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Betrayed

bitter bitter
he hacks the weeds
sharp blade in the sunlight
swish onto the tall grass,
shovel into the dirt 
timing
beats of his heart
shirtless he sweats 
into the noon sun
turning the dirt
moving the earth
bitter bitter taste in his mouth
betrayed again
again
hands are steady
heart is strong
except the pain 
in the center
in the center.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 6/27/2009 10:21:00 PM
vbery well described details of the labor as well the sufferring of pain and heartache that the subject endures,,,and Thank you for the words you left behind after reading my words,,blessings..Cecil
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Date: 6/26/2009 10:40:00 AM
thank you
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Date: 6/25/2009 6:14:00 PM
Nice poem! I like the line"bitter bitter taste in his moputh! Yours Matthew Anish
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Date: 6/24/2009 12:19:00 PM
Nice use of imagery and alliteration for a creative view. This poem could be classified as a free verse. Much to think about in this poem. Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Keep on writing. Karen
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