this contest. Really nice. I loved the feel, the flow of this poem. Though dark, it still came off as a song to me.

P.S. Awtry
Date: 10/16/2019 10:43:00 AM

Funny--I sang this as I wrote it (like in a musical where ordinary dialogue is sung)--interesting that you heard that :D Thank you so much for the feedback Chris!