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Betrayal

Here lies the grave of innocence

Where despair tainted charity

Where hope broke in crumbled pretense

Betrayed by darkened clarity.

7/27/20

Entered in 'Your Best Quatrain' contest

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Sara Kendrick

August 8, 2021 at 6:43 AM

Betray or betrayal is a bad experience in life. Enjoyed reading your creative winner. Way to go. Congrats. Sara

Sam Kauffman

August 6, 2021 at 10:12 AM

Ouch! There is nothing more tragic in this world than the loss of hope. Beautiful blending of images - "grave of innocence," "crumbled pretense." This is impactful in its masterfully written brevity. A fav for me and a master class in imagery! Congratulations on your win!

Christuraj Alex

August 6, 2021 at 7:11 AM

Beautiful Quatrain. Congratulations on your win!

Gershon Wolf

August 2, 2020 at 8:09 PM

A well-deserved win here, Michelle. Way to go! ~ Gershon

Caren Krutsinger

July 31, 2020 at 4:07 PM

A fine quatrain. Congratulations on your win!

Constance La France

July 29, 2020 at 5:20 PM

Michelle, congratulations on your win in my 4 line contest with this wonderful write _Constance

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

July 28, 2020 at 7:11 PM

Back with congratulations! xomo <3

Line Gauthier

July 28, 2020 at 6:34 PM

Wow awesome, Michelle. Bravo, congrats on your most deserving win.

Andrea Dietrich

July 28, 2020 at 5:21 PM

Nice and dark one just like Constance ordered. I don't know your placement but I bet you got a good one. Congrats!

Aditi Mishra

July 28, 2020 at 1:26 PM

Your muse reflects multiple facets of our society so well Michelle. Congratulations on your win!

John Watt

July 28, 2020 at 9:58 AM

Your pithy poem paints a huge landscape of broken humanity, my friend. Congrats for your win, keep penning these beauties. ~ John

Carolyn Devonshire

July 28, 2020 at 8:34 AM

Just stopping back with congratulations on your win! Well deserved.

Jenna Logan

July 28, 2020 at 4:38 AM

Betrayal is devastating. Congratulations on your lines being honored in the contest.

Anne-Lise Andresen

July 28, 2020 at 2:59 AM

- Four deep lines ... congratulations on your win, Michelle :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jenish Somadas

July 27, 2020 at 11:19 PM

Profound verse.. Great entry Michelle.. Good luck..

John Watt

July 27, 2020 at 2:32 PM

Great depth, Michelle. I detect maybe a theme in some of your serious writes (crumbled pretense)? Loved your opening line. Warmly ~ John

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

July 27, 2020 at 12:51 PM

Ooh, were we writing about the same person? (my mother) ;), Potent penning! Good luck in the contest, xomo!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

July 28, 2020 at 8:12 AM

Thank you <3

Michelle Faulkner

July 27, 2020 at 2:10 PM

I guess we were on the same wavelength, but I didn't know about your mother; I'm so sorry for your loss, Mo-

Vijay Pandit

July 27, 2020 at 12:35 PM

I hear the voice of betrayal--you expressed it succinctly, Michelle: ...Where hope broke in crumbled pretense..

Michelle Faulkner

July 27, 2020 at 2:12 PM

Thank you for your comment, appreciate it, Vijay-

Rico Leffanta

July 27, 2020 at 11:34 AM

The voice of Experience? Aloha! Rico

Michelle Faulkner

July 27, 2020 at 2:11 PM

Somewhat, I guess!

Carolyn Devonshire

July 27, 2020 at 11:01 AM

The betrayal of an innocent one is well depicted in your powerful poem, Michelle. The despair and break down of hope touch the reader's heart. Beautifully penned and surely a winner in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Michelle Faulkner

July 27, 2020 at 2:08 PM

Thank you kindly, Carolyn

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