Lin Lane Poet Monorhyme

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Beneath the Ancient Aspen

Into a thick stand of autumn's golden aspen I flee
Dark eyes in ghostly bark faces seem to follow me
Wind whispering through the yellow leaves decree,
"Rest, child. We offer you safety and tranquility."

What voice speaks in this mysterious forest.. a tree?
If I have gone insane, I shall drown myself in the sea.
"No, little one. Insanity in you I plainly do not foresee.
Have no fear. I am no ogre or something more beastly."

"I am the eldest of ancient ones. That is not a hyperbole.
Planted as seedling, I've reached decades of thirty-three.
In all that time this grove has sheltered those who plea.
If it's escape you wish, nature gives you this sanctuary."

Most venerable elder aspen, I shall drop to one knee
giving you thanks for your most gracious hospitality.
A bed I would make of your fallen leaves, so feathery.
I hope you give consent for I am as weary as I can be.

"Beneath my branches take rest and restore your energy.
In the shade of my sylvan forest, close your eyes and see
That deep inside your fearful soul,  you alone hold the key
To unlock the chains that bind you, and set your heart free."

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James Inman June 18, 2016 at 5:31 PM This is a wonderful write Lin. You have captured the mystery and magic of an ancient sacred place somewhere deep in the dark wood. Your mono-rhyme is very well done with a smooth flow.

Kelly Deschler May 20, 2016 at 8:30 PM Monorhymes can be tricky to write, but it works so well here. These wonderful lines just flow so freely... Very nicely done, Lin! Good luck in Shadow's contest! Lin Lane May 20, 2016 at 9:11 PM Thank you, Kelly.

Tim Smith May 16, 2016 at 9:42 AM A magnificent piece Lin. I missed so many good poems lately. Trying to catch up. Hard to find time with the kids spring sports. Lin Lane May 16, 2016 at 9:51 AM Your children are so much more important, Tim, but thank you for reading this one.

The Grahamburglar May 15, 2016 at 8:24 PM I have a special place in my heart for Aspens. When I was younger, my family would go camping in the high altitude of the Uinta Mountains in Utah. Up there Aspens and conifers are all you can find. I love the way aspen leaves sound in the wind! I hope you do well in the contest, this is an excellent write. Whatever the outcome, it gets a 7 from me. -G Lin Lane May 15, 2016 at 9:48 PM Thank you very much, G. I loved the aspen when I lived in Colorado. Your comments and rating are very generous, and I appreciate them.

Robert Lindley May 12, 2016 at 6:33 PM This is the second poem you've written tat I read tonight and added to my fav list. The other faved poem was your collaboration poem with Vlad, "Celtic Dreams", which simply floored me!!A7 Lin Lane May 12, 2016 at 11:07 PM Your love of my poetry and the collab. with Mike makes me smile. Thank you, Robert. I'm not sure if I'll post any longer here, but I want you to know I've always appreciated your poetry and your kind and sincere comments.

Eve Roper May 12, 2016 at 9:49 AM Wow! This is so good, Lin, I know she will like this. Good luck !hugs Lin Lane May 12, 2016 at 3:10 PM Thank you, Eve. I'm glad you like it. ;)

Reason A. Poteet May 11, 2016 at 9:00 AM Very nice, Lin, excellent use of the bank of words for Shadow's contest. I wish you the best. A calming place; you relay a sense of peace. Lin Lane May 11, 2016 at 9:24 PM Thank you very much, Reason ;)

Vladislav Raven May 10, 2016 at 5:42 AM Hi Lin, a beautiful flow of gentle words laid before us in this excellent write from your pen. This poem is a wonder in itself, as a contest entry it should do really well. Once again your words hold me in awe from the start to the finish. The expectation is high when i read your work and i am never let down by your work. May the glory of your golden pen ever shine. Hugs....Mike. XX. This is a definite seven. Lin Lane May 10, 2016 at 6:28 AM What a pleasant comment to see so early in the morning. Thank you, Mike.

Joseph May May 9, 2016 at 1:08 PM Expressed quite impressively....enjoyed... Lin Lane May 9, 2016 at 3:26 PM Thank you very much, Joseph.

Janice Canerdy May 9, 2016 at 11:51 AM A 7-plus, Lin. So skillfully-written and thought-provoking. Janice Lin Lane May 9, 2016 at 1:01 PM That's very generous of you, Janice. Thanks a lot.

Sandra Haight May 9, 2016 at 11:09 AM I love how you wrote this, Lin. Beautifully done with amazing monorhyme and use of the special words. Best wishes for the contest...a top winner, I'm sure! Hugs, Sandra Lin Lane May 9, 2016 at 1:01 PM Thank you for your kind comments, Sandra. It's always nice to have you visit. Hugs back to you.

Kim Rodrigues May 9, 2016 at 10:18 AM Absolutely beautiful!! Lin Lane May 9, 2016 at 10:50 AM Thank you very much, Kim.

James Inman May 9, 2016 at 8:25 AM Delightful write Lin. I wrote 2 and half stanzas for the contest and accidentally erased it. Oooops! Lin Lane May 9, 2016 at 8:54 AM Oh no, James! That's an awful thing to have happen. Maybe you can remember what you'd written. Or... you'll think of something even better. That's happened to me. Thanks for liking this one.

Phil Capitano May 9, 2016 at 7:42 AM Simply magnificent!!! I hope you have found the key to unlock the chains that bind your heart. Lin Lane May 9, 2016 at 8:53 AM Thank you for your kind comment, Phil. I don't think I want to keep looking for that key.

Charlie Smith May 9, 2016 at 6:54 AM Nice Monorhyme Lin, best wishes for a successful contest... Lin Lane May 9, 2016 at 8:51 AM Mornin' Charlie and thank you.