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Better Peices

You were old and new all at once A deadly temptation A glitch in my solid nature And so I dove head first And as I did I watched the pieces Of me break away To reveal an alien A rawness, a vulnerability I had never thought I possessed Yet there I was And there you were unchanged And unaware that I was scrambling For my better peices

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 5/27/2015 4:27:00 AM
Amazing write
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Date: 2/12/2014 3:59:00 PM
Love this surreal poetry and the quick, tasty lines which had be nodding my head as though I understood everything you said. I did in my own way.
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/12/2014 4:13:00 PM
Thank you and i'm glad it is relatable to others :)
Date: 2/12/2014 4:29:00 AM
"we need to give space to that alien to live..." small chirpy poem...... - - akash
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/12/2014 8:16:00 AM
I agree, thank you for reading and commenting :)
Date: 2/9/2014 10:17:00 PM
crazy bout this.
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/10/2014 10:17:00 AM
Thank you :)
Date: 2/7/2014 9:18:00 AM
Fantastic! I love the ending "scrambling for the pieces" Sometimes love leaves us with broken shards. Welcome to the soup. I look forward to reading more from you
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/10/2014 10:18:00 AM
Thank you :)
Date: 2/6/2014 3:50:00 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup,Sarah- I choose your first well written poem - hope you will write many poem in the future- Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- PoetrySoup Rule1: Be kind and keep PoetrySoup a haven. PoetrySoup is a drama free zone(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/6/2014 5:48:00 PM
Sounds good to me :) thank you for the support I hope to post many more for you to read! :)
Date: 2/6/2014 3:14:00 AM
Sarah, Your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers!! Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* SKAT
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/6/2014 5:46:00 PM
Thanks so much for the lovely comment, I hope to put up many more! and get to know some cool people on poetry soup! :)
Date: 2/5/2014 6:14:00 PM
Well, Sarah, watching one scramble for the better pieces, can't be too thrilled, However, this is a kicka$$ poem. I love how raw you revealed love never is what it should be.... Enjoyed... Hope you find a nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup, and find a liking to this community, many of us here are like a happy family. (With Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Sarah Muldoon
Date: 2/6/2014 5:45:00 PM
Thanks so much for the warm welcome! Glad you enjoyed my poem I cant wait to explore poetry soup :)

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