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Betrayal

Here lies the grave of innocence Where despair tainted charity Where hope broke in crumbled pretense Betrayed by darkened clarity. 7/27/20 Entered in 'Your Best Quatrain' contest

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/8/2021 6:43:00 AM

Betray or betrayal is a bad experience in life. Enjoyed reading your creative winner. Way to go. Congrats. Sara

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/6/2021 10:12:00 AM

Ouch! There is nothing more tragic in this world than the loss of hope. Beautiful blending of images - "grave of innocence," "crumbled pretense." This is impactful in its masterfully written brevity. A fav for me and a master class in imagery! Congratulations on your win!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/6/2021 7:11:00 AM

Beautiful Quatrain. Congratulations on your win!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 8/2/2020 8:09:00 PM

A well-deserved win here, Michelle. Way to go! ~ Gershon

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 7/31/2020 4:07:00 PM

A fine quatrain. Congratulations on your win!

Constance La France

Date: 7/29/2020 5:20:00 PM

Michelle, congratulations on your win in my 4 line contest with this wonderful write _Constance

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 7/28/2020 7:11:00 PM

Back with congratulations! xomo <3

Line Gauthier

Date: 7/28/2020 6:34:00 PM

Wow awesome, Michelle. Bravo, congrats on your most deserving win.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/28/2020 5:21:00 PM

Nice and dark one just like Constance ordered. I don't know your placement but I bet you got a good one. Congrats!

Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/28/2020 1:26:00 PM

Your muse reflects multiple facets of our society so well Michelle. Congratulations on your win!

John Watt

Date: 7/28/2020 9:58:00 AM

Your pithy poem paints a huge landscape of broken humanity, my friend. Congrats for your win, keep penning these beauties. ~ John

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/28/2020 8:34:00 AM

Just stopping back with congratulations on your win! Well deserved.

Jenna Logan

Date: 7/28/2020 4:38:00 AM

Betrayal is devastating. Congratulations on your lines being honored in the contest.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/28/2020 2:59:00 AM

- Four deep lines ... congratulations on your win, Michelle :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jenish Somadas

Date: 7/27/2020 11:19:00 PM

Profound verse.. Great entry Michelle.. Good luck..

John Watt

Date: 7/27/2020 2:32:00 PM

Great depth, Michelle. I detect maybe a theme in some of your serious writes (crumbled pretense)? Loved your opening line. Warmly ~ John

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 7/27/2020 12:51:00 PM

Ooh, were we writing about the same person? (my mother) ;), Potent penning! Good luck in the contest, xomo!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 7/28/2020 8:12:00 AM

Thank you <3

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/27/2020 2:10:00 PM

I guess we were on the same wavelength, but I didn't know about your mother; I'm so sorry for your loss, Mo-

Vijay Pandit

Date: 7/27/2020 12:35:00 PM

I hear the voice of betrayal--you expressed it succinctly, Michelle: ...Where hope broke in crumbled pretense..

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/27/2020 2:12:00 PM

Thank you for your comment, appreciate it, Vijay-

Rico Leffanta

Date: 7/27/2020 11:34:00 AM

The voice of Experience? Aloha! Rico

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/27/2020 2:11:00 PM

Somewhat, I guess!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/27/2020 11:01:00 AM

The betrayal of an innocent one is well depicted in your powerful poem, Michelle. The despair and break down of hope touch the reader's heart. Beautifully penned and surely a winner in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 7/27/2020 2:08:00 PM

Thank you kindly, Carolyn