P.S. Awtry Poet Pantoum

Beware

Night is growing bolder, reaching into day.
In the amber light mocking shadows play.
Howling winds grow stronger--see the branches sway.
Trembling leaves cling but soon are torn away.

In the amber light mocking shadows play.
Outside the fire’s glow something stalks its prey.
Trembling leaves cling but soon are torn away.
In the chilling darkness, what do the whispers say?

Outside the fire’s glow something stalks its prey.
Howling winds grow stronger--see the branches sway.
In the chilling darkness what do the whispers say?
Night is growing bolder, reaching into day.


October 16, 2019

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Gregory Richard Barden May 24, 2020 at 6:53 PM I just adore this write - a Pantoum is hard to make flow without sounding repetitive, but you have succeeded marvelously here - love it, and going into my faves! (I pray you return, my friend, and hope you're ok). Blessings! :o) <3 P.S. Awtry May 24, 2020 at 10:39 PM Thank you so much, you have made my day. I am very honored by your kind words and the fave. I am ok; thank you for asking... but, I am dealing with an awful case of writer's block :(

Richard Lamoureux February 10, 2020 at 9:00 AM You did well with the cube! P.S. Awtry February 10, 2020 at 11:37 AM Thank you Richard :)

Darlene De Beaulieu January 29, 2020 at 10:18 AM Hello P.S. Awtry,a fire is a terrible thing to go through. Too bad the fire had to burn all night. It has done damage. have a nice day my friend. P.S. Awtry January 30, 2020 at 8:59 AM Darlene thank you for your visit. It is always good to hear from you :)

Quoth Theraven December 17, 2019 at 10:05 AM P.S., The night has certainly grown bolder. So well conceived the fiery glow in your Pantoum's reach into the day. -Richard P.S. Awtry December 17, 2019 at 4:05 PM Thank you Richard. :)

Panagiota Romios December 8, 2019 at 10:52 AM I have never tried this. But you did vet well Panagiota P.S. Awtry December 9, 2019 at 4:47 PM Thank you very much Panagiota:)

Geoffrey Brewer November 27, 2019 at 12:31 AM For one who has expressed reservation on this form, you have done remarkably well in this Pantoum,PS. It has a wonderfully dark and chilling atmosphere, created with your usual skill. Very well done. P.S. Awtry December 1, 2019 at 5:34 PM Thank you very much Geoffrey :)

Connie Marcum Wong November 17, 2019 at 10:51 AM This is simply excellent PS! I avoid this form like the plague. : ) xxoo P.S. Awtry November 17, 2019 at 10:41 PM Thank you Connie!

M. L. Kiser November 13, 2019 at 4:44 PM Excellent Pautoum! Good luck in the contest. P.S. Awtry November 14, 2019 at 11:30 PM thank you :)

Andrew Fairchild November 10, 2019 at 8:37 AM Wonderful! 'Night is growing bolder, reaching into day'. It really IS growing bolder, isn't it? Good for a spinal shiver! P.S. Awtry November 10, 2019 at 10:58 PM Yes, it is in so many ways ... Thank you very much :)

Jon Gutmacher November 5, 2019 at 6:26 PM I read several of your poems, but this one was by far my favorite. I loved the word play. Read it a few times, and each time still loved it. jon P.S. Awtry November 5, 2019 at 8:39 PM Glad you liked it Jon :)

Jennifer Proxenos October 21, 2019 at 1:01 PM An amazing write PS - I have never tried this format but all I know is that you are very creative and the poem is so well crafted. A great read. Hugs, Jennifer. P.S. Awtry October 21, 2019 at 2:33 PM thank you Jennifer... This is one of those where you know what you want to say but just have to hope something like what you are aiming for comes across. Thank you for your kind words :)

Darlene De Beaulieu October 21, 2019 at 7:30 AM Hello P.S. Awtry, a great poem for Halloween. I like this poem. Have a nice day my friend. P.S. Awtry October 21, 2019 at 9:34 AM Thank you, Darlene! Wishing you a lovely day, too :)

Gershon Wolf October 17, 2019 at 7:59 PM Wow! Great pantoum. Chillingly effective for me. A winner, methinks. :) gw (Soup mail, please) P.S. Awtry October 17, 2019 at 9:56 PM Thank you Gershon! :)

Elaine Perrin October 17, 2019 at 10:36 AM Beautiful imagery :-) x P.S. Awtry October 17, 2019 at 10:44 AM Thank you Elaine :)

Geoffrey Brewer October 17, 2019 at 7:54 AM Your well chosen images and phrases combined in rhythm and rhyme really convey the atmosphere of autumn in this difficult format. Very well written, P.S. P.S. Awtry October 17, 2019 at 8:26 AM Thank you Geoffrey! You have made my morning. I am glad you said difficult... (edited, see my next poem :D)

Susan Ashley October 16, 2019 at 2:46 PM I’ve written quite a few Pantoums, P.S., and they can be tricky little beasts (I use the term ‘ beast’ with affection.. lol), and your poem is as lyrical as it is intriguing. A dark beauty with fantastic rhythm, rhyme, phrasing and imagery. Best wishes for a win, my dear friend, and warmest wishes for you.. ~Susan P.S. Awtry October 16, 2019 at 3:49 PM They are as much puzzle as poem, I think. Thank you so much for your gracious words about this odd little pantoum! I must admit I ended it more than finished it...Was just so glad to be done with the exercise! :D

Anne-Lise Andresen October 16, 2019 at 1:22 PM - A poem of admirable quality, P.S. !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :) P.S. Awtry October 16, 2019 at 1:48 PM thank you Ann-Lise :)

Tom Cunningham October 16, 2019 at 12:58 PM I dont find this an easy form to write but you've done a fine job. It just rolls off the tongue. Good luck. Tom. P.S. Awtry October 16, 2019 at 1:02 PM Thank you Tom. It is an awkward form!

Vijay Pandit October 16, 2019 at 11:29 AM Beautiful colors and sounds of October, P.S..a lovely write--all the best. P.S. Awtry October 16, 2019 at 11:40 AM Thank you Vijay! Glad you liked it :)

Wendy Watson October 16, 2019 at 11:22 AM Yes, this definitely had a lyrical quality with a ring of 'Now the day is over, night is drawing nigh..' to it. It has a slightly threatening feel which you've so cleverly created with your choice of verb forms in particular. This is a really good entry, P.S. P.S. Awtry October 16, 2019 at 11:38 AM Thank you so much for your insight Wendy :)

Chris Green October 16, 2019 at 10:32 AM One of the best I have seen for this contest. Really nice. I loved the feel, the flow of this poem. Though dark, it still came off as a song to me. P.S. Awtry October 16, 2019 at 10:43 AM Funny--I sang this as I wrote it (like in a musical where ordinary dialogue is sung)--interesting that you heard that :D Thank you so much for the feedback Chris!