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Betrayal

Here lies the grave of innocence

Where despair tainted charity

Where hope broke in crumbled pretense

Betrayed by darkened clarity.

7/27/20

Entered in 'Your Best Quatrain' contest

Copyright © Michelle Faulkner | Year Posted 2020

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Sara Kendrick Date: 8/8/2021 6:43:00 AM Betray or betrayal is a bad experience in life. Enjoyed reading your creative winner. Way to go. Congrats. Sara Login to Reply

Sam Kauffman Date: 8/6/2021 10:12:00 AM Ouch! There is nothing more tragic in this world than the loss of hope. Beautiful blending of images - "grave of innocence," "crumbled pretense." This is impactful in its masterfully written brevity. A fav for me and a master class in imagery! Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply

Christuraj Alex Date: 8/6/2021 7:11:00 AM Beautiful Quatrain. Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply

Gershon Wolf Date: 8/2/2020 8:09:00 PM A well-deserved win here, Michelle. Way to go! ~ Gershon Login to Reply

Caren Krutsinger Date: 7/31/2020 4:07:00 PM A fine quatrain. Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 7/29/2020 5:20:00 PM Michelle, congratulations on your win in my 4 line contest with this wonderful write _Constance Login to Reply

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 7/28/2020 7:11:00 PM Back with congratulations! xomo <3 Login to Reply

Line Gauthier Date: 7/28/2020 6:34:00 PM Wow awesome, Michelle. Bravo, congrats on your most deserving win. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/28/2020 5:21:00 PM Nice and dark one just like Constance ordered. I don't know your placement but I bet you got a good one. Congrats! Login to Reply

Aditi Mishra Date: 7/28/2020 1:26:00 PM Your muse reflects multiple facets of our society so well Michelle. Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply

John Watt Date: 7/28/2020 9:58:00 AM Your pithy poem paints a huge landscape of broken humanity, my friend. Congrats for your win, keep penning these beauties. ~ John Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 7/28/2020 8:34:00 AM Just stopping back with congratulations on your win! Well deserved. Login to Reply

Jenna Logan Date: 7/28/2020 4:38:00 AM Betrayal is devastating. Congratulations on your lines being honored in the contest. Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 7/28/2020 2:59:00 AM - Four deep lines ... congratulations on your win, Michelle :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Jenish Somadas Date: 7/27/2020 11:19:00 PM Profound verse.. Great entry Michelle.. Good luck.. Login to Reply

John Watt Date: 7/27/2020 2:32:00 PM Great depth, Michelle. I detect maybe a theme in some of your serious writes (crumbled pretense)? Loved your opening line. Warmly ~ John Login to Reply

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 7/27/2020 12:51:00 PM Ooh, were we writing about the same person? (my mother) ;), Potent penning! Good luck in the contest, xomo! Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 7/28/2020 8:12:00 AM Thank you <3 Michelle Faulkner Date: 7/27/2020 2:10:00 PM I guess we were on the same wavelength, but I didn't know about your mother; I'm so sorry for your loss, Mo-

Vijay Pandit Date: 7/27/2020 12:35:00 PM I hear the voice of betrayal--you expressed it succinctly, Michelle: ...Where hope broke in crumbled pretense.. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 7/27/2020 2:12:00 PM Thank you for your comment, appreciate it, Vijay-

Rico Leffanta Date: 7/27/2020 11:34:00 AM The voice of Experience? Aloha! Rico Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 7/27/2020 2:11:00 PM Somewhat, I guess!

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 7/27/2020 11:01:00 AM The betrayal of an innocent one is well depicted in your powerful poem, Michelle. The despair and break down of hope touch the reader's heart. Beautifully penned and surely a winner in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 7/27/2020 2:08:00 PM Thank you kindly, Carolyn