Betty the Cook

What a spectacle Betty was making
of herself in the kitchen while baking.
She kept tripping and falling.
Other cooks found it galling
all the dishes each day she kept breaking.

Today it’s much better she’s faring,
for the cause was made known for her erring.
Betty now feels relieved
that her boss is not peeved
since new spectacles she has been wearing!


(this has now been revised as a quintain for Joe maverick's contest.
If you happen to see the quintain version. I'm just curious to 
to know which seems more effective, this limerick version or the quintain form?)

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Date: 7/28/2015 10:40:00 PM
G'day Andrea... I really enjoy reading well written limericks with a proper message and this set is great - Lindsay
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Date: 4/29/2014 10:40:00 PM
Andrea Such a cute and clever write. An amusing tale of this "blind" waitress that is causing trouble. Thank you for the great comment on my Graveyard poem.
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Date: 2/10/2013 11:41:00 PM
Ha...it's past midnight here... and your still up...thank you for the comment.. xox...pd
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Date: 1/16/2013 8:11:00 PM
Nice write on this one Andrea. Well now I am up to the new year reading this poem. Brings me up to the year anyway. love phyl
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Date: 1/13/2013 9:09:00 AM
In regards to your qestion, Andrea, I think the limerick form suits your poem way better. The stress patterns for the one above are nearly perfect and the lines the same length, so far as I can tell without counting. The quintain version would in my opinion be much better if it had a stressed syllable pattern like the one above. Most of the above is anapestic, which means that the pattern is two unstressed syllables followed by a stressed. I found this one to be more correct and funnier. Isaiah
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Date: 1/3/2013 6:09:00 AM
I have read both and I like the Quintain more...best wishes in both contest...
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Date: 1/2/2013 4:36:00 PM
Are you writing about Betty Crocker? Maybe her recipes are better than her cooking skills....lol. You painted quite a delightful visual and write! Hope this coming year is your best! Hugs
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Date: 1/2/2013 5:38:00 PM
hahaha, I did not even think about that. She could be Betty crocker!!! I just used her name for the sake of meter and I did not know any Bettys at Soup that people might think I was trying to write about!!!
Date: 1/2/2013 4:19:00 PM
Thanks! :) Everybody loves a good limerick. And you've been writing some gems. Going to check out the other version now. Keep em' comin'.
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Date: 1/2/2013 3:39:00 PM
good lim'SANDY
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:52:00 PM
Hum! confused, but it don't matter. enjoyed the revised poem. both of them. *LUV~SKAT
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:31:00 PM
both versions work for me, Andrea
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:21:00 PM
This is a good one. Thanks for sharing and good luck in Contest. Lucilla
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Date: 1/2/2013 12:58:00 PM
Andrea love these, just off to read the other now..David
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Date: 1/2/2013 9:04:00 AM
Great limerick Andrea :D good luck for your contest :D happy new year :D
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Date: 1/2/2013 8:33:00 AM
New spectacles are not always the answer, especially if you are ancient and with watery eyes. Superb maverick. I am definitely going to get a new pair for 2013, that is a new pair of what is possible to replace. Love, daver
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Date: 1/2/2013 8:21:00 AM
This is an awesome Limerick my dear Andrea! I love it so much especially the last lines. It gives me a big smile! A winner for me! I wish you all the best and luck in the contest! love and hugs, Leonora
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Date: 1/2/2013 8:16:00 AM
Bon Apetit! Happy New Year! Peace&Love MatthewAnish
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Date: 1/2/2013 8:07:00 AM
I'm supposed to wear glasses but my ego will not allow...I look ridiculous in them! (Pathetic, ain't it?) But I do wear my prescription sunglasses cause they make me look really cool...Funny, funny limerick!...I would like to enter Joe's contest but am clueless about what he's looking for...
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Date: 1/2/2013 6:47:00 AM
Funny one, Andrea. You'll do good in the contest. Enjoyed!
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Date: 1/2/2013 5:25:00 AM
bring em on Andrea, these are wonderful....
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Date: 1/2/2013 2:29:00 AM
lovely poem my friend Andrea...Have a blessed New Year to you and to your family :) Hugs, Maria
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Date: 1/2/2013 2:16:00 AM
Hi sweetie--upon reading your title, I had this mindset of Betty Boop cooking, haha. don't ask. So all along, I was thinking she was having a hard time with wearing those high heels so it was refreshing to me to read the ending line-- not what I was expecting-- maybe Betty is getting old and needs glasses. haha. Thanks btw for letting me know about Cyndi's blog, will leave her a note --I owe you emails! hugs to you sweetie!!
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:38:00 AM
Love em Andy , you have the knack love xx
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Date: 1/2/2013 1:19:00 AM
wow, I really like this one. Keep up the good work - JH
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Date: 1/1/2013 11:28:00 PM
what a delightful poem...so cute! love,Deb
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