Better Accomodations For a God

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People in their Faith erected what they could as their technology progressed.
This is a Comparison of Salisbury Cathedral and Stonehenge (On the Salisbury Plain)
Each constructed with a great effort and danger and financial sacrifice.

Better Accommodations for a God
Oh Stately spire from distance seen.
Your young visage, causes you to preen .
Your Circular face, shows no time.
Boisterous Bells, comfort minds Divine.
Though haughty and Sanctimonious you are. 
You owe your fame to a kin not far.
Upon a plain that shares the name
You were given in another King’s Reign
Not still grand like you.
Henges  strewn from nature’s rage
Resided their God of another age.
Blocks of stone, that simple people Raised.
Not long before, they shared a Cave.
Both sites no more sanctified.
People built them at a sacrifice
Money and Sweat and their Lives.

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Funom Makama

Date: 10/28/2014 7:34:00 AM

Epic and everlasting... Simply brilliant!

Kieran Pavlick
Date: 10/28/2014 8:54:00 AM

Thank you. I always seek Shibumi. Shibumi is a Zen concept without direct translation in Japanese or definition in English; it is the height of personal excellence and total clarity. “It’s the ability to achieve the maximum effect with the minimum means,” Of course saying there is no definition in English and then trying to define it, is showing a lack of Shibumi. It is Like trying to describe a ocean to a person who has always lived in the desert.